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@lightoverdarkness6 @kyronthearcanin @mineralizedwritings@janellebelovedpig @godlyfantasy12 @acancello @gwyndalf-the-wise@freedomwriter76 @folith-feolin @80strish @otherworldlyhistorian@whalekeeper @princessachronicle22 @felicity @orielle21

(All must be made aware of the rise of the Exclamationists!!!)

@esther-c @lightoverdarkness6 @kyronthearcanin @mineralizedwritings @janellebelovedpig @godlyfantasy12 @acancello @gwyndalf-the-wise @freedomwriter76 @folith-feolin @80strish @otherworldlyhistorian @whalekeeper @princesschronicals22 @felicity @orielle @all-who-question

Will everyone heed to this warning?

Are there people amongst us who do not…[Read more]

@acancello

Huh, I guess it’s not 2022 anymore lol.

But yeah, the real date is March 30th 2023 not 2022. Thanks for the heads up! Will be sure to correct it in future newsletters. 🙂

@acancello

I like that! There’s one thing I would change though.

I staggered over to an almond tree that was bent into the shape of a seat that was covered in moss and fallen flower petals. Then sunk down on it breathing hard.

This sentence seems a little clunky since you used two adjective clauses. (Or phrases. I forget which one.) And the n…[Read more]

@acancello

Great idea!

“What your writing is a rough draft, not something you have to publish as soon as you write it”

Oh yes. So so so so true. XD Something I must remind myself a lot. (Especially when I don’t want to go and edit my draft. XD)

@acancello

Love the motivational comments! Thank you!

@acancello

Thanks for the welcome! I love KP so far!

In answer to your questions, I am one who doesn’t play sports so much.  But I do love crafting dolls. It’s like creating 3-D characters.

I like different parts of all the seasons, new flowers coming back in Spring, the heat of Summer, the kaleidescope of fall colored trees, and the ways I…[Read more]

@acancello

Glad I can be here! All those things you love, I agree, are awesome. Pretty sure I’d have a dog if my mom wasn’t allergic.

1. Favorite season? Mostly anytime without rain, but if I had to pick, probably fall. All pretty leaves and nice breezes.

2. I don’t play sports on a team (anymore), though I used to play softball and soccer on a…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

Hi Ava! Imma tag a bunch of people first, then I’ll respond properly:

@gwyndalf-the-wise, @mineralizedwritings, @loopylin, @esther, @lightoverdarkness6, @godlyfantasy12, @whalekeeper, @acancello, @princesschronicle22, @freedomwriter76, @80strish, @otherworldlyhistorian, @others-I-likely-forgot

@acancello

Awesome!! 😀

@acancello

I really like it!! I get a feel for the characters even more than the other way you had it. (For me, getting a feel for the characters is really important. 🙂 ) I loved the description!! 😄 Great job!!

@acancello

Nice! I would say it’s better, but the restaurant scene could have worked with some changes too.

I staggered over to an almond tree that was bent into the shape of a seat that was covered in moss and fallen flower petals and sunk down on it breathing hard.

I would make that sentence separated into two, it’s a little long.

@acancello

Alrighty! 👍 😀

@acancello

I pretty much was thinking what @mineralizedwritings was, I just couldn’t say it as well as she does. XD

From this beginning, I can already get a feel for the personality of the POV character. (Who I’m assuming is Shauna 😉 ) If you share more, please tag me! I’d love to read more and hear more about your story!! 😀

@acancello

So glad it helped! 😀 Your welcome!

@acancello

Sure! Would love to read it!

Dishes clattered in the busy restaurant’s kitchen. Voices piled up,making a happy chattering noise. Waiters and waitresses, with flushed faces ran up and down the isles laying food and drinks down on the assigned tables. It was a typical Friday night in a popular restaurant. Tonight however, was d…

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