Jaybird

@savannah_grace2009

Lukas 

“I miss my pani…” Liv said. Her hands slowly filled with water. Lukas blinked a few times, opening and closing his mouth.

“Wai— wha? How did you do that?” He pointed to her hands, his eyes wide.

@savannah_grace2009

Aww, I loved this scene!! 🥰

@theshadow

Also, this map might help you to visualize the countries.

I loved it!!! That was great!!

Haha. You happy now.

And I just saw the cover. ITS SO GOOD!!!!!!

Thank you!!!!

Yes, I would love to!!!

Wonderful! I’ll create a new WIP and tag you!

Also, I just dropped a couple scenes on the Chat Chat if you want to take a look. It’s the book I’m currently working on revising.

@grcr

Childhood trauma warning. lol.
Chapter 1.
District 5

A seventeen-year-old boy dressed in a black pull-over hoodie, khaki pants, and a too small pair of shoes, crouched on the roof of a house. It was dark out, and he was well hidden in shadows. His light brown hair was covered by his hood, and his green eyes–– holding a mixture of anger and…[Read more]

@grcr

I also agree with Rae, though, that it doesn’t really sound like 2065…

Yeah, well scrap the date. It was an idea that I don’t think will work for the plot outline. So. No date.

I feel like them talking out all of their plans for a whole chapter/prologue isn’t the most… eye catching… at least in my opinion…

But then again, I feel like…

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@rae

Should be ‘reins’ if you mean like those that control a horse.

I’m dying. YES it is. Grammar!!!!!!!! My old nemesis strikes again. 🙁

i like the story idea, but the tech level sounds to much like our time. I don’t get that sci-fi vibe from it.

Ugh. Grrrrrrrr. Ok, Maybe I’ll bring the date down a little. Closer in I guess. I’ll try to fix t…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Ok, no problem. I finished the whole book, so You’ll just have to scroll through and read the chapters. there are 16 of them.

@savannah_grace2009

I need to spend some time with my sister, we’re about to do a Bible study!

I feel sooo bad, but I have to go….I’m sorry!

Hey, don’t feel bad at all. Spending time with family is more important then this. I’m glad you stopped to do it.

If you want, you can try it without me to see if you’d want to do it together!

Na, I’ll ju…[Read more]

Also that’s so sweet of you like wow that makes my day!!!!!!!!!

I’m so glad!!!

I think if we sprint it will be mostly an “editing” sprint, or just writing for however long we “sprint”…because I need to grab a broom and clean all the cringe out of it… XD

Right-o.

@savannah_grace2009

Sure, I’ve been writing already! So, is it writing with no brake? Or can you pause? (just curious?)

@savannah_grace2009

So keep that version?

OK, here is the cover!!

@savannah_grace2009

Awesome!! I’ll tag a few more of you too.

@stephie @theshadow @keilah-h @highscribeofaetherium @whalekeeper @rae @linus-smallprint @grcr @loopylin @freed_and_redeemed

OK all, how is this for a story starter? I want to honestly know if it catches y’all attention.

 
Prologue
7/10/2065
 

Night had fallen over the capital…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

“No, not like me,” Cassian laughed. “Be like you, Birdie. The Great One made you something special. Don’t let anyone tell you otherwise.”

Much better.

I love the idea of using the seasons!

And I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Good! I’m glad you liked it! It was just a spur of the moment thing. lol.

Why are you so good at…

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Hey, I have a rough draft I decided to settle down and rewrite. I was wondering if anyone wanted to read the prologue and tell me what they think? Just for fun. Not like serious critiques or something. More like what y’all do just sharing scenes.

@savannah_grace2009

Ooo, I really liked it! Super good! I like where this is going!

Yeah, Jonas is right again. I think you could honestly keep it in this chapter as long as you put something more important in the first section. Like the brother. Who is this other brother? This is the first we have heard of another sibling, and all we have…[Read more]

Ooo, I really liked it! Super good! I like where this is going!

Yeah, Jonas is right again. I think you could honestly keep it in this chapter as long as you put something more important in the first section. Like the brother. Who is this other brother? This is the first we have heard of another sibling, and all we have is, “Lilitu had another…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Of course that would also mean going to bed at a decent hour…like at 9 PM?!?!? That’s so early but I need to start going to bed earlier…so you could be my bedtime accountability partner XD XD

9:00 a good time to go to bed. 9:00-9:30 is my goal. Well, as you can see, I’m awake so if you want to do some sprinting I’ll do it with…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

@theshadow

 
ALTERNATE ENDING!!!
Julius lowered his head, but beyond the taunts of the voice, he could feel something. It was like the warmth of the sun’s first rays creeping into the courtyard. It was a tiny, tiny sliver of peace. Julius found himself looking back at Marcus and Flavia. I was there for them. A voice w…[Read more]