Koshka

@godlyfantasy12

XD XD XD

Aplets and Cotlets! Little candies similar to Turkish Delights, but made from apples, pears, or apricots, and assorted tree nuts. Or no nuts, it depends on the variety.

@freedomwriter76 @godlyfantasy12

*Waves*Hi!! Want some?

*Holds out a box of Aplets and Cotlets*

@felicity

I am wondering though, Ludwika and Michał, are they just being obnoxious brother and sister, or is there conflict in this family? Because it may just be me, but they felt rather strained.

And what draft is this?

@felicity

Wow. I like your set up. You did a very good job of an intro.

I did feel like some things were a little too stated, and perhaps not quite smooth. You did a very good job though. I enjoyed it, and will be hoping for more!

And I should probably read more contemporary fiction. It was a little bit funny on my side to be reading about cell…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @elishavet-pidyon  @godlyfantasy12

Eira

The sidewalk was hard and my feet yearned for the soft dirt around the orphanage. Still, I kept up a vigorous pace. I’d be late if I didn’t hustle. My backpack kept shifting with each step, numbly jarring my back, but I had a rythum, and it worked. In a few more seconds I was within sight…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Great chapter!

Um, here’s a thought from another side of things. Maybe don’t use it here, but it could be useful later? I don’t know.

There are other perfectly accurate ways to cover what Ruler has done, one of which I believe would work quite well. Instead of trying to hide it, have him say something like, “there are many ways…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

NOOOO!!!!!

@godlyfantasy12

Okay, I’ve been a bit worried for our little lad. As long as Ara can keep with him he’ll be fine. (I really love those two)

@freedomwriter76

AHHHH! I love it!

So, the normal human being part of me is horrified, but the history nerd author? She grinned through most of those chapters whispering “she got it right. She got it right!”

Although I am still a tad bit confused over their whole ‘still living in the same house as their father even though their Jews…’. this…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @elishavet-pidyon  @godlyfantasy12

I’ve been waiting for his elven flame since I first learned about it!!!! It was AWESOME!

Okay, so maybe I’m being a tad dramatic, but I did say I’ve been waiting a long time.

I can try to RP, only I don’t really know what to have anyone say or do, so I a little lost.

@freedomwriter76

Well then, Erich, Almarrin, maybe you two should run into each other. Although, is Erich going to the club? If so Almarrin can wait, but if not…who’s going to keep the ‘winged brats’ distracted enough not to notice their brother’s gone?

@freedomwriter76  @godlyfantasy12

I’m with you! *Cracks knuckles* Let’s go track them down.

Almarrin

The hall was quiet like a testing field right before the bomb blew. Or maybe more like the silence of the aftermath.

Avoiding notice, Almarrin slipped down the hall and vanished behind the office door. All was quiet on the other side.…[Read more]

Oops, poor fellow. I’d better hunt him down.

@godlyfantasy12

Ahh, gotcha. I just was suddenly wondering, “where are my characters again?” XD

@godlyfantasy12

Oh, and is Inglor still with Luna?

@godlyfantasy12

Okay, that will make more sense for her arc…and be even more wonderfully confusing for characters. XD

I think Elishavet set it up so you could show up whenever. =)

Wow. Look what happens when I step off for a day. These were really fun to read through!

@godlyfantasy12

Eira is an Alve, although she has Forester blood too. Without an idea of who she is, she has been raised in an orphanage that doesn’t believe the Light exists, and that the Alven are mere fairy tales. She is taught first of all the Light, t…

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@freedomwriter76 @elishavet-pidyon  @godlyfantasy12

I’m on. I’m actually stuck home sick right now, so I’ll be off and on.

I am considering Eira coming, not because she’s been technically abused,  but to get some really sad ideas out of her head. For instance, she’s been raised to be agnostic.

Eira

A slight smile flickers across my face when s…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Eira

I stare at her for a long moment untill the mild shock wears off and my eyes drop back to the half eaten jello cup. “Astronomy.”

Stars. My hand itches to find the book in my backpack and loose myself among them, but I swallow the last glob and ask what a brother’s like. If she’s talking I don’t have to, and besides; I sort…[Read more]

They better let Paxton go, even if it’s like “well, at least it’ll keep him out of our way” although it is usually them in his way but……..