Jaybird

@linus-smallprint

try THAT.

https://1drv.ms/w/c/9ff685038eab87a7/ET6rrEZ5XvJHv-1rHGwycOMBuh5U4QkPLaT031-tmVn-qQ?e=1Dlg54

Sector 5 The Hidden.docx

Odd.

That wasn’t a link at all.

@linus-smallprint

Uh… hmm. Idk how to add people in….

I’ll try reposting the link and if you can’t get in then I guess I’ll try to figure something out…….

Sector 5 The Hidden.docx

Try that. You may need to sign in…..

@elishavet-pidyon

Haha!!! I literally had nothing to do for three days in the car. I read everything in the art section, everything in the general writing section. XD

@savannah_grace2009

Ok thank you!!

I was thinking there needed to be more family interaction too. I’m glad you caught that. Is there a certain spot on the book that you think those types of scenes would fit best? (If not, that’s fine)

Ok yes!! I will for sure do that! It will be fun for me to take time to flesh out the characters individually…[Read more]

@grcr @savannah_grace2009

Thank you girls so much for reading through my book and supporting me!! 💕💕 I so so so appreciate you! ❤️

Your comments have given me a lot more confidence in the plot and characters, which I definitely needed going into a third draft.

Are there any scenes you’d like to see added? Or characters you’d like to see mor…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Someone suggested I cut the last section of the blurb and leave it with the part about Jonathan’s friendship because it has more of a cliffhanger. What do you think?

@whalekeeper

On here works great!

Also, any thoughts on the book cover?

@grcr

*Gaspeth!!!*

What have you done!!!

🤣

Well, there goes that. XD

@theducktator

don’t encourage me.

@theducktator

Aha, thank you. Fixed that.

Thank you so much for the feedback!!!!

DON’T KILL EVAN. I BEG YOU.

Oh how tantalizing this sounds…….. it would be such a sad death scene……………..

@rae

Yay!!! I am so glad that you had a good time!!!!! And I am so glad that you did it! That sounds like an amazing day!

Also,

Also, apparently I haven’t shared the mock cover yet!! (At least in this forum) Here it is! (At the end of the story XD)

Also…

Look! I found little Hallie!! 🥰

@savannah_grace2009 @theducktator @grcr @smiley @keilah-h @theshadow

Ok guys… 👀 I know it’s a lot to read, but I’m dropping the last 6 chapters!! Enjoyyyy! And then give me alllll the feedback! I’m planning to finally start on the official third draft soon.

Chapter 27

Hallie rolled onto her back and let out a sigh, staring at the dark ceiling…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Girllll, you’re so sweetttt 🥹 Thank you so much!! Your comments mean so much and are one of the reasons I keep on going with this book bc I know there will other people out there who will like it just as much 😭🥰❤️

OMC GUYS GUYS GUYSSSSS
I FOUND A SONG FOR EASTON

It’s “Cars and Phones” by David Dunn

It almost made me cry but…

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Just in case… (also lmk if the doc isn’t working or you can’t edit/access it)

KP Connection Doc

@keilah-h

Wow!! You are getting so much better at guys and girls! I can totally tell which is the girl. This looks really good!!

@the_lost-journal

Lol

thanks! That one isn’t out yet, but I do have some e that are published and for sale if you would ever be interested. 🙃