Daniel Thompson

Hey, @anyone! I’ll be writing for approx 45min.

@r-j-wordsmith I assume you’re talking about a kindle fire? I don’t think it would be any different from a laptop. If you’re talking about the black and white e-reader, that would be extremely inconvenient to make edits with.

@anna-brie Hmm, your comment wasn’t trashed or spammed. It’s possible it was deleted, but very unlikely.

I’m gonna check on something…

I’m gonna check on something…

I’m gonna check on something…

539. I feel good about that for just getting back.

I’m here!!!!! After a much too long break of doing publishy things, I’m back again to writing. 🙂

@dragon-snapper You certainly could. The question is whether it is the right thing for your story. Is there a reason you want to?

@emma-flournoy Other guy? No. The girl.

@northerner *scowls* I’m hardly on here anymore. Sadly… Unless someone tags me, I don’t generally see it. But still… amnesia.

*grins and rubs hands*

@rachelle Not that I have much to add. It does seem like a cool idea. One I’d like to read. 😀

@emma-flournoy Well, ok, I took a bit of a liberty with the wording there. Often in a synopsis “will” means what will happen in the story, not that there is no way in the story it couldn’t have happened a different way. That was the intent. It could be taken either way, but I made his reaction an assumption. I mean, saying, “a long-hidden truth…[Read more]

This is the copy I read of the count of monte cristo. It’s the only translation I’ve read, but it felt very well done. https://www.amazon.com/Count-Monte-Cristo-Everymans-Library/dp/0307271129/ref=sr_1_6?ie=UTF8&qid=1488249837&sr=8-6&keywords=the+count+of+monte+cristo

@emma-flournoy The truth is the identity truth.

@daeus I like the sentence change. I do like @graciegirl‘s version too… So, yes. Not much help. Just general agreement…

@graciegirl Oh, boy. That’s a terrible feeling. Yeah, don’t worry a bit. I like getting your critique. It takes a lot to offend me.

As for the corrections, I’ll have to give them some more thought. At the moment, I’m considering replacing the current last sentence with, “In a twist of fate, he is forced to confront the shattering of everything he…[Read more]

@emma-flournoy Hmm. Do you think I should make it just bittersweetness?

Ok, I’m back.

@kate-flournoy @emma-flournoy @northerner @hope @winter-rose @graciegirl.

So what do you think of lingering bittersweetness?

Also, instead of saying, “forced to confront everything he fights for shattered,” do you think it would be better to say, “forced to confront everything he fights for ruined”?

@rachelle That sounds really neat, actually. I don’t really think cliches are a big problem, so long as you write well. My one thought is that it would be best if you could at least give some hint of the theme early on. Maybe the characters don’t have any clue about the theme, but you could show some of the government people talking about justice and such.