Beth

@esther-c

I’m glad I was able to help!

@freedomwriter76

You’re welcome.

I’m lost for words right now, something about some character entering my mind and taking it over to make me cry. (Thank you so much Riker.)

@savannah_grace2009 @grcr @rae @mineralizedwritings

Thanks you so much guys!! All your advice has helped so much! I feel much more confident about editing this chapter now. ❤️

(And Rae, I would never get rid of the donut scene EVER. I love it too. 🥰😁)

@freedomwriter76

Riker! (I am going to adopt your charrie now!)

How girl? How do you get your mood boards soooo perfect?

@freedomwriter76

EVERY SINGLE TIME I READ YOUR STUFF, I CRY! I only wish I could do that.

Riker!!! Another character that if I start to get to know, he’ll start talking to me. He reminds me of Chace Duke as far as childhood. *I’m crying*

(Ugh, how am I supposed to type when I can barely see?)

I LOVE IT!!!!!!! 💕

@esther-c

Woops, sorry, that got posted to soon.

Anyways, as I was saying, I like it and you can tell Ami is good friends with Ev.

I don’t think you need an action opening, this introduces your characters nicely and captured me, which is what you want in a first chapter. From my gleaning of info on fist chapters, you want one, above all,…[Read more]

@esther-c

I like it. At some parts it made me laugh, and you definitely portrayed a healthy family (something I never say no to in books) and with the part about the donut and Ev…I was thinking how I would like my crush to do that! XD even though I’ve never had a donut before in my life, and am most likely allergic to it, I would eat it just…[Read more]

@jonas

Would you like to do the honors of chewing out Nahim and Zahlin, if @highscribeofaetherium is okay with it?

Btw the Queen’s presence is needed cuz she’s what they have for a healer, that and the obvious…

@highscribeofaetherium

Sorry it took so long, I didn’t know exactly what to write so whatever is there is what I’ve got.

@highscribeofaetherium

Nahim

Zahlin grasped his hand and pulled him up.

“Peace of Honor.” Nahim wasn’t going to say that you were supposed to grab the wrist, bu t it bothered him inside. He hung his sword off his belt as Zahlin slumped against the wall breathing heavily, blood coming from a few wounds. That was when Nahim himself realized he…[Read more]

@jonas

Ok I guess…

@jonas

He seems rather OP lol.

@highscribeofaetherium

Hold on…typing up RP’s now

Zahlin

Zahlin slowly nodded and extended his hand to pull Nahim to his feet. “Peace of Honor.”

Now that his adrenaline was wearing off, pain flared in his various wounds. Zahlin slumped against the wall and slowly slid down to the ground, breathing heavily.

Footsteps pounded in the hallway. The door swung open.

***

Ok, this is taking too lon…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

how do you guys write them so fast? 😅

When I get in a mood, it’s like doing freestyle in a speedo as fast as you can. I also had to type out a lot of things last year and I decided to just get used to typing in this age of tech. Believe me it used to take two minutes per sentence!

@jonas

Give me a few minutes to get my brain jogging…

@jonas

I guess we are. I have a character I might add…

I guess I’ve been stuck on what Zahlin should do now… 🤷‍♀️

@srae

Yes, I’m writing an RP now… how do you guys write them so fast? 😅