Liberty

@ellette-giselle

Great first section! You did a good job of establishing the stakes and the characters’ situations. One thought I had (for you to consider) is possibly to remove the first journal entry and start off the book with Leon. It might be a stronger beginning… but it works great with the journal entry there too.

Remind me again, who is…[Read more]

@hybridlore    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty  @linus-smallprint

FIRST SECTION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

The Dawn Will Come
Draft 4
 
My soul waits for the Lord
    more than watchmen for the dawn,
    more than watchmen for the dawn.
   …

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@elishavet-pidyon

Oooooo!!! I like your thoughts!!! Yes, I do have a weakness for armor. Go Lieutenant Roth and his guys! (though one does start to wonder what’s going to happen when those soldiers came in contact with orders to hunt down the believers……)

You’re planning a plot twist for the series as a whole.

Interesting…..

There are s…

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@koshka

YES!! I am 100% in agreement with that! Those are the kinds of scenes that I love.

@ellette-giselle

Well, thoughtesss…

It’s a dark before dawn thing. Maybe playing with the idea that the Empire has long, dark winters.

Fabulous armor. I love it. I’m happy done of the soldiers were saved so we can root for some of those suits of armor…. But there’s probably more bad guys in armor than otherwise.

The government is going to…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Oof, yeah no. I plum don’t like Victor Hugo’s writing, so I’m with you on that.

I don’t particularly enjoy heaven scenes either, but when an author takes a moment to show that God is actually with us down here, like when Aaron knew Jesus was so close and when the Maker talks to Janner at the Fane of Fire and felt the love of the…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Then again, I have had a pretty good track record for the last two books. No MCs died! Yay!

@hybridlore

Ah, so you like the MCs. Both of them.

Poor you.

😂

@ellette-giselle

Oh, haha. XD. Yeah, I think we talked about it briefly right when you were first starting it.

Leon and Julian, from the last book. (Plus Albee and Ian, but I don’t think they’re coming back . . . unless they do. That would be cool.) I have a lot of other favorites, but they’re not in the Empire, so I doubt they’ll have much of a…[Read more]

@theshadow

The main character is incredibly bland, but also the most unique person in the universe. Typically I’ve noticed female protagonists are like this, and they’re usually super insecure about their looks but are actually pretty. Additionally, the protagonist has some special ability that makes them stand out and is caught up in a love tri…

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@hybridlore

Oh! I forgot I told KP people about it. 😂

Zombie computer! I beg pardon. His name is Smaug and he’s a dragon.

😂

aha. I see.

well, you should be scared for them. Especially your favorites.

(who are your favorites again?)

@ellette-giselle

6)Prepare for major fallout to begin from the Prince dying in the last book.
*nods happily*

2)Nearly everyone we love will get hurt.
why would you ever think that?! 😢

🤣

Mostly this.

@ellette-giselle

Oh, cool! You told me a vague idea of what the story was about . . . and I’ve read a scene or two that you posted on here. It got eaten by your zombie computer, right? I guess you were able to finish it?

Oh, just reading other people’s guesses and your responses to them. Plus your trigger warning at the beginning (I already knew…[Read more]

@koshka

Ah, I see.

Okay yes, that makes sense. I tend not to write heaven scenes. (I always cringe for that scene in Les Misserables) I don’t know why, but I like to keep clear. Hmm, interesting with the Aaron comment. I’m interested what makes you think that.

I don’t mind Screwtape or Warden and the Wolf King, I like how both of those were…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Not sure where you go that from the board, but interesting guess…………

Oh, it was a prediction that came from the general feel of the board, and the last book.

Oh, well thanks for straightening that out! I had considered it. 😂

*Bows* You’re welcome. Glad I could be of service.

Interesting. I would say a majority of my charact…

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@hybridlore

Yes! How did you know about CR?

CR will be released this spring! Super excited about that.

Oh boy. It looks like we’re in for . . . something. I’m starting to be concerned for your characters.

what makes you say that!?

@ellette-giselle

Yes, I can see how that would be hard. XD The sequel to the Crimson Rose?

Oh boy. It looks like we’re in for . . . something. I’m starting to be concerned for your characters.

@koshka

Woah! Hi!

1)There will be mob fights.

Not sure where you go that from the board, but interesting guess…………

2)Nearly everyone we love will get hurt.

why would you ever think that?! 😢

🤣

3)Leon and Jullian’s pasts will come back to haunt them.

🤔

4)There will not be a plane crash, or a nuclear war.

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@ellette-giselle

1)There will be mob fights.

2)Nearly everyone we love will get hurt.

3)Leon and Jullian’s pasts will come back to haunt them.

4)There will not be a plane crash, or a nuclear war.

5)The journal will be continued.

6)Prepare for major fallout to begin from the Prince dying in the last book.

7)Someone is going to meet Jesus,…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Thanks. I’ll try to keep that in mind.

Oooh. Moodboard.

Lots of wolves it there. It looks like you reused several pictures from last time. But less this time as well.

Yes, I wanted it to still feel very connected to the last one.

Any ideas/thoughts/predictions?!