Esther

@esther-c

That was great!! I was not expecting Mr. Kringle to actually be Santa . . . it was wonderful.

I actually liked how you implied that they kissed but didn’t actually say so. I honestly think that’s cuter and more romantic than saying “he kissed her and she loved it and she kissed him back blah blah blah.” lol 🤣😁😘

@godlyfantasy12 @esther-c @keilah-h @loopylin (everyone still with the dragon… or is the dragon)

Milo

Milo stood frozen by the wall as half their group ran out. Several were still scattered around the room, Feather and Crosshair the only ones he knew. (A bunch of characters appeared and I don’t know where they came from xD) The dragon (is…[Read more]

I’ll tag some other KeePers to come say hi!

@freedomwriter76 @godlyfantasy12 @starofthenorth @keilah-h @esther-c @lightoverdarkness6 @felicity @whalekeeper @theloonyone @loopylin @wilder-w @mineralizedwritings @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @ava-blue @folith-feolin @power @sarafini @madelyn

@lightoverdarkness6

Btw, I love the pictures for Durwin and the twins! They’re twins, right? Oh, and yes, I think they look like twins. Not like super alike, but they look like they’re siblings. 😉

Okay, great! Thank you!

And I think you’re fine with Asher and Iris . . . unless @esther-c and @freedomwriter76 disagree, of course!

@esther-c

That was really hilarious!! Good job on this cheesy Christmas romance story!! 😂😂

I’m sure your grandparents will love it!

@esther-c

That was adorable! And so funny 🤣🤣 When the candy cane fingerprint showed up, I was just like . . . seriously?!?! But it’s great. Cheesy, yeah, but that’s what you were going for. I hope your grandparents enjoy it!

I can’t think of any titles right now but I’ll let you know if I do!

@esther-c

XD Wow. XD

That was so cringey but hilariously cute at the same time.

Santa Claus?! XD

*Wipes tears of laughter from eyes*

I’m really not sure how to critique it. The prose is a little choppy, but the story itself is distracting me. XD

Candy cane fingerprints!? XD A magically appearing mistletoe? (That particular bit was pure…[Read more]

@esther-c

That was like a Hallmark movie, only even better! XD

The candy cane fingerprint was probably the funniest thing for me.

@arien

Asher and Iris are so cute too! Maybe I just missed it, but are they friends or siblings?

Oh, they are siblings. Thank you!! I’ve been wondering if I should change their names tho, bc Freedom-writer has an Iris and Esther-c Has an Asher, and I don’t want them to think I copied them… Btw, I love the pictures for Durwin and the twins!…[Read more]

@esther-c

Wow That was hilarious! I love it! I really felt the characters, even with it being a short story. And although cheesy, the romance was super cute!!

You could call it, “A Christmas dream”, but that’s a bit generic.

As far as writing goes, there isn’t really much I would change. If this were an actual story, I would say they should get…[Read more]

@esther-c 🤣 it’s k Ev!! Nyx didn’t like him either 🤣

Grimm

The two introduced themselves, though the man seemed to be eyeing Grimm warily. Not that Grimm wasn’t used to that.

He did have a bit of a…dangerous air about him. Or so he’d been told.

“It’s nice to meet you both!” Lyn answered for him, obviously having checked on Nyx enough to b…[Read more]

@esther-c @godlyfantasy12

Ok so it’s hard to keep track… but I think Milo (and Cammie?) are with the dragon rn too. (that right @theloonyone ?) Oh and feather and crosshair are there too.

Trying to help us stay organized with who is where, also because we have split the groups to make them easier to manage, maybe only tag the people your…[Read more]

@esther-c MWAHAHAHA XD

@arien oh ya…totally just the cold XD *throws you jacket XD*

@esther-c @arien Eeeeeek!!! Im so glad y’all are on board!!

@koshka

also!! I’m thinking at the beginning of every chapter including a song that kinda represents the chapter and such because a lot of my ideas for this has come from Christmas songs.

@esther-c

Grimm

Nyx’s bandages were done, and thankfully this time the kit had given them a lot less trouble. Grimm was positive it was because Lyn was with him now, soothing the kit as Grimm worked.

Nyx stirred now, opening his eyes, finding focus on Lyn’s tearful face. Grimm watched as his tails slowly began to wag…[Read more]

@esther-c

Durwin intrigues me!!

Me too! I love him so much!

And I want to see that scene you mentioned! I’ve been reading your WIP but don’t have a ton of time to critique, sorry. I love your characters’ names though! Especially Amidala!

@esther-c I do think I’ll have them meet Grimm, Lyn and Nyx!

@esther-c AHHH I WANNA SEE THIS SCENE 🤣