Beth

@highscribeofaetherium

Is Zahlin going to answer or are you not sure you want them to have Peace of Honor?

(And yes, for the past week or so, I’ve been silently reading this topic)

@freedomwriter76

*I compose myself after reading something about Bucky*

My love of Bucky was so contagious I legit spread it to other people, ok? XD

You weren’t kidding. Though, it should be present tense and OVER THE INTERNET TO SOMEONE YOU’VE NEVER SEEN BEFORE IN YOUR LIFE!!!!!

Bucky pretended to topple over when they landed more blows of the…

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@fernweh_grace

I happened to stumble upon this by chance….and I’m glad I did! Your writing is beautiful! It’s so sad….but beautiful! (you should publish this…)

@esther-c

I read the chapter, and I think I see what you mean.

I wouldn’t say that your problem is the lack of action. I think the way you opened with the painting scene is a great introduction. It introduces Ami’s character, how she’s artistic, what she values, what kind of person she is. So it definitely doesn’t need more action. The way you…[Read more]

Narsa Jeptune (I literally made that up on the spot)

Narsa has eyes that can change color, hair that can change color, skin that can change color…Okay, any part of her can change color. Originally, though, her neutral colors are black, thick stripes and accents of deep purple, with spots of poppy orange. She is a Slyiad, which is a name for a r…[Read more]

@jonas

Okay, I just have to figure out a good villain name…

@janellebelovedpig @highscribeofaetherium

Another piece I thought I’d share. I have no title for it, and would love suggestions!

Untitled

Rising voice to meet the sky,

“Live free or die!”

Upon the battlefield echoes the cry,

“Let your bullets fly!”

Mighty was the answering call,

Powerful was their charge as the gave their…[Read more]

@grcr

It is hard to say much without knowing much of your book, but I do agree with what Sara said as far as openings…

Ok! If you do wanna read the chapter, I posted it like two posts above this one.

I guess it depends on the reader, but personally, I like books that paint some of the picture in the first (and even second) chapter… even if it seem…

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@savannah_grace2009

Ugh, sorry you’re going through that! That’s hard!

Yeah, thanks. XD My NaNo WIP feels so much easier because it’s so new, lol.

Could you maybe post some segments of it so I can see more of what you mean?

I posted the first chapter in the post above this one.

All I can say is that maybe you’re focusing a little too much on all…

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@rae

What’s the first paragraph of your book?

So, the first paragraph doesn’t have much info in it since it’s only a few lines, but I’ll share the original first chapter so you can see what I’m talking about. (Hopefully. XD) In a day or two, I’m hoping to have an alternate first chapter written, so I may share that just to see if y’all think…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Oof, those are hard questions. For the first one, I get what you mean. I think for the first chapter, an introduction is fine. Personally, I would try to focus on the relationship between Ami and Ev, and his family conflict, because I think that will hook the reader.

Yes, definitely. XDXD

Ok, yeah. I think I already have a few ideas…[Read more]

I really need to work on her character anyways

@everyone

Now. The next step is who are going to add the villains, and who are these said villians?

If ya want me to, I could come up with a name for my Slyiad who’s a villain.

Just kidding, I’ll start at :55. I have to get pumpkin pie first, lol.

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @highscribeofaetherium

*sighs* Okay, I changed my mind again.

I’m not doing first person (you’re welcome, Jonas, lol).

But I am in a sense, starting over.

Before you freak out, let me explain.

I’m still keeping the original beginning (Elysium, Pythonos, A Swift Death, A Thief, Gone, Stolen, and An Orphan). So bas…[Read more]

@esther-c

Ugh, sorry you’re going through that! That’s hard!

Could you maybe post some segments of it so I can see more of what you mean?

All I can say is that maybe you’re focusing a little too much on all the potential problems. (I’m speaking from experience) Sometimes you need a little break, or maybe you’re overthinking it. If its boring to…[Read more]

I’m gonna do a sprint, i’ll probably start at :50 and end at :20 or something like that, if anyone wants to join.

@jonas

Yeah, I think just adding villains to this one will work.