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My last line was:
above the din came Errol’s voice, but I could not distinguish his words from the rest of the chaos.
your last line is very interesting too 😉
Sorry, you’ll thank me one day though (or maybe not)
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
@jess-penrose Yeah, I have trouble showing, not telling. 🙁
Maybe after I go through all these and get the revised doc to you. I’m revising it in a different doc. 🙂
Just wondering, did you think I needed to develop the characters more?
@rochellaine @seekjustice I have to go to bed. Good night.IMMA KAPEEFER! Til we're old and gray!
@seekjustice Yes…Someday. 😛 Of course I thank you! But my fingers are feeling confused right now, since they don’t know where to go.
@jess-penrose Oh, are we supposed to give our last lines? I’ve never done that before. But mine was kind of weird… “With a quick shove, Chara managed to stand up, and then toppled…” 😉 😀"Sylvester - Sylvester!"
@catwing Oh yay! I’ll happily look through it again! Hmm… It could be good. Have I mentioned anything about passive voice? And goodnight!
@rochellaine Hahaha, no clue. I just tend to whenever I war with my cousin. So, she may have invented that, or maybe she got it from somewhere else… but I always tend to do it anyway ‘cos it can be fun to read them.Writer | Freelance Editor
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@catwing I have trouble with showing not telling as well, so much of my editing involves fixing it! You are not alone in this struggle!
@Rochellaine i don’t think we were supposed to, but Jess did and I liked my last line so I did too!I hope your confusion lessens some time soon 🙂
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
@seekjustice Haha, right. Sorry, I take it Jane did not pick up that habit from KP…wonder where from then… *shrugs*
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Inspiration<Ah no, I don’t think she did. It was fun anyway though!
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
@catwing Goodnight!
@seekjustice @jess-penrose I’m actually going to say goodbye now too. I don’t know if I’ll be back tonight, but probably not. So goodnight!"Sylvester - Sylvester!"
Ah, see ya! @rochellaine
And I actually must be heading off for lunch now. @seekjustice but I should be back soonish.
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Inspiration<Farewell 🙁
How’s your writing going?
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
Farewell 🙁
I should probably get lunch too. Bye!
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
*crashes back in* I am writing again if anyone wants to join!
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Inspiration<Signing out. I’ve gotten 3147 words today, but I shall be stopping for now.
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