Ellette Giselle

@ellette-giselle @grcr @esther-c

Okay, thanks for letting me know. 🙂

@ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah-h

@koshka @freed_and_redeemed @trailblazer @whalekeeper @theducktator @elishavet-pidyon @power @jonas

TODAY IS THE DAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Are you all ready to submit your stories???!!!! I’m so excited to read them!

@ellette-giselle

I don’t know. XD But I fully agree. We’ve even been bouncing ideas off our brother. It’s been fun!

@koshka @power @ellette-giselle @freed_and_redeemed @mostKeePers @Narnians!!!

I honestly don’t know who are Narnia nerds în here. Most of us have fond memories for the series. Anyone love Susan? Lucy and Peter were always my favorite, but I still loved the others. Anyone read The Last Battle and cry? *cough, cough*

According to C. S. Lewis,…[Read more]

@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint @whalekeeper @the_lost-journal @keilah-h

I rewrote the first chapter with all of your suggestions in mind, do you want me to post it for your thoughts/critiques?

@ellette-giselle

i am so relieved Jack is still there!! Also, I have a feeling I’m going to like Dylan.
just a hunch.

I hope you like Dylan too, he’s probably my second favorite character to write.

also, I’m not sure about Olivia and Adaline’s reaction. You see, when people bully others it tends to be because of insecurity and cowardice. I have…

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@ellette-giselle

I promise it was completely coincidental.
this time.

Well, you’ve already got a Roland for my dad, and a Julian and Adrian for two of his brothers. If you manage to get the names of his other three brothers in there, then I’m going to be suspicious. (You however did get what was almost the name of the 5th brother, Quinton)

@keilah-h @ellette-giselle

Y’all were talking about British and Australian exclamations and it reminded me of something that happened recently…

So we have friends who are Australian, but their dad is the only one who actually naturally has the accent. I’m a sucker for the Aussie accent, lol. And I was talking with him one time and with some…[Read more]

@keilah-h @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @the_lost-journal @liberty

Okay, here’s the next chapter. Any critiques/thoughts would be appreciated.

Chapter 2

It was quiet. Extraordinarily quiet. The clock did not tick on Elina’s wall, the alarm on her phone did not blare, and her siblings did not come to wake her up. The only noise came from Elina h…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Aw, that’s okay! If you know of a different way to get it through, I’m open to trying other things, but I understand if it’s too difficult for you to do right now.

@ellette-giselle (I know you’re away, so don’t feel obligated to respond to this until you get back) @theshadow @whalekeeper @koshka @raxforge

Sorry these are late, it slipped my mind until last night. Without further ado, here are chapters seven and eight (also known as the underground church cha…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

thx.

I did have a scene before this one, but I didn’t deem it ready for posting, since there are a few things I want to smooth out first. Hopefully that scene will make it flow better.

@ellette-giselle @hybridlore @whalekeeper @keilah-h

Sorry for not posting in eight days. I hit Writer’s Block while trying to edit the next story to go on here and writing the next one 🙁

I’m not sure how long until I can post the full thing, but until then, I’m gonna post a snippet of the next…[Read more]

@liberty

Thank you!!

@keilah-h

Indeed lol.

@hybridlore

The first three chapters are pretty short because I wasn’t too invested in them lol.

Thank you so much for the critiques, I 100% agree with all of them. I used telling in this specifically because I didn’t know what to write to make it longer, so I’ll try using the suggestions for showi…[Read more]

@keilah-h @ellette-giselle

Thanks for the feedback! I thing I will go with this then.

In regards to your suggestion, Ellette, I think I might go with something that. I noticed in those paragraphs, I had fallen back into the narration style I used in the first draft. (Awkward! Overly Defensive!) This is probably part of why it feels odd to you.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @theducktator

Thanks for the feedback! I feel like everything is coming together now. I’m going to try to get this outline polished this week so that I can send it off to my editor for her thoughts.

Ducktator, did you see that note I added on the idea of using a slave to push Alan in the direction of trusting and obeying The…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @hybridlore @the_lost-journal

Okay, well here’s the first chapter. I’m not a huge fan of it, but the other draft first chapter wasn’t great either. So critiques are definitely appreciated.

Chapter 1

“You ever wondered what it would be like to leave Rosen?”

Elina’s eyebrows shot up, “Why? Do you intend to?”
“I…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle ok then! sorry about that death in the family, even if you didn’t know him. And thanks for letting us know.

Also yeah, I feel you about your dad being the only sane one in his family. My dad is the same way. His family’s kind of a mess sometimes.

@ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah_h @koshka @freed_and_redeemed trailblazer @whalekeeper @theducktator @elishavet_pidyon @power @jonas

Please pardon me, everyone…I can’t believe I forgot about the deadline!!!!! So sorry about that…

Well, it looks like all things work together for good since Esthe…[Read more]