Ava Coulter

Your story idea sounds great! I have one question before I begin making suggestions: what would be the “powers” the siblings have? Do they turn into those creatures? How does that work?

@trahia-the-minstrel

Yay! That’s great! Your website looks so pretty. You did a great job designing it!

@trahia-the-minstrel Ahh girl that’s SO exciting!! Congratulations! The site looks great, it seems like you’ve put a lot of work into making it so nice. I’ll definitely be signing up for your newsletter! I’m so excited to hear more about all your artistic work!

@keilah-h

Bonifer is worse than everybody. He’s like… the worst villain. EVER. That I’ve read about at least. There could be more evil or dark villains out there… but Bonifer is just so well-written for a villain. Andrew Peterson did a great job creating him.

@elishavet-pidyon

Ambition, bitterness, and pride… Those are pretty good traits…[Read more]

@koshka

Good point. I mean, Natalia is pretty much the whole world in the Green Ember, so Garten kind of did ruin the world… but Bonifer kidnapped a baby and lied to the baby’s mother. So that’s pretty bad.

Antagonists… They can be so difficult. We don’t want them to just seem like the same old bad guy from cartoons or whatever. They have to…[Read more]

@koshka

Ugh, Fangs. They’re disgusting.

Bonifer is worse than Garten, in my opinion at least! Garten was pretty bad though… I agree, Bonifer is well written. I need to use some techniques Andrew Peterson used for him on my villains. My antagonist always seems kind of dry.

@avacoulter

Whoof, I’m back! (I was drowning in school and responsibility.)

XD half of what my family says is already quoting Spider-Man and Lord of the Rings rn.

Italian, I believe was what the song was originally written in. (quickly (and shamelessly) googles) Nvm, it’s Neapolitan lol. I learned to play it for my piano recital last month, and…[Read more]

@not-so-secret-secret-assassin

Brilliant first chapter(and second, I suppose). Riveting. Fast-paced, easily retainable, and entertaining(but plz don’t let it get to your head).

Sheesh, nine-year-olds those days, very desensitized.

I wanna agree with @power on the running sentences, though I think the chapters flowed pretty well together. Not…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Have you watched Marvel? If so, which is your favorite?

My favorite movie from Marvel would be Thor Ragnarok. (I’m pretty sure that’s Marvel…) It’s such a good movie!

That makes sense.

@trahia-the-minstrel, @elishavet-pidyon

I COMPLETELY agree with you guys about Bonifer. He’s worse than Gnag himself! He RAISED Gnag! He always makes me so angry too! I mean, he betrayed all of Aerwiar. I never forgave him after I found out.

I kind of forgot about Weaver. He was pretty bad too.

@koshka, I think that Fang’s name was Slarb. And…[Read more]

@trahia-the-minstrel

Of course!

@godlyfantasy12

Okay, yeah, I understood what you were saying I guess I just communicated my understanding poorly. Janner is not Christ, just his sacrifice was something to be admired. Yeah, Janner did make a lot of mistakes… I think that’s what made him such a realistic and relatable character. Real humans make mistakes, and so did…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Thanks for the motivation! Maybe I should write some Wingfeather fanfic for my next blog short story of the month… that’s a good idea. Yeah, if and when I write some, I’ll let all you guys know!

@elishavet-pidyon

Okay, I got it, and read all of it! That is so good! I’ve tried to write that scene over and over and I’ve failed every time, so that’s pretty impressive that you’re able to do that.

When I was reading the part about Artham and Kalmar unwrapping Janner’s body… I started to cry again. I’m a very emotional person xD.

I also…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Yeah, you’re right, Janner’s death really does complete the story. He is kind of like a Christ character; a person to model yourself after. Good point!

@elishavet-pidyon

I found it! But then I clicked the link and it said I don’t have access. I typed a message in the box it gave me so I can request access. I really want to read it!!!

Sorry, I haven’t been in the Author Conservatory, but I’ve heard of it and it sounds good. I can’t give you any advice on that, unfortunately.

Oh no! I see your dilemma. I am not on the Author Conservatory, but I can offer some advice on the current dilemma.

While it would really stink to find a major weakness in your story, it is much better to find it and revise it rather than publish a story that could be better. As writers, we want our book children to be the best they can be, so…[Read more]

Also, what doc are you talking about?

@godlyfantasy12

IKR? I felt the same way when I first read about Janner. And he had just become a better, braver, more awesome person than he had started out to be. Then he had to DIE. He just had to die. It should have been Kalmar! Andrew Peterson… Tell me why you killed him! Why?! *begins to cry*

Okay, yeah, I still haven’t really gotten…[Read more]