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@esther-c

Glad it was helpful. I have a possible idea for something that you could try for option three.

We knew a kid who was trying to go straight. His dad was Special Forces and died in Dessert Storm. His dad’s best friend was kind of a mentor to him tho and was trying to fill in as a father figure. None of them were Christian’s at this…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Your advice is so so helpful!!

And it drew attention to a weaker part of my book—my FMC identifying the lie she’s been believing and accepting the truth. That turn-around moment is a part I’m still working on, so you pointing that out is awesome. I think right now she’s just been living this lie without experiencing any consequ…[Read more]

@esther-c

Hi Esther. I actually had something similar to deal with in one of my books as well. Here are the two things I would say to keep in mind that will most likely make the difference.

1. There can be a time where the MC believes a lie as long as it is shown to be a lie by the end of the book. (i.e. There are some rough consequences…[Read more]

@everyone

Saw this a few days ago… Looks like some moderator profiles were active. The KP profile has posts from ten years ago 💀,  it the captain one has no posts at all.

@keilah-h

lololol. I get that. The Tangled one was me with the Zero Hour: Freedom set.

@elishavet-pidyon

lol, well thanks. I get told I’m crazy or weird all the time. XD

haha. It’s not me always either. But I feel like readers view us as always thinking that. XD

@hybridlore

lol, thanks. XD

@grcr

You are very welcome!!

Okay sounds good.

Okay, for a little more editorial feedback…..

and Emrysrushed

Second to last paragraph, you just need a space there.

And then structurally,

Put your right hand to your chest…”

This seems a little odd, because 1. it is one of the more standard ways of swearing an oath, and 2. as a sol…[Read more]

@grcr

Ooo! This is interesting!!

(I actually thought the dad was gonna die in this chapter from scene 1…. so I’m relieved that he made it. XD)

A few typos I caught, but at this point I’m not sure what sort of feedback you’re looking for, so let me know. This is interesting and I’m eager to keep reading if you post more!

So man y kids… and…[Read more]

@theducktator

lol. No prob. XD

@loopylin

Rory

“Push you? If you’re sure…..” He stared in confusion for several moments. Then, bracing his hands against the back of the chair, he gave it a shove and let go, waiting to see what would happen.

@whalekeeper

Oh my goodness! He’s such a good sport tho to reply like that! XD

@theducktator

I’m glad you got through it with no huge mistakes. Colds always settle in my ears and I get sinus infections. Really bad ones. Colds can be nasty. I’ve never gotten dizzy from one though…… I think? 😄

Praying that it clears up.

@esther-c

praying for you, Esther!

@ESTHER-C

YESSS!!!!! This is PERFECT right down to thanksgiving in the hospital hehehehe I am actually so happy you wrote that!

When I saw it in my email, I literally screamed and my dad was like “are you okay?” it was really funny, he was very concerned 😂😂

@savannah_grace2009

So the idea you got is already pretty good! But if you need more inspo…

The War of 1812 was interesting, because the United States had just won her independence from Great Britain roughly 30 years ago, and then there they are fighting again. But France/Napoleon Bonaparte also played a role in this by pitting the two against e…[Read more]