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@thearcaneaxiom

That’s such a cool concept!!

@rae

Nice topic! Thanks for making it! I’ll maybe share some of my stuff sometime, Idk.

@janellebelovedpig
Awesome! Nice job!!

@beth-torres

Hi Elizabeth, welcome to Kingdom Pen!!

I’m hybridlore on here, a homeschooled high schooler, sci-fi/dystopian writer, violinist, and follower of Jesus. It’s nice to meet you!

I didn’t read everyone’s questions, so if I give you the same one, don’t worry about answering it.

What are your favorite books/series?

What’s the plot of…[Read more]

@acancello

Nice job!

@trailblazer

Sorry I never got back to you on that! I would post about the things you like, what You’ve been doing lately, or things you’ve learned recently. Everyone has their own interests so a lot of what I like might no seem interesting to you.

@euodia-vision @trailblaze

Y’all could always talk about books you’ve been…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

That works so much better! I’m excited to see what you come up with for Nano!

@elishavet-pidyon

I agree with Freedom, I think the only main thing I noticed was the characters were a bit confusing in the beginning. I didn’t know if we were looking at two of Viktor’s friends, but then I realized one was his father. Maybe change a…[Read more]

@rae

I’m not sure, but thanks!

Okay, got it. It all makes more sense now.

Also, I use Canva! It’s really great for moodboards!

@rae

Lol. I like the descriptions you posted of nature!

Just wondering, cause I can’t think of any other way to do it XD

@aranel

What’s wrong with the characters dying because they just ran into the monsters?

@rae

Oh and the paragraph about heaven and hell didn’t seem too preachy. I mean, I think it’s fine to have it in there since it was really short. Great job on the description of that, too! I think it works well.

@rae

I thought it ended really well, I liked the mentor-y moment with Master Paul! I didn’t really understand what Cubespace was entirely, so the whole incident confused me a little.

I think Master Paul asked Nahim to fly the ship, but Nahim said no, so the Master left him there on the controls? And then Nahim stabilized it and went to yell at…[Read more]

@jonas

Yeah, that’s happened to me too before!

@thearcaneaxiom

I like it! Thing is my favorite, lol. I don’t think you should change the name even though it’s a little mean, but it’s up to you. I think it fits her and she likes it, so it works.

The plot is a little confusing to me… a lot of the philosophy/science stuff goes over my head but that’s fine, lol. Anyway, nice job so far! I…[Read more]

@rae

Okay, phew! Finally caught up. And yeah, Chapter 7 isn’t showing up for me… so I guess I’m not, lol.

The biggest things I noticed were again, really long paragraphs. I think it would be easier to read if you split them up, but it’s up to you.

And long sections of dialogue without tags, like this:

“You can…”

“Read, write, and speak i…

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@jonas

Okay, I actually don’t think I’ll join… Thanks, though!

@euodia-vision

Thank you!!

@trailblazer

I’ll check out your past posts and try to come up with some ideas!

@savannah_grace2009

If that is what happened, I bet she’ll try to rejoin… but I guess we’ll see.