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Note on dialogue grammar:
“Probably.” Zahlin said, drawing the blade. “Nahim, put that sword down now. I’m not asking twice.”
You want a comma after ‘probably’: “Probably,” Zahlin said…
The ‘probably’ is connected to ‘Zahlin said.’ You do want a period after ‘Zahlin said, drawing the blade.’ like you put. Just a habit you should get into.
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That was far enough. Ellis drew his own sword, which burned green.
“Nahim, put. The sword. Away. This is for your own good.”
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📚 Appreciator of BooksOh, then I must be weird. I thought Florida was famous for it’s invasive species, sorry about that. Must be thinking of some other state.
"You need French Toast."
#AnduthForever (hopefully 💕)Nahim
“I don’t consider anything for my own good when someone has a sword and I don’t.”
"You need French Toast."
#AnduthForever (hopefully 💕)Ellis
Ellis scratched his head, confused.
“You literally just drew your sword.”
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"You need French Toast."
#AnduthForever (hopefully 💕)Nahim
“I was saying, I don’t consider it good for me when you have a sword and you want me to put mine away.”
He’s got a bad headache.
"You need French Toast."
#AnduthForever (hopefully 💕)Ellis
Ellis sighed in exasperation.
“You drew your sword first. You can still put it away.”
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📚 Appreciator of BooksOh it’s fine!! I would describe Florida as a tiny Australia, sooo there may be a lot of wierd things here. I’ve probably just lived here so long that I don’t even notice tbh.
(Not that Australia is wierd, but how you see Florida I would guess is how I imagine Australia. Lol.)
"Great winds of a derecho, you're a scary bird!"
Nahim
“You are making no sense.” Nahim tapped his thigh twice and traced out a design with his finger.
Note:has to do with Realn armor and how it works.
"You need French Toast."
#AnduthForever (hopefully 💕)I’m enjoying this conversation between the characters BTW. Lol.
"Great winds of a derecho, you're a scary bird!"
Ellis
“Nahim, you are making no sense.”
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Zahlin snapped his Sword back into its sheath. “If this goes too far,” He said, “I will intervene.”
A disturbingly short time ago, in a land uncomfortably close by...
Nahim
“Then we agree. Now are you going to let me go do my assignments in peace and forget about Zahlin and I and our duel, or do I have to fight my way?”
"You need French Toast."
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