Liberty

@ellette-giselle

By the way, this article isn’t (or maybe it is) about psychological suffering, but since I’m pretty sure it’s point is what you’re intending in your stories, I’ll share it. It definitely changed the way I think of pain.

And it’s hilarious, so you know. Thought you’d enjoy.…[Read more]

I’m no longer surprised when a character is taken/died. In fact, I was expecting it any time now. That’s not good.

Is it though? I mean sure, in modern storytelling that is a thing to reserve for smacking readers with, but could the fact that no one is safe almost be a shock in in of itself? Maybe I’ve read too much from early church histo…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Ok, I will say that I enjoyed how it was carried off in this section. I agree with what @linus-smallprint said about that. It reminded me of The Healer by Dee Henderson. (A book about facing the grief of a broken world.) Very good.

What I say is redundant is the fact that it feels like more characters are dying than those who…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

thanks so much for this feedback.

im not going to say anything so as not to shed light on which path i take, but i will say that it was extremely helpful knowing your thoughts.

thanks again!

@linus-smallprint

Why was I expecting this to be something positive?

You should know me better than that.

It kind of made the event feel like a slap. (Ouch. I’m feeling Josephs pain.)

Perfect! That’s exactly what I wanted.

It also feels more tragic because of how casually Eric and Asher headed out. It was just a normal day.

Ah yes. Poor b…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

@hybridlore

Drat.

KP isn’t letting me know that y’all responded!

Grrr.

Hmm, it looks like I really stirred it up around here. lol.

@ellette-giselle

Eeellllllleeeeeeetttttttte………

Why shouldn’t you kill them? Well, because it’s getting redundant. I love your story and your characters. The setting has a unique feel of its own and the characters are compelling to say the least. However, unless you have a brand-new absolutely unseen point to make with more death, it may…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Ha! I got it right!

😢😢 Please tell me Eric and Asher don’t die too. There is too much death in this book. 😭

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Sorry it’s so short.

Joseph woke. For a long moment he lay, trying to figure out what was happening and where he was. He had been so exhausted he didn’t even remember lying down. There was an odd sound, a sound he knew he had heard many times be…

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@grcr

Many that live deserve death. And some that die deserve life.

~J.R.R. Tolkien.

@grcr

Oh.

Wow.

I didn’t even know you were reading.

Hmmm.

Why shouldn’t I kill them?

@power

I’m sorry, what?

Jenna is also a Christian

New charrie!!!!!!

Jenna (Age 19)

Hazel eyes, light brown hair, skin not as pale as Baron’s.

Her hair is naturally straight, and reaches almost to around her belly button, but she wears it in braids a lot so when its not in braids, it’s usually slightly crimped.

She knows Baron (in fact he has a crush on her) but she will refer to him as Brutus…[Read more]

@liberty I would if I could buuuut… I don’t really have any animal characters 🤪 Sorry!

@ellette-giselle

No worries. Have fun. I’ll be eagerly awaiting your return. 🤗

@hybridlore

You’re so secretive! What are you hiding? 🤨

Wouldn’t you like to know.

Sadly, I have to jump off now, so I won’t be able to post the next section! I have some stuff I need to get done today.

Maybe I can get it to you this afternoon. Otherwise, you’ll just have to try to get to sleep tonight. lol.

@ellette-giselle You’re so secretive! What are you hiding? 🤨 XD

@ellette-giselle

I wouldn’t be surprised.

Lol.

@hybridlore

Oh that would be dark.

hey, I’m the one asking questions. not answering them.

lololol.