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@jonas

So, the king has been traveling for a while. He wasn’t aware of the rules put on the people by his regents, who he’d appointed to take care of the country while he was gone.

When I wrote it, I was trying to create sort of an allegory. I know it’s not perfect, but that’s what I was thinking when I came up with it. The king is meant to…[Read more]

@jonas @rae

I added a few sentences that hopefully resolve it a little better? I’m not sure. Do you still think it’s missing something?

… I can’t believe I didn’t see it before—who he was. The suspicion has grown inside of me for weeks, strengthening with each day that passed. When the guards disappeared from the marketplace. When the curfe…

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@rae

Alright! XD Thanks, I appreciate it.

@grcr

Got it!

@jonas

Yeah, I knew it was pretty obvious. I’m not sure how else to write it (where it’s not obvious) in such a short word count.
So, yeah. As soon as I posted it I was like, oh, I need to add something that talks about how the rules/guards have been changed. Really when I wrote it I was thinking it’d have a few more scenes, but then when I got…[Read more]

@grcr

Ugh, I know, that’s the worst. Maybe try Nameberry? I usually go there for names.

@grcr

I like it! Blair and Blaine are really similar names, though. That might get confusing, unless it’s intentional?

@koshka This is really beautiful!

@trailblazer

Nice topic!!

Biggest one: how do you celebrate Christmas Eve/Christmas? (family gatherings, church services, other fun traditions?)

So, we don’t live near any of our extended family right now, but sometimes we meet up with my Dad’s parents. We’ve never done Christmas with my mom’s side (that I can remember). This year they came a few…[Read more]

@smiley

It was super interesting! I love family dynamics like this! I didn’t really have any critiques, but please tag me if you post more!

@livingwoodchronicles

Awesome! I’m technically already in an anthology that I’m not sure I’ll have finished in time, so I don’t think I should sign up for another yet… I would be interested to read it once it’s done, though! And I’ll let you know if I change my mind. 🙂

@trailblazer

Aww, I love it!!

@trailblazer

Aw me too! That was so funny XD

@acancello

Oh my goodness, congratulations!! That’s so exciting!!

@savannah_grace2009

1. Is it boring?? I’ve been really scared that this doesn’t draw you in and isn’t interesting.

Nope!

2. Is Sef relatable? Can you really feel her and does she become real in your mind?

Yes, she’s definitely relatable!

3. Was there anywhere that you were confused?

Hmm, I don’t think so, since I’ve read most of to before, but I d…[Read more]

@esther-c Wow! I really like it so far! It pulls you in really well, and I like the cliffhanger type chapter endings. I’ll try to answer the questions!

1. Were you drawn into the story right away?

Yep!

2. What are your first impressions of these characters? (Specifically the MCs. I know some of y’all already know these charries, but just p…[Read more]

@trailblazer Aww!!! 🥰 Yeah, I’m team Albert and Libbie.

@savannah_grace2009

That sounds good, I’m glad you were able to get a clear answer from God! I agree, I think it still definitely works even without the shorter beginning. And even if it does turn some readers away, it’s going to touch the people God wants it to. 🙂