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@whalekeeper

One of my friends compared I think Nahim to someone from Star Wars or something, but idr.

Other than that, i don’t think anyone’s even known enough about my characters to compare them to others. Recently, I only really talk about characters on here or with Andrew. Mainly cuz my friends don’t really follow when I start ranting XD.

@hybridlore

He did, in his way. And he’ll address it again soon enough.

@liberty

WHAT!?!? You don’t like that one? (or are you choking with laughter?)

@koshka

Rory

Rory blinked slowly and looked around him. Where was he? what had happened? For a moment a shock of terror tore through him. Had they caught him:? was this…. His eyes found Leo’s and slowly the events of last night slid back into place. His shoulders relaxed and he looked down. “Sorry.”He glanced at Leo from the corner of his…[Read more]

*slides in late* I was at church camp this weekend.

@linus-smallprint

I don’t think it seems like you’re copying Wingfeather, but readers would definitely notice the similarities.

@linus-smallprint

Yes! The hug!

@stephie

Hallelujah! I prayed but I forgot to respond. XD

@whalekeeper

I’ll be praying. 🩷

@linus-smallprint

😂For study, I prefer the Elect Standard Version, but for memorizing things, I prefer the Knoweth Jesus Version.

@theshadow

Yeppp!!!

500 pages!!! Woohoo!!! *throws confetti*

@ellette-giselle

*randomly pops in*

Maybe having Leon point that out would help readers realize it more?

@elishavet-pidyon

I liked how you had Neveah try to combat the lie, and it’s obvious it’s for Sef’s sake, not her own. To make this sequence really work, maybe make Sef think her Mani is just trying to save herself – it’s not a lie about Sef, but it would make the former lie hit home. Make her really crumble since the last thing keeping the lie f…

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@elishavet-pidyon

wowww…that’s a lot to think about and really helpful!!! Thank you!

@elishavet-pidyon

Lol. Leon is more experienced than Julian. J will level out, he’s just excited and nervous and high strung and…. you get the point.

@linus-smallprint

AWWW!!! Adorable!!! So sweet!

@elishavet-pidyon

WHY would ANYONE in his right mind Say That?

It’s Julian who needs this speech. Go ask him.

He’s a little hot headed, he’s a firebrand, and he’s desperately excited to share the truth with his people.

 

Anyway, you probably do all that in this book, and I am really enjoying reading this. So far cultures are fascinating and the…

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@linus-smallprint

I like Rasins. Good for Leon and Julian not rejecting them.

why would anyone reject raisins!!??

Hmm. They’ve been away for about ten years, so things are going to feel very different to them. I can try to add a coming home feel.

Yes, they’ve had a wild day, and it’s just getting started.

Interesting. Both the…[Read more]

Here’s a little background on that scene…

yes, I know it is very sloppy and not perfect (I just wrote it literally today)

but here’s the cliffnotes:

• Sef is a slave of Iver, who is a Pythonos.
• Sef and Iver are currently in the throne room of the Master, leader of all Pythonos
• Iver has applied for a military position, and the Master is…

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@the_lost-journal

WHATTT
the chosen makes me wanna cry

it’s so good!!!! they portrayed it so well in my opinion hahaha

it’s my FAVORITE show of all time hahaha

@elishavet-pidyon

YES those are what I’m looking for!!!!
I will definitely be using those later in my book…

But I’m struggling with a specific scene where I need a lie XDXD and none of these seem to fit…

“Well, what are you waiting for?” the Master spat, motioning for Iver to continue. “You may begin whenever you are ready.”

Sef’s knees sho…

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@linus-smallprint

Okay good lol

Also, Paynes cannot become Pythonos because of genetics, but I’m not sure how to incorporate that in the book quite yet…don’t worry though, I’ll make that clearer in other drafts.

@esther-c

Okay perfect! Thank you!