Kingdom Pen | Little Brown Dog | Activity https://kingdompen.org/members/howlingwolf/activity/ Activity feed for Little Brown Dog. Wed, 22 Apr 2026 18:47:41 -0400 https://buddypress.org/?v= en-US 30 hourly 2 7dc04b876718f8e2c7c2c46bdeca4181 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Help? Does this sound like a good idea? in the forum Novel Idea Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/help-does-this-sound-like-a-good-idea/page/2/#post-22910 Sat, 17 Dec 2016 14:56:59 -0500 @mark-kamibaya yeah. I always though that series was just weird. But the way my characters and their world is designed is nothing like Animorphs. Thank you though:)

]]> 0962f6ede38d7945e18adaf50e67f1dd Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Help? Does this sound like a good idea? in the forum Novel Idea Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/help-does-this-sound-like-a-good-idea/page/2/#post-22899 Fri, 16 Dec 2016 23:31:29 -0500 Awww thank you @emma-flourney !

]]> 1fbf610a446877dcb475d6085e2d1e74 Little Brown Dog changed their profile picture https://kingdompen.org/activity/p/31667/ Thu, 15 Dec 2016 23:11:26 -0500 0 ab5172f67226438ee208ec0a3b0d7846 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Catching Trout in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/catching-trout-2/#post-22837 Thu, 15 Dec 2016 23:02:47 -0500 I like hooks that show action or tense dialogue. I can’t remember any examples, but that’s the sort that always draws my attention.
Recently I started not even worrying about the “hook” and just letting it come to me as I was writing the scene.

]]> 2ad4f1b418d72c2cc0ac168ce1d9589d Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Help? Does this sound like a good idea? in the forum Novel Idea Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/help-does-this-sound-like-a-good-idea/#post-22832 Thu, 15 Dec 2016 22:13:57 -0500 Haha! No not that little! Hi Gabrielle, nice to meet you! Overarching plot hmmmm…. I must ponder that:P the kids are 2-7. In fact I think a brief overview of them is in order.

Lilly is the 2 year old and she’s a timid redhead who just wants to please everyone
Jeremy is 5 and he’s completely shut down and hates adults
Diane is also 5 and is…[Read more]

]]> 62210c3774e02915b039539395890b3b Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Help? Does this sound like a good idea? in the forum Novel Idea Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/help-does-this-sound-like-a-good-idea/#post-22819 Thu, 15 Dec 2016 19:30:57 -0500 Thanks Daeus! Do you have any tips on writing good kids characters?

]]> a4d2be8f8816903eb66c1d28c4d900e7 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Help? Does this sound like a good idea? in the forum Novel Idea Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/help-does-this-sound-like-a-good-idea/#post-22816 Thu, 15 Dec 2016 18:56:14 -0500 Hahaha, hi Emily! Yeah I got really busy, but things are slowing down a little so I’m back now:) ok. Any tips on writing good kid characters?

]]> 207af83c99f051e175f322b87329fcff Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Help? Does this sound like a good idea? in the forum Novel Idea Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/help-does-this-sound-like-a-good-idea/#post-22814 Thu, 15 Dec 2016 18:54:29 -0500 Hi Kate! It’s nice to be back:) ohhh yes… Dr. Jones was begging me to let him into this story;) thank you guys! I stink at plotting but I’ll try! If you want to see an intro for this particular idea, I posted some on my blog. Explorwriting.wordpress.com

]]> a3d4ea675f21eca8840acfa9b0c8d6ae Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Help? Does this sound like a good idea? in the forum Novel Idea Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/help-does-this-sound-like-a-good-idea/#post-22807 Thu, 15 Dec 2016 18:36:08 -0500 Hi Christi! I’m Kenya. Nice to meet you!

It would be a book for teens and preteens. I was to make it really interesting, it would include a lot of interaction between the families and such.

It is hard, but I’m the oldest of six so I’m used to kids. Lol:)

]]> 70a150b8a1d2f957b280467be2a48866 Little Brown Dog started the topic Help? Does this sound like a good idea? in the forum Novel Idea Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/help-does-this-sound-like-a-good-idea/ Thu, 15 Dec 2016 17:49:51 -0500 So I had this idea that’s sorta of an off shoot of another idea i had; does anybody think it’s a feasible idea for me to develop? A story of 5 young (ages 2-7) children rescued from a government laboratory and are adopted/fostered by a couple different families. It’s supposed to be a cute sort of dramatic story about them learning about families,…[Read more]

]]> 9861a338ebb73accbc5d5796d241974a Little Brown Dog replied to the topic When is enough enough? in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/when-is-enough-enough/#post-9351 Wed, 24 Feb 2016 21:35:21 -0500 Ah ok. I see what y’all are saying!:) Thanks y’all!

]]> 236e99fa0fc7e8900c4f0d9c274a8142 Little Brown Dog started the topic When is enough enough? in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/when-is-enough-enough/ Sun, 21 Feb 2016 18:03:25 -0500 So i couldn’t find a topic on this; so i decided to start one;)
At what point to ya’ll consider it “enough” when a character is being interrogated/experimented on/ (*wince*) tortured? Like, at what point would you just leave the rest to the reader’s imagination and come back later when the character is recovering from whatever happened?

]]> 4f363f7e68e49c048371f4bec4026275 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Character Names in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/character-names/#post-7999 Sat, 12 Dec 2015 21:05:57 -0500 I love all these names!!! You guys are so creative!

]]> 8133781fe9ed7f6ba7ee85618a0a0c53 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Character Names in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/character-names/#post-7998 Sat, 12 Dec 2015 21:01:00 -0500 Protagonists:
Alexandra Fox
Stephen Fledgly
Hywire
Piper

Supporting:
Surgeo Viego
Rowan Dyer

Villains:
Amelia Jackson
Mason Collins
Darlene Collins

]]> c2ba47c8ff95df44c95f0bf9cf929f74 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Short Story beginning-critique in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/short-story-beginning-critique/#post-7813 Wed, 02 Dec 2015 18:04:24 -0500 Ah i can see that, @kate . Yes we’re still at him listening to the receptionist.

]]> 3ee049121332944b3f51e5fe07278343 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Short Story beginning-critique in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/short-story-beginning-critique/#post-7801 Wed, 02 Dec 2015 14:48:44 -0500 Thank you @Daeus :)!!

]]> 7760fd7e65b4da765cc0bcf19c1e6866 Little Brown Dog started the topic Short Story beginning-critique in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/short-story-beginning-critique/ Tue, 01 Dec 2015 20:58:09 -0500 Howdy again, would you awesome fellow writers mind critiquing this for me? Thank y’all!:)

“Don’t touch the test subjects.” The chilling voice cut through my thoughts and I immediately turned away from the bars of the cage. The guide, a tall, grey haired man wearing a long white lab coat stared down his rat-like nose at me. “Did you not read th…[Read more]

]]> b5a6b65eecb91bd0f7009dedad12042e Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/inter-genre-island/#post-7523 Thu, 19 Nov 2015 00:58:37 -0500 Ash: *shakes head and drops down to the ground* *trusting her skill from handling Dragons, she runs toward the creature, roaring in a loud voice* *Her cape billows out behind her, giving the appearance of her being much bigger.*

]]> 0c4cab4d3b6fd6341e5ab614f516072e Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/inter-genre-island/#post-7516 Wed, 18 Nov 2015 23:17:29 -0500 Ash: *groans* Cephas, go see what’s the matter.

]]> c76e2e5c973be408dd8c43c8ebe1a9ca Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/inter-genre-island/#post-7514 Wed, 18 Nov 2015 22:21:55 -0500 Ash: *hangs down from the tree and grins* Hey there. *She’s dressed in 1600’s clothing with a black hood and cape* // Cephas: *perched on the branch and chitters softly*

]]> e2c00b6c2de8415bb984806acfaf1768 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Scene Critique in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/scene-critique-3/#post-7507 Wed, 18 Nov 2015 22:12:00 -0500 Oh dear, i didn’t mean to set off a huge thing like this, but it would appear that Shifters are a touchy subject. I like your idea @daeus telling the creation story would be great! Do you think it would work better in the story though? Like one character explaining to another?

]]> 7c1588f6a3ac30af97d4f6518af5cae8 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/inter-genre-island/#post-7505 Wed, 18 Nov 2015 21:59:21 -0500 Ash: *watches the others from a tree top, shaking her head.* I’m sure we’ll be better off alone, Cephas. *to her pet dragon*

]]> b0727261c9a18ff8e9fe79390dbdb6d1 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Character Café in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/character-cafe/page/2/#post-7497 Wed, 18 Nov 2015 19:55:03 -0500 Ash: *ended up on the island after stealing an enchanted book and happening to open it and start reading* *looks around* Great…. Where on earth are we, Cephas? // Cephas: *chitters in confusion*

]]> 9120c492b7909b1e254d0198e58bc416 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Character Café in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/character-cafe/page/2/#post-7483 Wed, 18 Nov 2015 18:20:08 -0500 Ok sounds good! The rest can be figured out as we go!:)

]]> 9178da675249bb30b10a9afdfea358dc Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Character Café in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/character-cafe/#post-7469 Wed, 18 Nov 2015 15:20:05 -0500 Ok, my charrie is Ashe, 14yo thief. She’s just-above-normal height and rather thin, with jet-black hair and almost-black eyes. She has a pet fairy dragon named Cephas, who she can speak to. She’s quiet like you would expect a thief to be, but very defensive and can pretend to be a lot of things, but if you can manage to make friends with her,…[Read more]

]]> 2393eb5973d2f556a23e55fef8978e1e Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Character Café in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/character-cafe/#post-7450 Tue, 17 Nov 2015 23:21:37 -0500 I’m in!!! I love these!!!:)

]]> 65b2287a8be964a6f353165af03264ac Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Scene Critique in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/scene-critique-3/#post-7439 Tue, 17 Nov 2015 01:09:30 -0500 Thank you for y’all input! @Daeus i was trying to figure out a new name for them and came up with Lupines, but i think i found that was already taken. Also, my Were’s don’t have what they call “Moon sickness” which in the story is the result of a were turning evil and thus losing control of their wolf/cat abilities. They refuse to take human life…[Read more]

]]> 6622e2757d28d7338537bc61b1b22986 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Scene Critique in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/scene-critique-3/#post-7433 Mon, 16 Nov 2015 23:04:48 -0500 @Sarah Hoven, my were’s are in the story granted their powers by God in order to fight demons and other evils that manage to invade the real world.

]]> 80bba8e94185b06ba84e32b626b5f12d Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Scene Critique in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/scene-critique-3/#post-7421 Mon, 16 Nov 2015 00:46:19 -0500 Ok thank you:) Yeah, i was kind of rushing when writing this.

I often have trouble with description, do you have any tips?
Again, Thank you

]]> fc4afb819a94118ae019a35e9f0a6ed6 Little Brown Dog started the topic Scene Critique in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/scene-critique-3/ Sun, 15 Nov 2015 22:37:58 -0500 hey guys! mind taking a look at this scene and telling me what you think? Thank y’all!!
:

Else where, another wolf was also under going surgery. Sturm. Her face was half covered by a mask and her body was underneath surgical drapes. Several doctors came and went as they worked to stitch the last bits of Stürm’s torn skin together. Near the do…[Read more]

]]> 4810ff69582ee2107f357ecdb2013cf4 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic The Sign of the Prancing Poodle in the forum Fantasy http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/the-sign-of-the-prancing-poodle/page/2/#post-7406 Sat, 14 Nov 2015 22:38:16 -0500 Sign of the Falling Dragon
Inn of the Black Unicorn
Wild Mare Inn
Place of the Screaming Stones

]]> 39f005ffe015f18de48b86a146601f5f Little Brown Dog replied to the topic You know you are a writer when... in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/you-know-you-are-a-writer-when/page/5/#post-7288 Mon, 09 Nov 2015 03:08:42 -0500 Yes… @Kate that is a one…

]]> c3c7096fe5d2ba220e296d20a6b52b81 Little Brown Dog and Ivy Rose are now friends https://kingdompen.org/activity/p/15768/ Sun, 08 Nov 2015 16:57:06 -0500 0 198a5b1471d2f425b7e2919e16371708 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Experiment: Costume in Public in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/experiment-costume-in-public/#post-7286 Sun, 08 Nov 2015 13:29:57 -0500 Yeah;P
oh, and my costume consists of; a gold crown with leaf decals, silver eyeliner, a forest green velvet cloak, brown tunic, string belt and leg armor pieces that i hot-glued to pair of black knee high boots.

]]> 3389038f1a8af4bfc10a704cb406de80 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Experiment: Costume in Public in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/experiment-costume-in-public/#post-7284 Sun, 08 Nov 2015 03:34:59 -0500 Fun! 😛 WE live in the country too:)

]]> 978494fe1df3fef3081991a178064fd3 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Bad heroes, messed up protagonists, and character arcs in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/bad-heroes-messed-up-protagonists-and-character-arcs/page/3/#post-7282 Sun, 08 Nov 2015 02:11:46 -0500 Ok, I am already sympathizing with dearest Walter! I have a soft spot for hurting heroes or villains for that matter.

]]> c0ca6058de3132e09a78dd61c8544b2a Little Brown Dog started the topic Experiment: Costume in Public in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/experiment-costume-in-public/ Sun, 08 Nov 2015 02:07:43 -0500 Ok, I did the Elf thing. I wore my costume in the grocery store. Here’s my results,

Adults: They /very/ /very/ rarely pay at attention to costumes. I got two double takes in 2 hours. /two/. and it was crowded.

Children: They either gawk in awe or look confused. Often the parents lead them away as they stare.

So that the result of the Elf thing! xP

]]> 63cafdccf46f52ec1b42e69a0096487a Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Sickly Characters? in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/sickly-characters/#post-7232 Thu, 05 Nov 2015 18:39:47 -0500 Hmmm. yeah! @hope ! She’s the oldest of 6 i think… but she was the only child for a while (before her adoptive dad got married and she became a big sister suddenlyxP) and her main quirk is she’s very possessive of her daddy, a bit immature and she loves to climb and stuffxP

@Ivy in this story, the MCs’ family is mostly adopted. They only have…[Read more]

]]> 29d80f79f9ae0d31df6e7b056c46cab9 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic It Began Long Ago... in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/it-began-long-ago/#post-7227 Thu, 05 Nov 2015 16:27:12 -0500 Oh… xP I have one. This is very sad, but i was in love with the second story i wrote and convinced by dad to self-publish it for me on the kindle. he did. don’t ever read it. I will die.

But my first story i remember was a story about these kids who could travel to this other world and stuff. like Narnia. Like the rest of you guys though, i…[Read more]

]]> ebe78789cee6fcf68fd95374a3b5f2d2 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Sickly Characters? in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/sickly-characters/#post-7226 Thu, 05 Nov 2015 16:16:59 -0500 Thank You! That is very helpful:)

She’s almost the MC, her adoptive parents are the MCs though. I’m thinking it’ll be mostly short term memory loss.

Thank you so much for your helpfulness:)!

]]> c4ab52f68df3095db7009619bfb9ea1c Little Brown Dog started the topic Sickly Characters? in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/sickly-characters/ Thu, 05 Nov 2015 14:51:52 -0500 Ok, i have a charrie who’s 13, usually playful and mischievous, but she’s /very/ sickly. She has a made-up condition that she was born with (that has no name) that starts out by causing her to be hypersensitive to pain, but will eventually cause memory loss, seizures and eventually death.

Which leads to my question. How should a sickly…[Read more]

]]> a1a77cc6fa5c8c8faec5f482a7af68de Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Novel Excerpt Critiques: Rising Phoenix in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/novel-excerpt-critiques-rising-phoenix/#post-7207 Wed, 04 Nov 2015 21:42:25 -0500 I think this scene was a bit Omniscient. Stephen and Raine are my MCs, and Rowan is a supporting so i was trying to have him in the scene, but it be focused on Stephen and Raine.

]]> 3d6c89cea408761ead2572133ab8bb13 Little Brown Dog started the topic Novel Excerpt Critiques: Rising Phoenix in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/novel-excerpt-critiques-rising-phoenix/ Wed, 04 Nov 2015 20:08:58 -0500 Howdy, y’all! Needing a little help with a scene. What do you think of this? It feels unnatural and awkwardly written to me personally. Stephen and Raine sat side-by-side at the large circular conference table as Rowan briefed the small gathering of soldiers.

“A little town on the western edge of our controlled territory has fallen to a l…[Read more]

]]> e04d6771ea5afe5b59fcac47001e9e48 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Greetings! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/greetings-3/page/2/#post-7193 Wed, 04 Nov 2015 18:59:36 -0500 Thank you!:)

]]> 2f8bb7e5b04ea2dfab90332b846617ff Little Brown Dog replied to the topic You know you are a writer when... in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/you-know-you-are-a-writer-when/page/5/#post-7189 Wed, 04 Nov 2015 17:46:42 -0500 OK. I will do it. I will do the elf thing:)

]]> 9f4c3bc02dfd9cb80bc9ea16715fe715 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Greetings! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/greetings-3/#post-7186 Wed, 04 Nov 2015 17:21:35 -0500 xP Oh no worries, i don’t remember how old i am, i didn’t bother to keep track after I left my last parallel universe.

]]> c7f6b1f68aaa142c8ab65376c5296a6e Little Brown Dog replied to the topic When Good Guys Act Like Villains in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/when-good-guys-act-like-villains/page/2/#post-7185 Wed, 04 Nov 2015 17:18:44 -0500 I’m thinking that if we ever reached a point where torture guaranteed accurate results, it might be permissible sometimes… This comes from a very long train of thought that won’t translate through my telepathic keyboard…

]]> 2f5cb426b126d29fed585d7ae3e29d22 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic When Good Guys Act Like Villains in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/when-good-guys-act-like-villains/page/2/#post-7181 Wed, 04 Nov 2015 17:05:30 -0500 An argument i’ve often seen used is that Is one person’s life and dignity worth the same as a 100 peoples’ lives? As a writer, I’m often inclined to say that 100 people are worth more, but then when using torture there’s the problem of lying. So it really is a super complex questionXP Because what is going to stop the theoretical terrorist from…[Read more]

]]> 9df8417d6cbc72eae1efc96a798d0959 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic Greetings! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/greetings-3/#post-7179 Wed, 04 Nov 2015 16:50:38 -0500 Ezra, i just want to say, you remind me of my 15yo brother. That is something he would do

]]> 8b40974f1696a4abf5bd453e857aeb99 Little Brown Dog replied to the topic You know you are a writer when... in the forum General Writing Discussions http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/you-know-you-are-a-writer-when/page/5/#post-7165 Wed, 04 Nov 2015 12:46:05 -0500 You know you’re a writer when your laptop consists of an overloaded Microsoft Word, movie soundtracks and a weathered keyboard.

Yes… I killed my laptop this summer with so many story ideas…. I still haven’t got a new one!

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