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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
Liv
“Yeah, I do,” she pursed her lips. “It’s just me, my mani and pani,” she smiled. “And Xandro. I consider him family, too. Where are you from?”
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
Oops! I didn’t even notice that XD I will fix that!!
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
Marcurious is between 16 and 18. I haven’t really figured that out yet haha!
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
It’s completely fine, no rush on how fast you give me feedback! (: I understand we all have lives outside of writing and KP xD
I can get started on giving you my opinion on the excerpt I saw introducing Marcurious tomorrow perhaps.
Actually, I would prefer if you gave your opinion on the first few chapters of my WIP and kind of go…[Read more]
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HighScribe posted an update 2 years, 8 months ago
Gahh!! I was experimenting and playing around with present tense and now my brain gears are jamming now that I’m trying to do past tense again! It looks so wrong GAAHHHHH!!! XD
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
Awww, that’s so sad! 😭 The parallelism is really cool though.
@rae Ooh, that’s a great fear for a villain! Very relatable
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hybridlore replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
@savannah_grace2009 Ooh, this is really interesting! Haha, I noticed that about @scoutfinch180 too, it was very thorough!
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HighScribe replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
Jonas volunteered Riina first, obviously, but if that doesn’t work out, Saoirse might be able to get him to dance. She’s still skulking around.
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HighScribe replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
I know, sorry. I’ll try to write one today, but idk how tired I’m going to be :/
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Ruth replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
Guys…
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
@ANYONE
IS THERE ANY WAY ONE OF YOUR CHARRIES CAN GET OL’ JUNIOR TO ACTUALLY DANCE?!
Idk, I think being awkwardly pulled into a dance would humble him a little XD -
Ruth replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
*steeples fingers together and sets elbows on table*
@freedomwriter76 @savannah_grace2009 @idk, anyone’s welcome
I discovered Alpha’s greatest fear (I’m very proud of myself).
At first, Alpha, to me and to my charries, seems fearless. Sometimes he also seems heartless (like the time he almost murdered a doctor because the doctor obeyed orders…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
Okay…someone invent a time machine so I can go back to when Riker was a boy and take him away before all that happened, then I’ll do it to Fin too, and Hans…
Then you’ll do it to Chase, and we’ll be good!
XD
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Ruth replied to the topic Guardian Angels, a space story in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
Yeah, pics have recently been attacked by Wyoh. Old posts too I guess.
I’ll make a full reply later since I’m angry at myself rn, and when I get angry, most ppl think it’s at them. Same with disappointment.
Rn, just a few things…
- There is no possible way I can combine Alpha’s and Nahum’s stories. It would overwhelm both…
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
Also I forgot to mention…I don’t have all the exerpts from my WIP here on this forum. I will post them for you on here if you agree to help me. (because I didn’t want to take up a bunch of pages on here for no reason haha)
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
WHY IS THIS NOT WORKING?!?!
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
@scoutfinch18o
Heyyy, I don’t think we’ve really met! I’m Sara (which you probably already knew haha!)
I have been stalking the topic where you’ve been critiquing RAE’s WIP…and I really like your critiquing style!
I was wondering…if you could maybe….critique mine too….?
I understand if you don’t have the time to help two people…I…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic My Work In Progress in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 8 months ago
@esther-c @acancello @grcr @vinagirl @hybridlore
Introducing….Marcurious!!!
Here’s the newest chapter I wrote in my WIP:
Marcurious deftly snatched a ripe apple from the market stall, and sauntered away, holding his head high as if without a care in the world.
He pasted a look of innocence on his face.
I didn’t steal this apple. Nope. I p…
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic A Place to share/write whatever we’re working on: Worldbuilding, plot, etc in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
I love those characters SOOO much!!!!!! And their character arcs are amazing!
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic A Place to share/write whatever we’re working on: Worldbuilding, plot, etc in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 8 months ago
@anyone-who-needs-a-good-cry
I just wrote something very depressing and sad….so if anyone wants to read it…well…
A dull throbbing sensation at the back of her neck.
Anger burning hot in her veins.
Screams echoing around her, both her own, and the screams of innocent souls.
The smell of alcohol, of chloroform, of pain, of fear.
The smell…
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Just…don’t do present tense.
Y?
Cause it usu Sounds weird.
Typos ignore
Cause it sounds weird? Was that what you were saying? After a bit, your brain shifts, and you dont even notice it. I like it with first person, as long as it isn’t just for no reason.
@jonas I personally LOVE doing first person present tense, but not third person present. Because I switch both tenses and person, I often have no problem with my brain gears.
Yeah third person present tense is bad. I personally don’t care for present tense at all. I think of it similarly to second person narration.
@jonas @rae
I’m just gonna jump in on this conversation lol…
I also LOVE first person present tense…but I HATE…I mean HATE third person present…unless of course I’m writing a certain depressing short story about my life a couple months ago heh…heh….OH! I cannot STAND second person…*retches over the side of the bed* Like WHO in their…[Read more]
@savannah_grace2009
The thing with second person is that it implies that the reader is the main character, which means you can’t design your own character. One week in my creative writing class, we did have a 2nd person assignment, but it was a choose your own adventure story.
@jonas
I know! That’s the sad part…no fun characters ):
Yeah that’s true…haha!
This is the technical side to present tense. Present tense adde immediacy—it feels like it’s happening *right now.* This is really good in some specific scenarios, but there’s one major problem. It is hard to maintain, it’s exhausting to read something long in present tense. Second person should almost always be present tense, and first person…[Read more]
@freedomwriter76 I’m not saying it’s bad to read, but when it comes to writing…I like the big picture. Besides, I write from the POV of Ru Eis most the time, and since she researches the events, they can’t really work well for Present Tense. It’d be like Laura Hillenbrand doing present tense for Unbroken.