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@ellette-giselle

I was going to, but it wouldn’t let me sign in with my alt account and I didn’t want my main on there for all to see.

I don’t think I’ve heard of Equilibrium—is that a movie or a book?

@whalekeeper

Which plot twist? The one about Jonas’s dad?

@hybridlore

also, have you read the Giver? This book reminds me a lot of that so far.

Dystopian classic. *Sighs emphatically* I remember reading one of the plot twists as a nervous little thirteen-year-old and freaking out. Really good book.

@hybridlore

Okay thanks.

I noticed you don’t comment. Can you not do that for some reason because of a setting I have, or do you rather tag me here?

Yes, I like Don too. 🙃

Hmm. I’ve seen the movie, but I never was able to get my hands on the book. I actually took a lot of inspiration from Equilibrium, and even some from Hunger Games,…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

It was right around when Sara burst out at Jonathan.

I don’t know… I like Don. 😅 And Jonathan.

also, have you read the Giver? This book reminds me a lot of that so far.

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CHAPTER 4 and 5!!!!

@hybridlore

Yay! Wonder what glitched before…. 🤔

Oh really? Whoops! Did you mark the spot, or do I need to go find it?

Glad the tension is building!! Have a favorite character yet?

Hehe unintentional pun

I have a mystery story idea but absolutely no clue how to write a mystery:(

@ellette-giselle

It worked!

I liked these chapters. You did a great job of increasing the tension. I did notice that you briefly switched into Sara’s POV during the first chapter, then went back to Jonathan. I would fix that.

Great job!

@hybridlore

That is very odd. Did you let it load and scroll down? I just tried clicking on the link as a guest and it worked fine for me…..

Try again. I reloaded the page on my end,

@godlyfantasy12

Godlyyyy

You’re here, madam ghost. I see you on the Currently Active bar.

@ellette-giselle

They’re not showing up on the link for me.

@liberty

Gotcha.

@hybridlore

Okay, great! I’m glad you felt that difference.

Yes…Jace is the youngest. Everyone else is in their twenties or thirties…Jace is the only one with the word “teen” in his age. Everyone views him like their little brother.

Guy… we didn’t really get much there, but I got the impression he is haunted by his past. Lol…

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@keilah-h

Fr. I don’t want characters to agree with me all the time, because then there would be nothing to think about.

@whalekeeper

Life be like that sometimes.

lol

@whalekeeper

Isaiah’s “code” doesn’t bother me. I mean, it would bother me in real life.

ehhh that’s characters in morally compromised settings for ya though.

Even your absolute favorite will most likely always, always say something that you don’t quite agree with if their plot has to do with them dealing with, or being, questionable people.

@whalekeeper

haha.

@ellette-giselle

Wait what? You mean you don’t use spell check for the other book and still manage to have something readable?!

I didn’t know other writers couldn’t spell until I joined KP. XD I’ve rarely needed spell check. But my handwriting is horrible, and people can’t read it, so the skills balance out.