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February 1, 2021 at 11:57 am #91232
I love this summary! It makes me want to read more of it! Ah, it’s so good! The one and only one small suggestion I’d make is perhaps changing the wording in the sentence:
“-Colin’s stuck with a teenage girl genie, who says he gets three wishes.”
to
“-Colin’s stuck with teenage Genie, who claims he gets three wishes.”
But this is only a suggestion! I mean I have suggestions for everything, which doesn’t mean there is anything wrong with the original or anything like that.
Anyway, I LOVE this summary!! 😀February 1, 2021 at 12:00 pm #91235YAY!!! THANK YOU SOOOOOOO MUCH!!!! <33 *gasp* I LOVE the way that sounds even better!!! THANK YOU for suggesting it!!! Aww, THANKS JUST A BUNCH!!!!!! <33 😊
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TeenWritersNook.comFebruary 1, 2021 at 12:03 pm #91240Your welcome, I love Into The Lamp! (Someday you’ll have to sign my copy of it;)
Anyway, happy to help:)
February 1, 2021 at 12:04 pm #91241Aww, girl, THANK YOU!!!! One day I hope I’ll have a copy to sign for you!!!! <33 🙂
God gives His hardest battles to His strongest soldiers.
TeenWritersNook.comFebruary 1, 2021 at 3:44 pm #91269OOOH, this sounds amazing! I really like the concept of your book, and if you’re ever needing somebody to give you feedback, you know I’m up to the task! Good luck with it! How far into the writing process are you? Word count?
By the way, make that two books you’ll need to sign 😉
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February 1, 2021 at 4:00 pm #91272THANK YOU SOOOOOO MUCH!!!!!!!!!! <33 Aww, really?? That makes me soooo happy!!!! *dances* YESS!!!! It’d be sooooooo awesome to get some feedback from you!!!!! <33 THANK YOU!!!!! I’m finishing up another round of edits and have sent to a few agents. The total word count ended up as 69,701, so I just say it’s about 70K words.
Awww, YEA!!!!! The more books to sign the merrier!!! 😉 THANK YOU SOOOO MUCH!!!!! 🙂
God gives His hardest battles to His strongest soldiers.
TeenWritersNook.comFebruary 1, 2021 at 4:06 pm #91274WOOOOHOOO!!! Of course I’d be more than happy to give you some feedback! Your book sounds exactly like the type of book I would pick up in a bookstore, so it’d be great to read!! That’s super exciting you’re sending it to agents! Let me know how everything works out for you :>
70,000 words??? Amazing! That’s a goal I want to reach too! 🙂
*high fives *does a happy dance
Keep up the good work!
February 1, 2021 at 4:12 pm #91275AWESOME!!! Well, if you wanna read the first chapter and let me know your thoughts, I’ve got it here.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FT_sp6FVakheB3gVLa2KBWFYHlZfR3YeVa4vZR5CpXg/edit?usp=sharing
Aww, that’s SOOO AWESOME!!!! Especially, ’cause sometimes I worry that I’m the only person who’d wanna read this story!!!!! <33 THANK YOU!!!!!! That’s the longest story I’ve ever completed!! YOU CAN TOTALLY MAKE IT to 70K too!!!!!! <33 THANK YOU!!!!!!
God gives His hardest battles to His strongest soldiers.
TeenWritersNook.comFebruary 1, 2021 at 5:07 pm #91285I just read your first chapter!!! AND I LOVE IT SO MUCH!! Your writing style, your introduction of Colin, your tension, your everything!! I’m tempted to read it again! I love the way you introduced Colin (I’m already so interested in his character), and just wow! You put so much information into the first chapter, but it doesn’t feel rushed at all. It’s a perfect balance, I think.
(And I’m so interested to find out what happens when he finds the lamp…)
If you have any more to send, I’d be more than happy to read it!! 🙂 Thanks for sharing it, by the way!
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February 1, 2021 at 9:49 pm #91306OH MY GOODNESS!!!! Girl, just a HUNDRED MILLION THANK YOUS FOR THIS!!!!!!! You have no idea how much all of this means to me!!!! Honestly, I’ve been wondering if I’m just wasting my time here, sooo this just means SOOO MUCH to me!!! THANK YOU!!!!!! 🙂
You’re welcome! THANK YOU for reading!!! I do have a beta reading group going through this story. Would you like to be added to the Google Docs? Don’t feel pressured in any way!! I’d have to know your email and I TOTALLY understand if that’s not something you wanna share!!! Promise!! You can never be too safe online, or that’s what I always believe!
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TeenWritersNook.comFebruary 2, 2021 at 1:29 pm #91354Anyone on?
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#ProtectSebFebruary 2, 2021 at 1:32 pm #91356I need to do some writing but…….lol
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#ProtectSebFebruary 2, 2021 at 4:26 pm #91365Hey Issabelle! (and everyone else!) Sorry I sorta dropped off the face of the internet *embarrassed grin*. I’ve been doing battle with some magazine submission guidelines, pesky boxes under the bed (who knew there was so much stuff to organize under there?!!), and stuff for school.
Anywho! How have you been? How’s life and writing?
My sister happened to be in the room while I was reading your Into The Lamp summary. We both like it. It’s similar in structure to a lot of great book blurbs. The only thing I’d suggest is to consider condensing it; to us, it seems a bit long.
Also, my sister was confused about this line: “…and now Colin has four weeks to fix his life, impress the richest man in town’s daughter, and make sure by the time his genie leaves, his heart doesn’t follow.”
She isn’t sure who Colin’s affection is for; the rich man’s daughter or the genie? (Also, the sudden mention of the rich man’s daughter sorta threw her. It’s a bit unclear how this girl fits into the plot.)
And also, this line is a bit unclear: “When Colin discovers someone is after him, seeking the genie’s power for some mysterious desire that he wants no part of…” (who is he, the ‘someone’ or Colin?)
All in all, good job! Keep up the hard work; I know you can do this! 🙂
Hey! (I think we met in the ‘Start Here’ forum.) I’m still trying to remember everyone’s name lol!
Anyway, how’s it going? How’s your writing coming along?
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February 2, 2021 at 5:44 pm #91366@imwritehere1920 Hiya! Going fairly well. Almost to 13,000 words in my first draft so ya.
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#ProtectSebFebruary 2, 2021 at 6:14 pm #91367Oh, count me in!! *claps hands* I’d love to join the group! Plus, I have some experience with Google Docs already, so I’m familiar with it. So my email is this… alexalouwilliams@gmail.com *cringes* This is an ancient email, so it’s a little cringeworthy, but that’s it. Let me know how to join and I’d be super happy to!! 🙂 It sounds neat! BTW, sorry for the late reply.
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