Esther

@the_lost-journal

Phew, so glad it didn’t actually happened. No worries! I’ll continue to pray for her.

@the_lost-journal

I’ll keep praying.

@hybridlore  @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

NEXT SECTION!!

Time passed, and Leon’s wounds began to heal, leaving deep scaring in many places. However, his strength was harder to regain. Without good food, and surviving on only two meals a day, he had already begun to weaken. After the beating and…

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@koshka

Ooo. Hmmm. I wonder which one is going to have the least people……..

Prob. the top floor.

Rory

Rory looked up as the door opened. Leo stepped out and Rory followed him into the hallway. It was quiet here with no students running about. It seemed… not peaceful. Peaceful was the church. No, this was… stiff. It almost felt…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 so the brothers are a little like Moses and Aaron, kinda! Cool! Emyr would be the Moses equivalent, the younger brother that leads the people according to God’s plan, and then Daryen would be the Aaron-like, the older brother fulfilling the more explicitly priestly role.

(was just reading Numbers in my morning Bible study, so t…[Read more]

@koshka Thank you! Yes, while I’m probably going to aim a bit in the middle of YA and Middle grade, I’m just not sure how comfortable I am at least in this drafting stage with certain issues and of course this is a CLEAN work/series, so while I will deal with heavy issues, making it more YA, and writing style as well (I hope lol!) I don’t want to…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Ooooo!!! I love this section!!!

Ok. Callan is a knave, and that was creepy, but well done. This description of him made me laugh:

Callan’s voice sounded like something that crawled out of a swamp.

And November facing someone he fears to protect Ara was AMAZING. And her Uncle is fantastic. Being a PK myself, I loved his c…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle I can get behind having a gun and a shield inside the pulpit. He’s well prepared.

I don’t think my church has ever had a shooting in our area, but we still have people guarding around. I work in the pre-k Sunday school, and sometimes, if the weather’s nice, we take the kids over to the playground we have just outside the…[Read more]

@theducktator

100%

Go look at Alcatraz if anyone disagrees with that statement,

@hybridlore

Lolol. you seemed pretty convinced…… 😂

Well, the overseers are cruel and they picked Ian as their target. They want him to live in the absolute terror that he could slip up any moment and that would be the end. It’s a terror that drives him crazy. He already had that rebellious spark and a sort of fire about him to begin with,…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Oh my gosh. That’s dreadful. I’ll be praying.

and if it feels like im just bullying November I am SORRY its just cuz im writing the first scenes/first book and basically this book has a lot of rough scenes for November…this was his life…sad to say…It gets better gang! He has some good scenes with Ara!

@godlyfantasy12 wow!

so Ara’s family is all in high positions? Her parents are the rulers, her uncle is called a “prophet” so I’m guessing that means he’s their advisor?

@koshka

Rory

Rory let out a slow breath. He even gave Leo a slight smile as they road up the elevator. He was still turning the older boy’s words over in his mind. It didn’t make much sense. After all, they said that fear was weakness and that’s why they were punishing him and the others. Rory chewed on his lip and then quickly stopped,…[Read more]

and yea, I know its rough….no critiques plz XD

@linus-smallprint

Yay!

(I kind of want to tag some people who haven’t read book one yet to see how well I can provide context in book II, but maybe I will wait for a later draft for that. what do you think?)

One of my pet peeves is when authors provide tons of context about book I in book II. If you start at the middle book in a series, then y…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h @whalekeeper @loopylin @freed_and_redeemed @anyone else lol

SOOO I just finished writing most of a scene (it’s not finished yet) but I wanted to share it cuz…ya

SOME TRIGGER WARNINGS!

There is some unwanted flirting, nothing too intense, but the guy is not nice and makes Ara very uncomfortable.

And…more November…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 oh, cool! Those are really pretty colors you’ve picked, too.

so one of them dies canonically? Or you’re just saying if one dies the crystal goes dull? Will someone else get it, or will it just never be usable again cause its owner is gone forever? (Unless he or she has a way of coming back.)

@linus-smallprint

Yeah. I didn’t think it was realistic for her to be able to keep disappearing without her family knowing.