Enid

@rae

Felicity 

“Uh huh. Real convincing.”

Chase looked uncomfortable.

“I know about a broken vending machine nearby that you can get free drinks out of,” Felicity continued. “I can show you if you want. Maybe that would cheer you up? Unless you’d rather go to class. Do you like soda?”

@hybridlore

Yeah, I had considered it…. but they wouldn’t work together.

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h

Yeah, that makes sense. I’ve read the Ilyon Chronicles, which kind of has a similar vibe to your story’s time period and world, and one of the side characters (Christian) married a former prostitute after she became a believer. So, maybe it kind of reminded me of that, I don’t know.

@whalekeeper @loopylin

tbh, may would be probably best

@whalekeeper @elishavet-pidyon

Lois

“I, well…” Lois adjusted his glasses, avoiding eye contact with the others. “Leaving isn’t really an option for me. Especially when I’m older. My family…” he trailed off, and they walked in silence for a moment.

Then he cleared his throat and continued.

“This school is my escape, I suppose. I’m just…[Read more]

@beth-torres

You’re alive! Yay! KP has not been behaving itself lately.

The memes are wonderful😂

Thanks hehe

@rae Aww those are so cute! And the colors look so smooth. I love them.

@keilah-h

well good.

@keilah-h    @hybridlore

Exactly. She is not a love interest.

Also, another reason her and julian interacting  a lot wouldn’t be a good idea is because she has not had good involvment with men so she is really, really raw in that area and needs extra space.

@the_lost-journal

Psst, Phillip. Get rid of Piper next, will you?

@ellette-giselle

Yep lol.

Yeah, that makes sense. I couldn’t remember if it was an area he went through often or not.

Gotcha. Yeah, I get that. I was wondering if she might become a love interest for Julian, but if not, it’s probably better not to involve her too much.

@hybridlore

No problem. I guessed I’d get your attention with the second scene rather then the first. 😂

Well, I mentioned that Julian didn’t ever go down there, so his reputation got around through gossip rather then his own words.

She will become a part of the church, but she and Julian will not really have any scenes together. 1, it’s not…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I could see people getting confused and overwhelmed since there’s so many of them hahaha

This reminded me of a time a visitor to our church told my dad that the number of kids he had intimidated her. She was completely serious and never came back. There were only four of us at the time too. XD

@ellette-giselle

To be honest, I kind of guessed she was going to be a prostitute, so Julian’s reaction seemed a little much (especially to seeing her bare shoulder or whatever lol.) But then I reminded myself that it was different back then, so it made sense.

I would like to see her become a bigger part of the story, unless that doesn’t wor…[Read more]

Yayy success

@raxforge

Mateo would be right on the line of arson and murder, lol

I can add him in. XD it’s somewhat concerning how full those two categories are.

@whalekeeper

You hit the nail on the head. In-story, little Hugo steals rare spices because he wants to learn to make fancy pastries and tea leaves.

Hehe I knew it.

I could also see…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Yep that’s true.

YES!! Thank you! It is!

@hybridlore

If you can pause a moment in your sorrow over Leon, what did you think of the scene with Julian and Rosalind?

@keilah-h

I’ve tried. I think she enjoys tormenting us 😂

@hybridlore

Yeah. A friend told me to split it or else he’ll wait to read it when he’s in solitary confinement. 😂

@keilah-h

Yeah! I’m glad you mentioned Julian. Most of the focus seems to be on Leon. I wonder why………… 🤔🤣

Do you think I’m really gonna tell you that?

one thing I’ll suggest, is that I feel like you don’t really introduce the family to us in the first few chapters. At first I wasn’t even sure if Blake was their sibling or not XDXD

They do have a HUGE family, so setting a solid foundation and making all the siblings and the parents unique and established in our minds would be a big thing you…[Read more]

@esther-c

Sorry it took me so long to get to this!!!
I like it a lot!!!! <3 keep it up!!!!