Ellette Giselle

@keilah-h @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @the_lost-journal @liberty

Okay, here’s the next chapter. Any critiques/thoughts would be appreciated.

Chapter 2

It was quiet. Extraordinarily quiet. The clock did not tick on Elina’s wall, the alarm on her phone did not blare, and her siblings did not come to wake her up. The only noise came from Elina h…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Aw, that’s okay! If you know of a different way to get it through, I’m open to trying other things, but I understand if it’s too difficult for you to do right now.

@ellette-giselle (I know you’re away, so don’t feel obligated to respond to this until you get back) @theshadow @whalekeeper @koshka @raxforge

Sorry these are late, it slipped my mind until last night. Without further ado, here are chapters seven and eight (also known as the underground church cha…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

thx.

I did have a scene before this one, but I didn’t deem it ready for posting, since there are a few things I want to smooth out first. Hopefully that scene will make it flow better.

@ellette-giselle @hybridlore @whalekeeper @keilah-h

Sorry for not posting in eight days. I hit Writer’s Block while trying to edit the next story to go on here and writing the next one 🙁

I’m not sure how long until I can post the full thing, but until then, I’m gonna post a snippet of the next…[Read more]

@liberty

Thank you!!

@keilah-h

Indeed lol.

@hybridlore

The first three chapters are pretty short because I wasn’t too invested in them lol.

Thank you so much for the critiques, I 100% agree with all of them. I used telling in this specifically because I didn’t know what to write to make it longer, so I’ll try using the suggestions for showi…[Read more]

@keilah-h @ellette-giselle

Thanks for the feedback! I thing I will go with this then.

In regards to your suggestion, Ellette, I think I might go with something that. I noticed in those paragraphs, I had fallen back into the narration style I used in the first draft. (Awkward! Overly Defensive!) This is probably part of why it feels odd to you.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @theducktator

Thanks for the feedback! I feel like everything is coming together now. I’m going to try to get this outline polished this week so that I can send it off to my editor for her thoughts.

Ducktator, did you see that note I added on the idea of using a slave to push Alan in the direction of trusting and obeying The…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @hybridlore @the_lost-journal

Okay, well here’s the first chapter. I’m not a huge fan of it, but the other draft first chapter wasn’t great either. So critiques are definitely appreciated.

Chapter 1

“You ever wondered what it would be like to leave Rosen?”

Elina’s eyebrows shot up, “Why? Do you intend to?”
“I…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle ok then! sorry about that death in the family, even if you didn’t know him. And thanks for letting us know.

Also yeah, I feel you about your dad being the only sane one in his family. My dad is the same way. His family’s kind of a mess sometimes.

@ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah_h @koshka @freed_and_redeemed trailblazer @whalekeeper @theducktator @elishavet_pidyon @power @jonas

Please pardon me, everyone…I can’t believe I forgot about the deadline!!!!! So sorry about that…

Well, it looks like all things work together for good since Esthe…[Read more]

@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah-h

The others:@power  @calyhuge  @whalekeeper   @theducktator  @elishavet-pidyon @the_lost-journal  @trailblazer  @jonas @beth-torres @euodia-vision @thearcaneaxiom @smiley  @freed_and_redeemed @loopylin @felicity  @savannah_grace2009  @koshka

Please pard…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @keilah-h @stephie @theducktator

Before I move on to writing the first draft of book II, I want to get a feel for how writing my magic system with the changes I decided to make. I have rewritten Chapter the 30th to get this. What do you think? If you think this works, I will replace what I currently have in my second…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Okay, caught up to the section where the Klein become Christians.

“When do you wish to meet Roland?” Rolf asked.

At that moment, there was a knock on the door. Before anyone could speak it crashed open. “Rolf! Where are you, Rolf? You were supposed to go hunting with me yesterday! Where were you?”

“That would be Roland,”…

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@ellette-giselle

Thank you for letting us know. I hope this goes well. Will be praying for you and your family as well as for wisdom for your dad.

@ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @theducktator

Now that you’ve all had a chance to read the outline of The Sword, some questions:

• As a reader, is this a direction you would be satisfied to see the story take?
• What do you think of the character development you see in this (specifically for Alan, Martha, Eric, and Cyrus)?
• Now that you’ve seen…

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@ellette-giselle

Oh no, I’m sorry! I’ll be praying for y’all as you travel and try to get things worked out.

We’ll miss you! 😢

@ellette-giselle

You can post anything you want in the Art Sharing For All 😛

@elishavet-pidyon

Thank you *hugs*

@ellette-giselle

Awesome! XDXD Maaybe… *wants to say yes* I wouldn’t be against giving Rory a go, if you post a description in the art chat. I am very distracted with life stuff right now, but I would love to remember what he looks like, regardless of whether I draw him.