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    Scoutillus Finch
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      Paris) “It’s dissappointing you can’t move on…”

      “Given how heartless you were with that girl of yours.”

      We crazy people are the normal ones.

      #158502
      Scoutillus Finch
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        We crazy people are the normal ones.

        #158503
        Scoutillus Finch
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          (Jake,) “She didn’t matter.”

          “You should know that about me.”

          *Showing panels of Jake’s memories of her, their appearances looking shadowy and vague, his dark, unless in contact with her light figure.*

          We crazy people are the normal ones.

          #158504
          Scoutillus Finch
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            We crazy people are the normal ones.

            #158505
            Scoutillus Finch
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              (Paris) “Good. you should do that with Fabian.”

              (Jake, irritated) “I HAVE.”

              *Pannel that’s an establishing shot that shows the silos and the ocean*

              We crazy people are the normal ones.

              #158507
              Scoutillus Finch
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                We crazy people are the normal ones.

                #158508
                Scoutillus Finch
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                  (Paris) “Are you sure?”

                  (Jake)

                  *showing past memories of Fabian*

                  Fabian when born

                  Fabian fixing something

                  teaching Jake math

                  callign out for help

                  asking if Jake’s ok.

                  saying he missed him.

                  news of fabian’s death on sci-fi television.

                  We crazy people are the normal ones.

                  #158509
                  Scoutillus Finch
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                    We crazy people are the normal ones.

                    #158510
                    Scoutillus Finch
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                      (Paris) “It’s your fault he’s dead.”

                      We crazy people are the normal ones.

                      #158511
                      Scoutillus Finch
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                        We crazy people are the normal ones.

                        #158512
                        Scoutillus Finch
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                          (Paris) “How many times do i have to tell you to get over it?”

                          We crazy people are the normal ones.

                          #158513
                          Scoutillus Finch
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                            We crazy people are the normal ones.

                            #158514
                            Scoutillus Finch
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                              (Paris) “Your only use now is an errand boy, and even then, I’m sure you’ll fall into some water or something and drown yourself by accident.”

                              (Jake)

                              *Crawls out of snowdrift*

                              We crazy people are the normal ones.

                              #158515
                              Scoutillus Finch
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                                We crazy people are the normal ones.

                                #158516
                                Scoutillus Finch
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                                  (Jake)

                                  *hears snow crunchign as something heavy is walking*

                                  *freezes*

                                  (Paris) “what’s that noise?”

                                  (Jake, whispering) “later.”

                                  *turns off ansible*

                                  *louder crunch*

                                  We crazy people are the normal ones.

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