Ava Blue

Okay, here’s the entry. Y’all’s characters sound like such fun!

Because of my Squiggle Things small size, the normal/slightly choppy conditions write like Euroclydon. XD

Tripkin

“High side!” The words tore from his throat in two rough syllables. His dark furred friend flung himself up the tipping slope to join Tripkin.

Their raft evened out.…[Read more]

@koshka

Cool, love your character’s bios ❤️

What about a character who is mostly animal? As in, all animal sometimes, and changes back to partly human when interacting with humans, having human like thoughts, etc.

He’s kind of like a mythical faun.

Dalton

Treeknife. It’s what he is and what he will be as far down the road as he can see. It was a Treeknife that found him as a tiny kit, and it was a Treeknife who raised him up to be the squirrel he is. Oakorn was everything – a father, a mentor, and a friend. Little does Dalton realize, he was everything to that old Treeknife in return: a…[Read more]

@koshka

Ahoy! Count me in.

*Is subscribing*

@grcr

Realistic is great! I like to stick to that route per usual. I am intrigued by these uniforms though; how are they powerful? in what ways? What do they look like?

Lol, yes!! I need a cloak too! My siblings and I always try to make medieval clothes but we have never succeeded.

Medieval clothing is beautimous. It’s very simple too (or at…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

I never said God created an evil being. We did choose to be evil in the fall. I was never disagreeing with you there 😊 That Choice is what makes us all sinful.

But yeah, we can leave it.

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Ah, well I will still eat my tarts with glee 😜

@godlyfantasy12

Oh, okay…

I guess… Just maybe think about it, if you ever become comfortable enough? I can’t tell you what to think about, only that we should approach everything with truth-filled eyes.

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Yes I did, the pastry tart metaphor was.. illuminating XDXD I loved it!

@godlyfantasy12

Here’s the thing… In the Bible, you can see many places where the word evil is used interchangeably with the word sinful. The word evil can be used for different things (sometimes with a whole different meaning entirely) but it is used to describe sin.

I would say sin is profoundly immoral and wicked. After all, we should spend…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

MA BOI RIKER NOO 😭😭 ok that was really good though.

@godlyfantasy12

Insecurities.

Okay, here’s the bread and butter of it when it comes to my personal opinion –

I agree with you that they can be used as a character flaw, this is more of a tangent –

I feel like they comprise ninety-percent of character arcs in modern day YA, and I… kinda want the scales to shift? 😂 Is that just me?

Like, I…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Okay, I’m so glad we straightened that out 😅😂

That is MY bad by using that word in that way, and I apologize.

So I guess what I mean is:

Active arc: Triumphing over a sin you didn’t know you had

Passive arc: Learning you didn’t have a sin you thought you had

Does that make sense?

@godlyfantasy12

OH MY GOODNESS I just realized… I think we’re each using the word “flaw” differently

I’m using it to mean, “sin”

Is that what you mean?

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Also I’m sorry for arguing this late. I shouldn’t be going to far into this, when I’m not absolutely sure if I’ll agree with my past self in the morning XD

@godlyfantasy12

LOLOLOL 😂😂😎 There ya go, do with it what you will ❤

So…

Is there some way Zolten’s death might connect with November?

(I mean, fundamentally he’s on the same path as Ara, but it would be nice if it meant something specific to him, too)

…Maybe something to do with November’s dad? Idk.

@godlyfantasy12

*Pulls back* Okay, I’ll slow down…

First off, “influenced by others” was probably not the correct choice of word.

Being influenced by others can indeed be a flaw if you take it too far, make all your decisions based on others, etc. But that’s not what I meant. I just meant any normal influence in general. For example, it’s…[Read more]

I thought about my whole character arc thing for a little while longer (went to the pool and mulled over it in the unfortunately cold water) and found another type which might be considered an “in-between” but is really just Passive.

I should think of better names than Active and Passive, if I’m going to be so passionate about this……[Read more]

@grcr

Greetings and welcome to the Kingdom of Pen! I’m called Elishavet around here, and I write medieval fantasy too, as well as the random poem, flash fiction, and well, randomness.

So how fantastic is your book world? I have two main WIPs which are neither of them magical – although one does have some fantastic elements like fire captured in…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Thanks for the notes, it helps.

But as for your excerpt, WHAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN TO THE BABY?

I mean, I guess he assumes silence and thus saves the lives of those he can. Or at least I hope he is able to because something tells me the guilt associated with “betraying” someone else would be the worst kind of torment to…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Lol yeah ❤️

So in this book, Ara and November both have a fear of the unknown, but Ara has a more specific fear relating to her responsibilities as a leader, and November just has all that extra baggage.

Sooo all we need to do is think of inciting incidents for each of them, that have to do with their individual development!

If…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Narnia? O.O My native land!!!

Peter and Lucy were always my favorites, but I love all the Pevensie siblings. And a whole bunch of other characters like Caspian the Tenth, Puddleglum, Aravis, Shasta, Rilian, Glimfeather, Reepicheep, Digory, Emeth, Jewel, Trumpkin…..(is it really possible to name them all?)

Nevertheless, my…[Read more]