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Note on dialogue grammar:
“Probably.” Zahlin said, drawing the blade. “Nahim, put that sword down now. I’m not asking twice.”
You want a comma after ‘probably’: “Probably,” Zahlin said…
The ‘probably’ is connected to ‘Zahlin said.’ You do want a period after ‘Zahlin said, drawing the blade.’ like you put. Just a habit you should get into.
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That was far enough. Ellis drew his own sword, which burned green.
“Nahim, put. The sword. Away. This is for your own good.”
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? Appreciator of BooksOh, then I must be weird. I thought Florida was famous for it’s invasive species, sorry about that. Must be thinking of some other state.
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Nahim
“I don’t consider anything for my own good when someone has a sword and I don’t.”
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Ellis
Ellis scratched his head, confused.
“You literally just drew your sword.”
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? Appreciator of BooksI’m loving this…
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Nahim
“I was saying, I don’t consider it good for me when you have a sword and you want me to put mine away.”
He’s got a bad headache.
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Ellis
Ellis sighed in exasperation.
“You drew your sword first. You can still put it away.”
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? Appreciator of BooksOh it’s fine!! I would describe Florida as a tiny Australia, sooo there may be a lot of wierd things here. I’ve probably just lived here so long that I don’t even notice tbh.
(Not that Australia is wierd, but how you see Florida I would guess is how I imagine Australia. Lol.)
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Nahim
“You are making no sense.” Nahim tapped his thigh twice and traced out a design with his finger.
Note:has to do with Realn armor and how it works.
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I’m enjoying this conversation between the characters BTW. Lol.
"YoUr mOtHeR mAkEs MeDiOcRe PiEs!"
Ellis
“Nahim, you are making no sense.”
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? Appreciator of BooksZahlin
Zahlin snapped his Sword back into its sheath. “If this goes too far,” He said, “I will intervene.”
Exit pursued by bear
Nahim
“Then we agree. Now are you going to let me go do my assignments in peace and forget about Zahlin and I and our duel, or do I have to fight my way?”
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