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    Scoutillus Finch
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      (Jake) chases Fabian

      establishing shot to indicate that they’re headed toward the silos thus Jake is now closer to the ocean instead of Fabian.

      We crazy people are the normal ones.

      #158534
      Scoutillus Finch
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        We crazy people are the normal ones.

        #158535
        Scoutillus Finch
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          (Jake) *draws pistol* *aims* *fires*

          *bullet ricochetes off helmet and glances off Jake’s helmet, knocking him down.*

          We crazy people are the normal ones.

          #158536
          Scoutillus Finch
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            We crazy people are the normal ones.

            #158537
            Scoutillus Finch
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              (Fabian) *feeels crack in helmet*

              *approaches Jake cautiously*

              “a-are you ok?”

              We crazy people are the normal ones.

              #158538
              Scoutillus Finch
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                We crazy people are the normal ones.

                #158539
                Scoutillus Finch
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                  (Jake) *straightens and aims gun at Fabian, mouth and some scars exposed*

                  (Fabian) *shocked and scared, lifts blaster and says, “I dont’ want to hurt you… please stop.”

                  pannel that’s zoomed out, Jake standing on the edge of the ocean

                  We crazy people are the normal ones.

                  #158540
                  Scoutillus Finch
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                    We crazy people are the normal ones.

                    #158541
                    Scoutillus Finch
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                      (fabian) “Maybe we can help each other?”

                      (Jake) *steps backward and boot cracks edge* *hand shaking* “You’re really stupid for a… whatever you are”

                      Pannel with Fabian’s hurt face.

                      We crazy people are the normal ones.

                      #158542
                      Scoutillus Finch
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                        We crazy people are the normal ones.

                        #158543
                        Scoutillus Finch
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                          (Fabian) *sighs* “Sorry about this.” *yeets gun.*

                          We crazy people are the normal ones.

                          #158544
                          Scoutillus Finch
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                            We crazy people are the normal ones.

                            #158545
                            Scoutillus Finch
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                              *hits Jake in stomach, knocking him back into water”

                              We crazy people are the normal ones.

                              #158546
                              Scoutillus Finch
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                                We crazy people are the normal ones.

                                #158547
                                Scoutillus Finch
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                                  Jake starts sinking, panic setting in with the red. he’s thrashing in the water

                                   

                                  any tips for showing how he’s struggling to swim?

                                  We crazy people are the normal ones.

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