Esther

@hybridlore     @koshka     @keilah-h       @elishavet-pidyon       @theducktator     @grcr   @whalekeeper

Chapters 12-13!!!!

@whalekeeper

1. As always, I absolutely love reading your writing. Thanks for sharing <3

2. There will be more Fel and Lo scenes eventually. I’m currently struggling with coming up with a villain and filling out the main plot.

3. Your current signature is diabolical and not appreciated.

@elishavet-pidyon @whalekeeper
Lois

Lois slipped the note into his pocket and looked around the classroom. Most of his classmates faces were unfamiliar. He didn’t have much energy at the moment to introduce himself to someone new, and pairing up with Felicity was an almost guaranteed bad grade.

Viktor shifted uneasily in his seat next to Lois.…[Read more]

After discovering that dragons aren’t as immortal as they seem, a corrupt monarchy attempts to take over the world–however, the children they kidnapped turn against them and keep interfering with their devious plans. 

This is for a new novel I’m brainstorming.

OMC I LOVE EVERYONE’s

A group of traumatized teens fight to stop a group of pathological liars from taking over the world, while fighting the intrusive thoughts to become pathological liars themselves.

@koshka

*Does a little dance* Descriptions are sometimes the bane of my existence because you never know if they’re coming across.

And I promise bullying isn’t the majority of Lucille’s childhood experience. There are actually so many things I want to write about for her, and many things are more cheerful and interesting.

@elishavet-pidyon

She’s my favorite, may I have mercy on her soul. XD

I think I like her dad. Is he Dali?

Yes, he’s Dali. I call Lucille’s mum by her name as well. It feels more humanizing to call him that in this story rather than calling him ‘her dad’ or Dad.

I also found her description of her hair fascinating. Is it just metaphor, or does it…

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@loopylin

AHa! That works… I lost my place too…

Now let’s see if I can get back into my charrie’s head.

Viktor

Lab partners. Right.

Viktor shuffled his notes into his textbook as slowly as he could, making sure each page was smooth and even. His old habit to duck his head out of friendships cut again. A quick glance at Lois didn’t help.…[Read more]

@hybridlore     @koshka     @keilah-h       @elishavet-pidyon       @theducktator     @grcr   @whalekeeper

Theme song for Jonathan in current stage of arc and somewhat forward.

@ellette-giselle @theducktator @linus-smallprint @whalekeeper @keilah-h

Two new chapters!

@whalekeeper

Wow. Poor Lucille.

@ellette-giselle

Got it.

@whalekeeper

Aw, Lucille… I like Lucille.

I think I like her dad. Is he Dali?

I also found her description of her hair fascinating. Is it just metaphor, or does it have an important part in the plot/worldbuilding?

Those other kids are bullies. 😠 The struggle of wills in the fight was really good though. I liked how you focus on her not throwi…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Oh, I forgot that chapter ended there. 🙃

Yeah, they’ve turned in plenty of people. For Jonathan’s parents it was more Agent retaliation. We’re here to pick up the kid. You don’t have the kid? Fine, you pay for it. That sort of thing.

@ellette-giselle

Jim giving Jonathan shoes. It was a sweet ending.

Ohh, right. But other people, maybe.

@hybridlore

what was sweet?

No, the gang was not involved in that one. They were killed because they hid Jonathan.

@ellette-giselle

:] Mayhaps I will post more when desire returns.

@ellette-giselle

Aww. That was sweet.

Jim seemed nicer to Jonathan before these chapters, but I guess Jonathan was hidden and Jim didn’t have to worry about the others watching.

Did the gang have something to do with Jonathan’s parents dying?

@loopylin

Is Enid your friend?

“Yeah, she’s… yeah.”

No, I’ve never been on one of those. We have cars and, like, normal buses.

“Huh. At first I was going to say that sounds tedious, but I can’t talk like that when sky trams are so undependable.”

What do the buildings in your city look like?

“Imagine every building had three or four stories at l…[Read more]