Liberty

@savannah_grace2009

No!!! nononono!! No spoilers!!! Spoilers are not allowed. N.O. They are illegal!!!!

Yay!! Can’t wait for the next chapter.

However…I have a bad habit of info dumping backstory in the first chapter

Why does that sound so familiar…….. *looks over the last 20 first chapters I’ve written in the past year* Oh… that’s w…[Read more]

@trailblazer

speaking like an adult to then sleeping on Flavia’s lap, which to me seems more like something a six-year-old would do.

Ok, that makes sense. I can switch him to leaning on her shoulder.

maybe do something like this the first time you mention it: Jesus Christ, the Prince of Life.

I like that. Sounds good. T…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Is that bad that Thaddeus seems mature, but then there are also glimpses of him being childish, or do I need to go with one or the other? Also, are there particular times when what he says seems overly mature?

I don’t think it’s bad to show maturity and then have him resume normal childhood behavior. It just seemed like he was…[Read more]

@rae

Awesome! I have a really good idea for this one! I can’t wait to blow your mind with a…… very bad impression of him. lol. We’ll see if I can pull my idea off and if it actully looks as good as I think it will.

You DO NOT want to see me previous drawing attempts. They were just creepy. I don’t really have anything else though…I’ll try d…

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@highscribeofaetherium

@theshadow

Great guys!!! I can’t wait to see what you give me to draw! I’ll do multiple characters for each of you, you’ll just have to send them one at a time. Whoever sends one first gets it drawn first. lol.

@savannah_grace2009

What is the plot of my story!!? Oh girl you can’t make me do that. I HATE spoilers. I can’t stand that. *sob* *sob*

I mean….. I guess I could try a little…… OK…. let’s see.

I guess, well…. Ah, I’m no good at this! OK, I guess it started when I overheard a conversation from a group of young men saying Christianity…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Oooo, this is getting good. I’m not sure if there’s a lot of critique I can give, because again, it’s just getting itself off the ground, and it seems really smooth. (way smoother then my first chapter! I think you’re in your element writing fantasy!)

Of course, I would love to know more about these characters, what time…[Read more]

Oooo, this is getting good. I’m not sure if there’s a lot of critique I can give, because again, it’s just getting itself off the ground, and it seems really smooth. (way smoother then my first chapter! I think you’re in your element writing fantasy!)

Of course, I would love to know more about these characters, what time period they live in, (or…[Read more]

@keilah-h

do you have a picture of Tenz? A drawing, faceclaim picture, anything?

You DO NOT want to see me previous drawing attempts. They were just creepy. I don’t really have anything else though…I’ll try drawing a picture that’s actually good for once.

Sorry, guys, our internet was out for a while cuz of a storm.

@highscribeofaetherium

Uh…stars, that’s weirdly stated. Sorry, it basically means the triangle scale is at an angle.

@ellette-giselle

Yeah. He may or may not have a slightly longer torso than average. Since I haven’t made that official yet, I omitted it from description.

@whalekeeper

I am finally jumping on here but I’m still sort of undecided which WIP I want to highlight… I feel like most of my WIP’s are either incomplete or I haven’t fully fleshed out the plot yet… or I’m considering turning into a series rather than one book but don’t really know yet. OK, I think I know which one I’ll do. Here we go! I…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Just a few quick notes-

-Thaddeus is ten, but sometimes he seems older (which is fine for him to be mature for his age, but sometimes it sounded like an adult talking) and sometimes he seems younger (when he is sleeping with his head in Flavia’s lap).

-A couple times when Caius is sharing the Gospel, he used more than one name…[Read more]

@rae

So I’m guessing Tenz looks like a normal-ish human. I mean, same form?

@linus-smallprin

Thanks so much for the heads up! I’ll take a look! That sounds like fun!

@savannah_grace2009

Do you have any more besides the prologue written? I would love to read more and give some feedback?

@savannah_grace2009

Oh no worries!!! Whenever you get the chance!

and here’s Chapter 5.

I hope I’m not swamping Y’all!

 
Chapter 5
“In the beginning, Marcus, there was nothing,” began Caius. “God, created the heavens and the earth, and all that lies in between. Then, he fashioned the first man and breathed the breath of life into him. For the man, he made a helper; the first woman. Together they lived in a bea…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks for the encouragement. I still feel like running back to the safety of fiction, but I am determined to stick this one out.

Can’t wait to hear your thoughts on Chapter 4.

I almost have chapter five done too. I’m starting to slide into my writing roll. lol.

@savannah_grace2009

I think it has a really good start! I just can’t wait to see where it’s going.

Yeah, maybe take Puddleglum *clears throat* I mean, that other writing coach, with a grain of salt. Scratch that, maybe a pillar of salt. lol. However, I will say that there is something to be learned from everyone. So, try to see the gold in the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

For some reason your comment didn’t load until just now! (I love bad internet. lol) Anyways, thank you so much for the feedback!!

Good, I’m glad I was able to incorporate some of your suggestions in that one!

Oh I love what you did in the example. Perfect. I get so caught up in making sure the info that is needed is there,…[Read more]