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@hybridlore

I agree with Min and Jonas on everything they said. Resolve of the character will balance the unresolved political structure. However there’s still a lot of things you could do to end it differently. For one thing, most dystopias almost never talk about what happens after they take down the government. They need to reestablish…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

If you check out the link I posted earlier, I’ve added some more chapters. Tell me what you think! (Sorry if I’m bugging you by asking you to read EVERY SINGLE CHAPTER, but you seem to have an eye for problems and plot holes, so I really appreciate your advice. Feel free to tell me when it gets old, lol.)

I might have a cha…[Read more]

Sorry, I’ve been offline for the past day or two.

@jonas

Both look cool, but I like the second better. The first one was your profile pic before right? Maybe it goes against the design, but some color might help? You could just tint the gray parts blue or some other color.

Yeah, it was my profile picture for a while, it’s one of my favorite…[Read more]

Oh and as long as the rest  of your book is unique it’s alright to have a stereotypical ending. It’s when your book has a love triangle, America as a setting, and rebels taking down the government. If you can add one factor to really mix it up and make it something totally new, it won’t be considered stereotypical (Is it set in England for a…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Oof that’s a hard one XD

For a single novel, I think you do need a defining ending.

Something I have heard about in my research about plots is that there’s two separate goals your character has to reach. One of them is said and known about, such as defeating the government, the other is never mentioned but obvious to the reader.…[Read more]

@euodia-vision

Thank you so much!!

Lol go ahead and use it for a bit if you like! I’m not terribly attached because it was just a sketchy thing XD

@freedomwriter76

Aww it was cute!!

@savannah_grace2009 (Ok, awesome!) @grcr @rae @trailblazer @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76 @acancello

Hedieh

As Hedieh twirled around the room with Amir, she couldn’t help but smile. This was so much fun. As the music slowly stopped, Hedieh sighed and let her hands fall to her sides. “You caught on pretty quickly.”

“That doesn’t mean it w…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Oh and you asked for the plot 🤦🏻‍♀️ Oops. XD Here’s the blurb for the trilogy:

They’ve been trapped inside The Orb for twenty years. It covered all of Aletheia. But it slowly closes in on the nation. The people stuck inside have no way to communicate to those outside. Families are separated. But the people have gotten used to…

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@savannah_grace2009

Thanks so much!!

Yeah, for sure! I do have the first draft of the first book posted somewhere on here, but it’s changed a lot since then. I’m actually planning to post the third draft as I edit it soon.

@savannah_grace2009

Ok, Marcurious sounds like a really cool character. 😁

@euodia-vision

Aww, thanks girl! I guess I haven’t really shared much writing on here lately. But I’ve started on the first draft of the second book, so I’ve been getting a lot more actual writing done. (Instead of just editing… editing… editing… 😂)

@savannah_grace2009

Do you mind if Hedieh finds Ottoline? Because she hasn’t really interacted with any of the other girls yet.

@spinnner4him

I love the theme and the story idea!! The only thing I’d be careful about is making the plot cliched. Some cliches aren’t bad it’s just something to look out for, especially on this story idea. But I also don’t know how you’re planning to go about writing it, or the actual details of the plot. Anyway, if you post anything about it…[Read more]

@esther-c

Thank you! 🙂

@savannah_grace2009

You’re welcome!

You should totally read them!

The villains are human mutant sorts, who have been turned into lizards. They also elongate ssss’s like your character does!

“These ssstinky humansss” would be a common phrase 🤣

They are a christian fantasy allegory by Andrew Peterson. Themes are great, characters are great, the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @grcr

These look awesome, you guys!!

@spinner4him

It sounds really interesting! I’d think I’d have to know a little bit more to make any suggestions, since this is just the blurb, but it sounds awesome!

As for title ideas… I have no idea. XD The others’ suggestions are good. I’m terrible at coming up with titles. 😂

@mineralizedwritings

Aww, I love that!! Tauren and Lesli’s dynamic is one of my favorites. 🥰

@savannah_grace2009

I’d love to read the next part!!

@rae

I like it! I’d say just spend some time developing his character more if you aren’t sure what you want to go for yet. I develop characters by creating their personality and such, then writing…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Thank ya!!

@hybridlore

Thanks!