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@jonas

Whimsy is definitely one of most intriguing shards. I’m very interested in seeing what he/she is like.

Imagine the vessel is just the most dull character ever😂 That would be some interesting irony!

I’m guessing there is some pattern in the Shards, and whatever it is you could probably display it with that chart. The numbers might not be par…

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@jonas

Interesting. Part of me wants to believe that Whimsy is secretly Hoid, but we already know that’s not the case, although I wouldn’t rule Hoid out as secretly being Adonulsium. Anyway, yeah, a 16-gon, or rather a regular 16-gon I should say, or you can say Hexadecagon, but that system of naming gets redundant really fast, and most just use…[Read more]

@euodia-vision

XD yeah it’s too bad they don’t let you pick the part of the picture you want to use

@loopylin

wow that looks really cool! Reminds me of spiderpunk from ATSV XD

@euodia-vision

Pretty much. (Along with plotting a new WIP for NaNo… 😏)

Good! I’ve been editing directly on the doc, but I think I’m going to print it out and edit it by hand. That might help me see things better.

@kathleenramm

You know what might also be interesting to explore since you’ve talked about your questions and issues with Joseph Smith and my Church as a whole, we can play the reversal game where I talk about my own questions and misunderstandings of Orthodox Christianity (Or whatever sect you subscribe to if any) if your comfortable.…[Read more]

@jonas

Interesting, this makes me think of number theory! Could they also be placed on a 16-gon, instead of a linear line? That way they are all equal. Because it feels odd for there to be a numerical hierarchy, where would such a thing come from? And it isn’t a line of least to greatest, because Odium is one of if not the most powerful Shard…[Read more]

@jonas

Interesting. I actually didn’t know much about this, but I have been pondering on the nature and symmetry of the shards for a while. When I first learned about them, I was honestly a little disappointed, because they seemed random to me. When you have an elemental system, you usually want a theme, and it didn’t look like there was one…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Alright, so I finally got a chance to catch up again.

I actually don’t have too many comments on the latest 3 chapters as far as critiques go other than maybe Neveah’s part. I’m all for her having sudden resolve of vengeance, feeling intense emotions of anger and hatred, but it also felt perhaps a bit too sudden. Right now…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Shes worried about Hugo!💗 😍 🥹 This was such a good scene you wrote!!

@savannah_grace2009

Sure 🙃

@highscribeofaetherium

Thank you for explaining 😅 I’m not a science person, so I don’t have a good grasp on all that stuff. Thanks.

That’s alright, lol! This is very helpful actually, because I need to know how much my readers know, so I can explain things properly, and not annoy them with too much explanation at the same time.

I don’t find her t…

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@hybridlore

You’re welcome!

There’s a lot of things I could say in reply, but I think the best thing to do would be spend a long time on worldbuilding. The more worldbuilding you do, the more will become clear, and the world will seem more real to the viewers. I know pantsing if fun, and you can totally do it, but it sounds like it might be…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I can’t really think of anything right now, but I’ll definitely think it over and get back to you on it!

@rae

Sounds good!! I love your style, btw. It’s fresh and unique. 😊

@savannah_grace2009

I don’t think it’s too clunky. There may be a few places where it could be made a little smoother, but I’m not sure how to fix that. 😅 If this is just your first or second draft, then I think it’s definitely fine how it is. 🙂

@savannah_grace2009

Nice!

@savannah_grace2009

I understand. Distractions do definitely come. I finished the poem post I’ve been working on since September 25th!

How’d your sprint go?

@hybridlore

Right, like the internal resolution vs the outward resolution. Sooo, I sort of feel like Katrin doesn’t exactly have her own huge goal. It’s more she’s trying to survive and protect her brother, but I’ve lately realized that she also holds a grudge against the administrators for a few reasons, mostly just because of the living conditi…

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Starting at :00, going til about :40 if anyone wants to join. It’s been a while! How’s it going for you all?

@aranel

No problem, I love explaining my story to people! (And I have been wanting to read Dune for months now, is it any good?)

I can recommend the first book to anyone with the time, but it really depends on what you want after that. The first book is much more of a hero’s journey with clear good and evil, but after that, the books become…[Read more]