Jaybird

Ack, my slow typing…

@whalekeeper

I already have that! Perhaps I have made some better-than-bad choices!

Yay!

…What about the first few chapters of the book, though? I want to set him up as likable then, but the beginning doesn’t include any huge brave decisions because it’s setting up the status quo.

The status quo is him trying to be “comfortable” or whatever, right…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

O.O

Yeah, entering finals and graduation, then transferring to a university for next fall.

Annnnnd you answered some of that already. XD

@koshka    @whalekeeper

I like Koshka’s idea.

@whalekeeper

Hmm. Often anxious, slightly pessimistic, nervous.

Give him something (or someone) he cares so much about that he would risk anxious situations to protect/keep/help. It could be something simple like a pet kitten or his father’s pocket watch, or something more complex like a best friend. What drives his anxiety? What is a cause he’d…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

How…? Oh bother.

*Snatches a jacket and poofs away*

@koshka

well then, prepare for impact. 🤣

Collage I’m guessing? Or is your semester over already?

@ellette-giselle

Hopefully not? But right now…maybe.

*Deep sigh of weariness*

Life is nuts right now. So yeah, it might take something kinda out there to stop my in my hamster wheel of days.

I should be back to something like normal in…two weeks?

@whalekeeper

Ugh. Those characters make me want to smack them.

Okay, WHY is he that way?

@koshka

I’m sorry! I didn’t know Aelic was your favorite!

Leo? At the moment?

Uhhh…… possibly in an Agent interrogation room……

*runs*

@ellette-giselle

He keeps dying.

WHAT!?! XD

First you kill all my favorite of your own characters, and now you’re killing mine!

LOL

Okay, where were we?

@koshka

I think Leo needs you.

I kidnapped him and have been injecting him into random scenes of “flash fiction” with Rory for fun, just to see what would happen should I introduce a Leo-like character.

He keeps dying.

Tell your dude to stop saving poor lost characters. It doesn’t end well. 😭

@koshka

wow. Okay, so does it take something brutal to make you comment, because I haven’t heard from you in ages. 😂

@ellette-giselle

Okay.

I liked Aelic.

And I am now…mmmm.

*Glares*

I was honestly hoping Leon would somehow be able to take his place, even though I like Leon.

Besides my unhappiness over what happened, nice gut punch at the end. And um…

Honestly, this kid’s writer feels kinda sick after that, so she’s going to just step back and let…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Whoops. 🫣😂

Good-bye, Aelic

yeah. 😭

There’s a close friend to our family who is very passionate about scripture memorization. He has memorized the entire New Testemant and has made it his goal to encourage others to memorize God’s word. He talks about how we don’t really forget anything, and sometimes, with a little push,…

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@freed_and_redeemed  @hybridlore    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty  @linus-smallprint

NEXT SECTION!

When Leon woke, the light in the shed was very dim. He could hear the sound of voices and pounding and feet hurrying back and forth outside. “I wonder what they’re doing,” he muttered. He began to wonder how the villagers…

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@freed_and_redeemed

YIPPPY!!!!!!!!!

OOOOOOooooooo!!

This is going to be a good one!

one thing I noticed, you capitalize this mysterious “he” and in my mind a capitalized “He” makes me think of God/Jesus. I know it’s not, but it’s the first thing that came to mind. So maybe lowercase it?

Anyhow, this was really, really good! I…[Read more]

@keilah-h

aw, thank you!

@keilah-h

Draft 4 = I think it’s great, lets let people tear into it and see if it really is.