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@savannah_grace2009

I like their character arch! It sounds great!

I also agree with Jonas, especially if Cass is a Peter-type character. Ok, ultimate redemption––– Cassian is touched by Elroy, (Or one of the others, but i particularly like Elroy for this because he is kinda the family “nobody”) and through Elroy’s faith and selfless actio…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

OH. so I didn’t have to go from page one and work my way up.

You could have said that sooner.

@savannah_grace2009

Ugh, I can’t find it. I must be blind.

@savannah_gace2009

Her and Aaron? He can’t marry her because she’s not a believer and Aaron will not become unequally yoked. Plus, she hates him.

@savannah_grace2009

No, I haven’t. let me go take a look.

@savannah_grace2009

Oh I get that. I just mean there was no him thinking he was perfect at all. Like, it seemed to me, the reader,  that he was a humble and loving guy who wanted the best for sef and his brothers. There needs to be a little bit of that arogance showing. just a tiny bit. otherwise it’s not real. Ya know?

@savannah_grace2009

Oooooo I LOVE this!!!

Ok, one thing,

You see, Cass has a subconscious drive to pump himself up. He feels insecure about himself, so he manipulates situations in order to get people to look up to him or get praise. He doesn’t fully realize that he’s doing that to Sef, but it’s all a selfish desire to get those feeli…

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Oooooo I LOVE this!!!

Ok, one thing,

You see, Cass has a subconscious drive to pump himself up. He feels insecure about himself, so he manipulates situations in order to get people to look up to him or get praise. He doesn’t fully realize that he’s doing that to Sef, but it’s all a selfish desire to get those feelings of being important and a…

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@savannah_grace2009

Aw, that’s so sweet. It’s always so fun to find a character you can relate to!

Ah, thanks for the heads up! I’ll go see right now.

@savannah_grace2009

Thank you so much!

You like Sabina? Do you see redemption in her, or are you just hoping?

K y’all, here’s the next part. @linus-smallprint @savannah_grace2009 @theshadow

As Aaron stood and spoke to the people, he knew this time something was different. He could feel the Lord working among them, and he could see in their expressions that their eyes were being opened.

By noon, several villagers had come to faith, and once it started, it…

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@linus-smallprint

Ah, yeah, I posted it several days ago and was like, “wonder where everyone is….” then I realized I didn’t tag y’all. lol.

Haha, I’m glad you enjoyed it. Sabina…. poor girl. You can see she loves her brother dearly, and she was very frightened for him. But, she also feels betrayed. Poor thing, she’s so tangled up…[Read more]

@theducktator

I feel like I should have some long drawn out post since one of my first for real novels was dystopian, but it seriously needs a lot of work, so I only have one short piece of advice for you. 😉

Don’t limit your scope. A lot of times dystopia takes place in a world/country similar to America, right? Don’t tie yourself down to tha…[Read more]

@esther-c

Oh no that’s ok! I’m glad you like it!!

@ellette-giselle
Yep! Sorry, my post was a little late, lol

@esther-c

I assume you’re speaking of Nathan?

Thank you! I’m glad you like it!

@ellette-giselle

Oooh, he looks so cool!!

@savannah_grace2009

What did I say! I knew there was something more to Eloy! I really like him now.

Cass is a jerk.