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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
*wants to ask for another section, but is also concerned of what I might find in it*
That’s just a risk your gonna have to take.
WHAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NONONONONONO!! Okay, if you have to kill one of them…pick Roland…please…I already like Rolf way too much since he got whipped in the face…and I now know a character who understan…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
*gasp of horror*
OH MY WORD!!!
No way!!!
Oh wow! Yikes! Goodness!!!!
I HAD NO IDEA!
Well at least it’s spelled differently and your father is not Arab. (right?)
Goodness! The amount of names of family members I’ve used? *faints*
OH MY GOSH!!!!! OW. OW. OW!!!
YES! Ow is right!!! Those things HURT!!
I got one across the arm…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Okay. I’ll mention the ink just for you.
Aw. Thanks!🥰
you might not see one of them ever again.
WHAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NONONONONONO!! Okay, if you have to kill one of them…pick Roland…please…I already like Rolf way too much since he got whipped in the face…and I now know a character who understands what that feels like…
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Hassan struck him across the face with his horse whip. Rolf bent, gasping from the pain, his hand pressed to his face.
OH MY GOSH!!!!! OW. OW. OW!!!
I know that’s like!! Except a cow delivered the lash to my face…
I can totally feel what Rolf’s feeling right then!!! *sob* SO cruel, Ellette!!!! Do you have any idea how much p…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Yes, they are a different people group. I plan on having more on all of this later.
Okay. I’ll mention the ink just for you.
haha! I’m glad you’re so sucked in!!!
Have you thought about changing either Roland’s or Rolf’s name?
*screeches* Nooooo!!!! Nononononono.
I have deliberated over each and every name and the means ref…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
“There is only one god you need to worry about, and that is me: Hassan Salim.
You’ve got to be joking. Hassan is my father’s name…only it’s written with one “s”: Hasan.
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Nooo….. they are brought in by the traders. People of the Empire are NEVER sold as slaves
Maybe saying something about that, then? I wasn’t sure if the people were a different people group. I would think they look different than Aryan..because that’s what the People of the Empire are.
Does it need to?
I think it may be good to m…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
WELL LEON AND ROLF ARE IN A DIFFERENT TIME PERIOD IN A COUNTRY I CREATED!! (who let you in there anyhow?)
Obviously, you have got the wrong guys. So, I guess everything is fine. You may keep them and I’ll keep fake Alec.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Oh is that how this is gonna go?
*straps on several guns and bolts. Snatches Alec and slams him against the wall.*
GIVE THEM BACK OR I’LL DO THE WORST!!!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
So Hassan paid the soldiers to look the other way?
Yup. He sure did.
Goodbye Leon and Rolf.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
@linus-smallprint @Liberty @Hybridlore @Koshka @elishavet-pidyon @Keilah-h
NEXT SECTION!!!
(If I was Freedom I’d be posting trigger warnings. But y’all have been amply warned.)Leon woke the next morning to find one of the men cutting the ropes that bound his wrists. One arm came free, and Leon gasped from the pain that…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Yay!! You caught up!
I feel like at least one of the other characters should be saying something here. I just listened to N.D.Wilson on dialogue…and it felt to me that the other people weren’t even there as just those two kept talking.
Ack. I KNEW it! Ugh. I didn’t want to admit it, but I new it needed it.
Where did those sla…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Oh drat.
That’s a bother.
Well I guess if you don’t reply within the hour, (which is what you normally seem to do) then I’ll tag you again.
Wow. That escalated quickly!
Yes. Yes it did.
Seems like things are about to get rough for Leon and Rolf… 🥺
😈
Why wouldn’t the slave trader just kill them instead of tying the…
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Julian rifled about in his pack for their cooking pot and handed it to Aelic. “Go and get some then, but for goodness’ sake don’t you fall and sprain your ankle.”
Aelic’s probably used to running around the forests…I could just see him bare-footed, dashing among the trees with his hair flying about!
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Roland smiled and nodded.
Rolf leaned forward in excitement. “What did you say?”
Roland flushed again. “Well, a few things. The important thing is, I asked her to wait for me.”
Rolf’s eyes widened slightly. “And?”
“And she said she would.”
I feel like at least one of the other characters should be saying something here. I…[Read more]
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Power replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 6 months ago
This is awesome, and so deep!
[Psa 118:21-29 ESV] 21 I thank you that you have answered me and have become my salvation. 22 The stone that the builders rejected has become the cornerstone. 23 This is the LORD’s doing; it is marvelous in our eyes. 24 This is the day that the LORD has made; let us rejoice and be glad in it. 25 Save us, we pray, O…[Read more]
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Power replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 6 months ago
Y’ALL!!! Don’t you love it when the Bible quotes the Bible. LOL (Also really cool, Look up the word translated salvation. Does it sound familiar? Psalm 118 is so cool when it comes to prophesies!!!)
[Exo 15:2 KJV] 2 The LORD [is] my strength and song, and he is become my salvation: he [is] my God, and I will prepare him an habitation; my father’s…[Read more]
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