Ava Blue

How do you guys want to start this? Maybe the new characters want to secure their own areas in the castle? I’m not sure what kind of conflicts have popped up before this. XD

You know what? Fine, here goes nothing XD I need a distraction from senioritis.

Commissioner Barnes (Only gives her first name to friends)

Age: 35

Species/ethnicity: Staunchly human; from an isolated city in an alternative sci-fi Earth. If she was from normal Earth, she would be German. (I did not pick her because of this, I promise…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

I guess Natalie’s not good at stabbing?😂 And since he’s a real person, my mom wouldn’t let me kill him.

@highscribeofaetherium @grcr

Here’s a scene from the end of Chapter 1:

The ducks flew off to meet the rebellion. First they dropped glitter bombs, before flying down. The rebels fled at the onslaught of glitter, all except for The Dope, who attacked Natalie. However, she was ready for him. She flew just out of his reach, darting down and stabbing…

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@linus-smallprint

I’ve been very busy the past few weeks. Sorry it took me so long to show up here. *hands you spinach ice cream* Anyway, I started your story, and I’m really enjoying it!

@ellette-giselle

You’re good, it’s just preference 🙂

@linus-smallprint

I’m an Outliner as far as what I want the story to look like, the conflict, the rough points, etc. Some stuff comes while writing. So, a confident 7/10ths of an Outliner. XD

@ellette-giselle

I think it’s a good idea if I step away from critiquing LTBL. We probably don’t have the same preferences in writing, and I won’t be able to help you if I’m not on the same plane of thought 😅 Good luck with this draft!

You know you’re a writer when you hear a particularly beautiful line in a song and think about it for hours.

Y’all, I feel mean critiquing 😅😕 I should post a short story so you two (Ellette, Sara) can rip me to shreds.

I’m completely serious. I just need to think of a good short story prompt. *Searches online*

@ellette-giselle

I will NEVER start a book without a specific goal in mind. I had the end before I had the beginning. There is a certain amount of graphing that I do before every story, and you can be sure that all things will tie into the end of this book, or the plot of the next. I most certainly did outline my book. I’m sorry if you can’t see…

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@savannah_grace2009 @ellette-giselle
I can try XD
I think the focus needs to be waaay deeper. The writing is very much outside the characters’ perspective, and only tells the bare points of the story. So the orphanage endeavor feels random.
To compare it to something, the perspective is like a bird high in the sky. Everything below looks like doll…[Read more]

@esther-c

I’ve made it a point in the past year or so to make eye contact when I’m listening to someone, but sometimes I start thinking of ways I’d describe their eyes in a book and stop paying attention to what they’re actually saying. 🫣😂

XD I used to trace people’s faces with different colors and try to figure out the dimensions of their face. L…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @loopylin @freed_and_redeemed @lightoverdarkness6 @anyone else

Guys do you want to read a really awkward scene

Btw I have had some social interaction almost this bad bc this is how my brain works XD I hope it pains you deeply

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Tauren meanders around the side of the dance floor, watching as Lesli takes her turn with somebody…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’ve already written the whole book.

Oh cool, this is a plenty-of-work-already-done thing.

why do you ask?

I was asking because I’m not sure what direction the story is taking. What should the reader hope to happen next? Both in Aaron’s arc and in the outward plot? – A sense of where this all leads. Because the orphanage plot w…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Are you using a normal arc structure/your own structure based off what you know about arcs? Or just thinking through the arc as you write?

@ellette-giselle

Have you outlined LTBL?

Here are some of the worst part of my old duck story draft. The worst thing is, I actually showed it to my arch-nemesis thinking it was good!!! I was thirteen. I should have known better.😬

“I know who this is!” she exclaimed. “It’s the rebel leader that we call The Dope! He held a meeting last night, which I attended as Arielle Teal. I’ve found o…

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