KydonAndWillow

@keilah-h @whalekeeper

Evander

He shivered.

“The fearless kind… those dholes. They live in huge packs… and will sometimes hang around other clans of their kind. They like to chase us down, and have killed lots tigers in the past…”

He stopped, and let out a moan.

“We are to stay clear of them… and I found that out a bit too…[Read more]

@grcr

And btw…I tagged you where I posted my WIP if you’re interested 🙂

I’ll be patient…It’s that good!!!

@savannah_grace2009

Thank you for reading it!

I’m glad I’m not alone in this… struggle… lol. I might have to try spreading them out like you mentioned.

I’m very excited to share more… when I get there……perhaps half a year from now. (Just kidding, lol.) 🙃

@grcr @acancello @trailblazer

Here’s my WIP if you’re interested! And don’t feel pressured to read it if you’re busy (or just don’t want to!, I understand that life gets complicated and busy!

@grcr

Just read this! You did a great job with helping me connect with the characters. They feel so real!!!

I like your descriptions, but like others are saying, they were kind of long. I think it would help if you spread the descriptions out along the chapter instead of making them into one long paragraph. I’ve struggled with this as well, so…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Thank you for reading it and giving the advice. I really, really appreciate it!

I’m going to work on simplifying it a bit…  and I’ll see what it becomes…. 🙃

Oh, and don’t worry… nothing bad happens. lol

@highscribeofaetherium

Heh heh… Thanks for letting me know… 🙃

That was one thing I was a bit worried about, so I guess I’ll talk to my mom about it… 😁

@GRCR

Cool! I didn’t have time to read it in full detail yet, but one thing that stood out to me skimming it was the description felt a bit heavy-handed. First you describe Blair, then his room, then Shannon, and then Belle. All of them were pretty long paragraphs of just description, and it gets a bit tiring.

Anyways, just what I noticed. I’ll…[Read more]

….This literally took me FOREVER to write….

…and now, I begin outlining the second chapter… 😓

@trailblazer @acancello

Thanks! If you want to read more, I can tag you on the forum where I am posting the whole story and asking for critiques.

I feel so bad for Sef but I LOVE their relationship! It makes me so happy! 🙂

@power

like @lydia-s said: reinforcements have arrived!

Most romantic thing I’ve written (i mean it’s not that romantic but it still makes me happy every time I read it!)

“Sef!”

Sef heard the door crash open upstairs and began to panic. It was late, and the odds that Iver had not been drinking were next to impossible. She knew she should ans…

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Okay guys, here’s the most romantic thing I’ve written so far:

“Sef!”

Sef heard the door crash open upstairs and began to panic. It was late, and the odds that Iver had not been drinking were next to impossible. She knew she should answer, she knew that hiding would only make him worse, but she was paralyzed with the cold hands of fea…

[Read more]

@grcr

I hope so!

@savannah_grace2009

Hmm… strange….

I just tried to change mine… and it seems it’s not working again. ☹️

But don’t worry, KP should fix it soon.

@grcr  @jonas @highscribeofaetherium

Yeah i just tried and the green bar thingy loads but then it goes away and nothing happens. I’ve hit refresh multiple times but it doesn’t work 🙁

@grcr

I tried a half-hour ago and it still doesn’t work :(((

@savannah_grace2009

Oof… Have you tried recently?

It started working again… so it should load now…