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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
I got one across the arm on accident and that thing scared for almost a year!
Woah…um…do I want to ask this?…yes…I will…
So, uh, who whipped you?
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Even if we fail…we should at least try…
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
The KP WITNESS PROTECTION has been initiated to protect characters from their authors. Beware.
By the way, I love this line!!!! I feel like it’s so true…we must protect Rolf!!!!
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
*gasp of horror*
Well at least it’s spelled differently and your father is not Arab. (right?)
Right! He’s not Arab…but half Turkish.
Goodness! The amount of names of family members I’ve used? *faints*
My goodness. Poor you!
Hey! You are looking at the wrong person! I didn’t hit Rolf with a horsewhip!
I know, I know…
I mean,…
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
I was milking her…and she hit me in the face with her tail. Well, it’s happened many of times, so I received different kinds of lashes. The ones I’m thinking of when I read about Rolf was the horrid dry-tail flicks. It usually hurts the most when only a few strands of their tail hit your face.
But man, they hurt bad. Catching y…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Wow. I have not gotten this good of a reaction in a long time!!!
I’m LOVING THIS!!!
I mean, I got an entire new squad created just for me!!!
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Nearby, he saw Rolf lying on his side, his shoulders jerking with silent, tearless sobs. Leon couldn’t blame him.
😭😭😭
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
*wants to ask for another section, but is also concerned of what I might find in it*
That’s just a risk your gonna have to take.
WHAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NONONONONONO!! Okay, if you have to kill one of them…pick Roland…please…I already like Rolf way too much since he got whipped in the face…and I now know a character who understan…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
*gasp of horror*
OH MY WORD!!!
No way!!!
Oh wow! Yikes! Goodness!!!!
I HAD NO IDEA!
Well at least it’s spelled differently and your father is not Arab. (right?)
Goodness! The amount of names of family members I’ve used? *faints*
OH MY GOSH!!!!! OW. OW. OW!!!
YES! Ow is right!!! Those things HURT!!
I got one across the arm…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Okay. I’ll mention the ink just for you.
Aw. Thanks!🥰
you might not see one of them ever again.
WHAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NONONONONONO!! Okay, if you have to kill one of them…pick Roland…please…I already like Rolf way too much since he got whipped in the face…and I now know a character who understands what that feels like…
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Hassan struck him across the face with his horse whip. Rolf bent, gasping from the pain, his hand pressed to his face.
OH MY GOSH!!!!! OW. OW. OW!!!
I know that’s like!! Except a cow delivered the lash to my face…
I can totally feel what Rolf’s feeling right then!!! *sob* SO cruel, Ellette!!!! Do you have any idea how much p…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Yes, they are a different people group. I plan on having more on all of this later.
Okay. I’ll mention the ink just for you.
haha! I’m glad you’re so sucked in!!!
Have you thought about changing either Roland’s or Rolf’s name?
*screeches* Nooooo!!!! Nononononono.
I have deliberated over each and every name and the means ref…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
 “There is only one god you need to worry about, and that is me: Hassan Salim.
You’ve got to be joking. Hassan is my father’s name…only it’s written with one “s”: Hasan.
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Nooo….. they are brought in by the traders. People of the Empire are NEVER sold as slaves
Maybe saying something about that, then? I wasn’t sure if the people were a different people group. I would think they look different than Aryan..because that’s what the People of the Empire are.
Does it need to?
I think it may be good to m…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
WELL LEON AND ROLF ARE IN A DIFFERENT TIME PERIOD IN A COUNTRY I CREATED!! (who let you in there anyhow?)
Obviously, you have got the wrong guys. So, I guess everything is fine. You may keep them and I’ll keep fake Alec.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Oh is that how this is gonna go?
*straps on several guns and bolts. Snatches Alec and slams him against the wall.*
GIVE THEM BACK OR I’LL DO THE WORST!!!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
So Hassan paid the soldiers to look the other way?
Yup. He sure did.
Goodbye Leon and Rolf.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
@linus-smallprint   @Liberty   @Hybridlore    @Koshka   @elishavet-pidyon   @Keilah-h
NEXT SECTION!!!
(If I was Freedom I’d be posting trigger warnings. But y’all have been amply warned.)Leon woke the next morning to find one of the men cutting the ropes that bound his wrists. One arm came free, and Leon gasped from the pain that…
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