Wanna critique my first crack at a comic?

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We crazy people are the normal ones.

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jake struggling even more.

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sees hand reaching toward him.

Jake opens his mouth to scream/gasp?

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I might cut him opening his mouth and he just faints instead?

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show that water in lungs

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hand grabbing his chest as he goes unconscious

 

 

 

aaand that’s episode 1!

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[MineralizedWritings]

@scoutfinch180

I don’t have time to look at the whole thing, but from the first ones, It’s really good! I don’t see anything really I would change. I personally like large lettering, but that might not be your taste. Your poses are so dynamic! In general, the flow is really good, and the smaller panels to show details are a great addition. I wouldn’t change a thing, unless you wanted to more lettering. I would say That I’m missing context as to whether this is on earth and what year it is, maybe you could have some text or something. Overall, great job!!

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Thank you for reading this! I hope you have a good day/night/wherever you are!

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It’s another world that has interplanetary travel in it’s solar system, it’s not as widespread and casual as star- wars since large-scale items can’t be brought through unlike living organisms and what they have on them at the time.

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[LoopyLin]

@scoutfinch180

I’m sorry I read this a while ago but never actually responded. (Lol I tend to do that a lot.) I really like it so far! The plot is really intriguing and so is the world building.

Also, I can re-read it later if you want me to give more critiques.

Space Princess ✨🪐 intp artist

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@loopylin

Thank you! I did actually pause this project to work on something simpler so I could come back to this story with fresh eyes and a better idea of where to go with it, but I’d still love to hear your thoughts!

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@loopylin

also, if you need critiques in turn, I’m happy to give them!

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