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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
I could add Rylee! She’s a character from another WIP that is going nowhere XD (how old is Junior again? 18, right?)
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
Liv
“Yeah, I do,” she pursed her lips. “It’s just me, my mani and pani,” she smiled. “And Xandro. I consider him family, too. Where are you from?”
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
Oops! I didn’t even notice that XD I will fix that!!
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-GRCR- replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
Ah, I see. 😄 lol
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
Marcurious is between 16 and 18. I haven’t really figured that out yet haha!
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-GRCR- replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
Interesting chapter!! I like it!
oh, and I really loved this:
“Give me one good reason why I shouldn’t kill you right now,” the Pythonos pressed the bloody knife to Marcurious’ throat.
Marcurious coughed. “Because I am just so amazing,” he flashed the Pythonos a smile.
One question… how old is Marcurious?
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
It’s completely fine, no rush on how fast you give me feedback! (: I understand we all have lives outside of writing and KP xD
I can get started on giving you my opinion on the excerpt I saw introducing Marcurious tomorrow perhaps.
Actually, I would prefer if you gave your opinion on the first few chapters of my WIP and kind of go…[Read more]
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TheArcaneAxiom replied to the topic Magic Systems!! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
I guess it would probably make the most sense to have all the powers be something similar, where the user redistributes a property of their body to other parts. That could be pretty cool, I guess. I could do this as sort of Feruchemy, but you just redistribute attributes across your body instead of storing them away (where you lose some of…
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TheArcaneAxiom replied to the topic Magic Systems!! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
Yeah, that’s pretty much what I’ve been thinking. I’m definitely going to keep working on this one.
Sounds good!
That is what I was trying to say too. I guess I was being too concise to properly get across what I was trying to say. The reason I don’t like that is because light and darkness are both real, while voidflames are not. I would p…
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HighScribe posted an update 2 years, 8 months ago
Gahh!! I was experimenting and playing around with present tense and now my brain gears are jamming now that I’m trying to do past tense again! It looks so wrong GAAHHHHH!!! XD
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TheArcaneAxiom replied to the topic Hello, Humans! in the forum Start HERE 2 years, 8 months ago
Really? Huh. I didn’t know that. I feel like I’ve been aware of those terms for a super long time, but I didn’t read any of his books until last summer.
Oh, yeah lol! It came from him!
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TheArcaneAxiom replied to the topic Hello, Humans! in the forum Start HERE 2 years, 8 months ago
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HighScribe replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
Jonas volunteered Riina first, obviously, but if that doesn’t work out, Saoirse might be able to get him to dance. She’s still skulking around.
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HighScribe replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
I know, sorry. I’ll try to write one today, but idk how tired I’m going to be :/
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TheArcaneAxiom replied to the topic Apologetics in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 years, 8 months ago
I officially label myself an idiot who can’t explain anything right!
Ugh! I’ll reply once I cool off…
Don’t label yourself an idiot:(
I look forward to your reply!
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TheArcaneAxiom replied to the topic Hello, Humans! in the forum Start HERE 2 years, 8 months ago
Hmm, I’ve never really thought of it in these terms… Let’s put it this way: There’s rules, but I might be the only one who knows them right now. Really depends on the world. I have one world with a complicated system of magic, and a different world where there’s not really any true magic, just people with native abilities. In the magic…
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TheArcaneAxiom replied to the topic Magic Systems!! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
I don’t really have answers to any of those questions XD. I liked the idea of having a weird sort of fire like that, but yeah, it’s not very interesting yet. The magic system as a whole is not to far developed, so maybe when I have more details I can differentiate the two flames. Otherwise, I probably will get rid of it.
That’s fair! I thi…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
Also I forgot to mention…I don’t have all the exerpts from my WIP here on this forum. I will post them for you on here if you agree to help me. (because I didn’t want to take up a bunch of pages on here for no reason haha)
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
WHY IS THIS NOT WORKING?!?!
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
@scoutfinch18o
Heyyy, I don’t think we’ve really met! I’m Sara (which you probably already knew haha!)
I have been stalking the topic where you’ve been critiquing RAE’s WIP…and I really like your critiquing style!
I was wondering…if you could maybe….critique mine too….?
I understand if you don’t have the time to help two people…I…[Read more]
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Just…don’t do present tense.
Y?
Cause it usu Sounds weird.
Typos ignore
Cause it sounds weird? Was that what you were saying? After a bit, your brain shifts, and you dont even notice it. I like it with first person, as long as it isn’t just for no reason.
@jonas I personally LOVE doing first person present tense, but not third person present. Because I switch both tenses and person, I often have no problem with my brain gears.
Yeah third person present tense is bad. I personally don’t care for present tense at all. I think of it similarly to second person narration.
@jonas @rae
I’m just gonna jump in on this conversation lol…
I also LOVE first person present tense…but I HATE…I mean HATE third person present…unless of course I’m writing a certain depressing short story about my life a couple months ago heh…heh….OH! I cannot STAND second person…*retches over the side of the bed* Like WHO in their…[Read more]
@savannah_grace2009
The thing with second person is that it implies that the reader is the main character, which means you can’t design your own character. One week in my creative writing class, we did have a 2nd person assignment, but it was a choose your own adventure story.
@jonas
I know! That’s the sad part…no fun characters ):
Yeah that’s true…haha!
This is the technical side to present tense. Present tense adde immediacy—it feels like it’s happening *right now.* This is really good in some specific scenarios, but there’s one major problem. It is hard to maintain, it’s exhausting to read something long in present tense. Second person should almost always be present tense, and first person…[Read more]
@freedomwriter76 I’m not saying it’s bad to read, but when it comes to writing…I like the big picture. Besides, I write from the POV of Ru Eis most the time, and since she researches the events, they can’t really work well for Present Tense. It’d be like Laura Hillenbrand doing present tense for Unbroken.