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@savannah_grace2009

Ok so in this RP I say Liv has blue eyes, but correct me if I’m wrong. 😂

Lukas

Lukas found he couldn’t take his eyes off Liv’s face. He tried, but somehow, he found himself drowning in the crystalline pool of her blue eyes.

“Aww.” He heard a whisper pass by him. He blinked and looked behind him, only to see Fynn dance awa…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

First of all, I love your writing!!

Second, my actual answer to your question. XD Ok. So I think I prefer the first one better. Though I do have an opinion on prologues… I heard an author (who had been writing since forever) say that he doesn’t like prologues because typically writers use them as a way to draw readers in bef…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Lol! What do you think I am?

@whalekeeper

Nar

“I don’t live with my birth family, I lived with a clan of crazy people until I was fourteen, and escaped with my adopted brother, who is one of said crazy people. Now I fend for myself, in the cold, dark world of darkness.” Hugo laughed. “I have to look scary. That’s actually my job.” Nar blew a strand of hair from over her…[Read more]

@scoutfinch180

That is very helpful, thank you.

My latest idea for Returns has a similar theme as Nahim’s stories, where Alpha must forgive and reconcile with his father, or Grathmere will die. Kinda like if Luke was the one with hatred and trying to kill Vader, but Vader is still the bad guy. And then Luke forgives him and a happy ending w…[Read more]

@grcr

Ah, don’t worry, I always enjoy reading the works of other writers!! 😉😊

Aww thanks!

@hybridlore

Sorry, I think my last post lagged.

It’s all Wyoh’s fault…..XD

I really like your idea of doing the flashback and then going to Lilitu’s pov, though!

Okay, great! i’ll think and pray about it, but I’m pretty sure that this fits better than how I had it originally.

@savannah_grace2009

Of course! Sorry, I think my last post lagged. I really like your idea of doing the flashback and then going to Lilitu’s pov, though!

@acancello @hybridlore @grcr

You guys, thank you so much for reading it and for everything!! I was kinda scared for some reason that nobody would be interested to even look at it!

 The first one does pull me in better and I want to read more, but I just love the description and feel of the second, however, it may be a bit slow for the beginning…

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@grcr @savannah_grace2009

Yeah, I did notice that! Maybe Lilitu’s chapter could come after Sef’s?

@sara

Definitely! I hope you figure it out!

@grcr

Ohh! I never thought of that before!!!

That makes a lot of sense, actually.

Maybe I could go something like this:

1. Prologue

2. Memory (chapter 15 of the second link, shows Sef and Neveah picking flowers with Hanna)

3. Nothing (go to Lilitu and Livia)

4. Stolen (where Sef and Neveah get seperated)

@hybridlore

I will definitely think about all this! I need to get more opinions before I make a decision…I am just so new to all this and want to see what more people think.

It’s a neat idea with the time change or whatever, I just don’t want it to be too confusing, and/or abrupt, you know?

@acancello

Awww your dedication and acknowledgement…

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@savannah_grace2009

Hey! I think the first one does a great job of pulling the reader in more, but the second one also has some great writing in it.

I know the chapter with Sef and her mom really means a lot to you, and it does a good job of setting up the backstory of Sef’s parents and a little bit of world building. So really they both work in…[Read more]

@acancello

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel.

Wait…really???!?!?! Aww thanks that means so much to me!!! I am excited for your feedback!! AND I CAN’T WAIT FOR MORE HUGO!!! lol

Also, feel free to tag you in any post w…

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@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @highscribeofaetherium @rae @vinagirl @trailblazer @grcr @esther-c @whalekeeper @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h @acancello @hybridlore @anyone-else

Okay, guys. I need serious help. My novel is kind of going nowhere…because I don’t know which way to start it!!!

I have two beginnings for my story. One jumps straight into…[Read more]

@trailblazer

I really like this scene!!!

Some ideas for plot twists:

Maybe she apologizes to Albert or something?? And then realizes that she does like him? Or something happens with her and Chester? OR A NEW BOY MOVES TO TOWN!!

Sorry, all my ideas seem to be centered around romance….lol

@esther-c

Livia

She stood there for a moment. “Um…I’m not sure how to do this.”

“Yeah, me neither,” Lukas laughed a little, “I was kind of hoping you would know.”

“Well, I don’t.”

“Oh.”

“We should watch the other people, and maybe we’ll figure it out?” Liv raised an eyebrow, and Lukas nodded.

They studied Fynn and Callista for a good…[Read more]

The dancing has begun!

Hehehe…

Alright, I’ll write some RPs

@savannah_grace2009

Lukas

Lukas swallowed hard and faced Liv with an uncertain smile wobbling on his lips. “Well?” He held out his arms.

@rae (I said in here that Chase was dancing, but I don’t know what you decided to do)

Callista

She smiled, all tears dried, and met Fynn’s ey…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Oh that’s awesome! You can tell her I love her name. 😉

I was trying to choose between Clementine, Maisie, Hallie, and Dixie. It was close between Maisie and Hallie, but Hallie won. 😁

@whalekeeper

Nar

“So what kind of amazing things can you tell me about yourself?” Nar smiled, then laughed again as she often did.

“I’m a geek about doctoring, I know a little bit about machinery from an older brother. I…can fight, but only do it for protection. I like the color…” Pink rose in her cheeks. “Amber more than anything. I’m one…[Read more]