hybridlore

@keilah

Hmm. The image button is acting up for me, but pic is done. I’ve lengthened the feet and lightened the lines on his face… I’ll post it whenever KP wants to get it together.

Just thought I’d mention because it’s been way too long…. so yeah, it’s done.

🙂🙂

Thank you both so much!! 😊💛💛

The plan was 10 pages, and I only wrote 4. *Sigh* I feel like the problem with short stories is, I can never fall in love with them unless I get into the nitty-gritty details of a scene, which isn’t great if I want to draft the whole thing in one night. Done for now, will continue.

@hybridlore

I know. It was so cute!!

My poor boys! They are in a sure fix.

Nonlinear stories are so hard. 🙁 Why am I writing this? My brain is tied into knots right now.

@hybridlore

Yes, that was me. I don’t exactly want him to die…I just have a feeling that he might.

Poor 618. And 621. That government! 😡

Hear, hear.

Drafting a short story. :15

@koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @theducktator @grcr @whalekeeper @power @hybridlore @liberty

TWO NEW CHAPTERS!!

@whalekeeper
Okay awesome! That is not really a feeling I want you to have. XD

@elishavet-pidyon @whalekeeper

Lois

“Not particularly,” Lois answered, assuming the question was directed at both of them. He forced himself to stop drawing and set down his pen, then his hid his arm with his sleeve again. He gave the kids who had spoken to Viktor a cold look, which none of them noticed. Then he looked at Viktor. “You seem…[Read more]

@whalekeeper HAHAHA

it is though

Researching other ethnic backgrounds feels so much harder than I want it to be. So many different places, so many different people.

@ellette-giselle

Thank you very much!

Of course! *Tips hat*

That was really helpful about the description thing. I think that makes more sense. I wonder too if I over-did the “buzz” words in dystopian literature because I was trying to cut down on description. XD I’ll totally look at that.

I get that. Descriptive words have so many different quali…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Yay! I’m glad you liked it! Yep, Jonathan and Michael are back!

@liberty

lol. Well good.

@ellette-giselle

Yes… I did…. (I have an aspiring pilot of a brother with pilot friends, so yes. XD) but I also invented this plane so I have a little leeway.

Ah, right! I forgot about that. Neat!

why, did something stand out that seemed incorrect?

Nope, it’s actually the opposite. I was so impressed by how realistic it all sounded.

@liberty

Ooo yay! So glad!

Yes… I did…. (I have an aspiring pilot of a brother with pilot friends, so yes. XD) but I also invented this plane so I have a little leeway.

why, did something stand out that seemed incorrect?

@ellette-giselle

I went through all six chapters! I’m thoroughly enjoying the story! I’m excited to see Cassion appear.

By the way, how much research did you do for all the jet tech stuff? Did you actually look into all those terms they talked about?  Especially Jason’s engineering talk…

I was going to share my thoughts, but then this thread would start to become redundant, lol! I pretty much agree with what everyone else has said. And as for the passage people keep referencing about food offered to idols and becoming a stumbling block, that’s 1 Corinthians 8.