Beth

@loopylin

Alpha

Alpha tossed Dante a handkerchief. “Sorry, I was playing with a new technique. And put pressure on that cut.” Alpha reached out his hand and recalled the knife, which had lost its vapor but still came to his hand. “Sorry about the coat. I can get my little sister to fix it if you would like me to.” Alpha used the same process to…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

LOL I’m laughing so hard, I’m crying.

@keilah-h

There’s actually a reason Silvanis acts this way. Maybe Sniper will figure it out sometime. It’d be funny to see what he would say XD.

@theshadow

I would love to see it!

@theducktator

Lol. Everything looks better with an ellipse.

I’ll watch that. 

@keilah-h @theshadow @theducktator @kyronthearcanin @princesachronicles22

Silvanis and Fairy

Fairy smiled. She loved hearing everyone sing. She turned to Silvanis who was sitting beside her. “Isn’t it wonderful? I love hearing all the different songs!”

“Wonderful, no. Interesting, yes,” He replied.

Fairy elbowed him. “It is wonderful! Everyone…[Read more]

@loopylin

Would you like Dante and Alpha to interact? I can have him go back to their room. If not, that’s ok too :]

Sure. Sorry I haven’t been very active.

I’ll write something short with Alpha quick

Alpha

The scraping sound of blade to stone filled the room. Alpha carefully sharpened one of his knives, before stopping and checking the edge. D…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Awesome! I approved it.

@liberty

I’m going to be able to submit something!!!!!!!

@keilah-h @ellette-giselle

Y’all were talking about British and Australian exclamations and it reminded me of something that happened recently…

So we have friends who are Australian, but their dad is the only one who actually naturally has the accent. I’m a sucker for the Aussie accent, lol. And I was talking with him one time and with some…[Read more]

Also, one thing I just thought of; we don’t really care about the characters’ families since we haven’t met them yet. Maybe it would be a good idea to lengthen the first chapter by showing Jack and Elina getting home and seeing their parents and siblings.

@theshadow

This chapter does a good job building up the suspense! The only thing I would say is yeah, Ellette has a point. These girls seem to be so mean for no real reason that I can guess at yet. It makes them feel flatter, rather than like actual people who have motives and stuff for their actions. Their ultimate goal, especially in a…[Read more]

@jonas

Thaliu. I liked the feel together.

@jonas

That’s cool! Lol it’s funny cuz I was just thinking that a painting magic system would go good with one of my worlds. It’s not even the first time this has happened XD

@jonas

Wow. I love this idea. This sounds super interesting. Is it connected to your current series?

@ellette-giselle

Aw, that’s okay! If you know of a different way to get it through, I’m open to trying other things, but I understand if it’s too difficult for you to do right now.

Some things I’d really like to hear from y’all are scene ideas. I’m planning to go back and extend a lot of the earlier chapters (at least 1-6) because I didn’t have the same word count goal for them as I do now. So if you have any ideas for scenes that would fit into those (or future scenes) I would love to hear them. So far I have a chapter…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle (I know you’re away, so don’t feel obligated to respond to this until you get back) @theshadow @whalekeeper @koshka @raxforge

Sorry these are late, it slipped my mind until last night. Without further ado, here are chapters seven and eight (also known as the underground church cha…[Read more]