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@linus-smallprint

I need to read Little House on the Prairie again.

*Poofs out of nowhere* *Nods* Mm, classic. Has it inspired part of your story or…? *Poofs away again*

*Returns the normal way by walking* Just wanted to say your chapters are really solid, and I can pretty much pick any of them, read it, and have an interesting time. I can…[Read more]

@loopylin @people @etc

This poem doesn’t make much sense by nature soo XD But it’s fun to say out loud.

– Sensory Overload –

The cheeto dust sticks to my fingers.

Zappy plastic casts itself through my chloroplasts –

A science fiction invasion.

Suddenly life consists of balance,

Yin and Yang,

As the tang of cheese and sweat give voice…[Read more]

@loopylin

Poor Ellie, especially, she shouldn’t have to touch wet noodles anymore. Gross. I wrote a poem about washing dirty dishes, once. It’s a little weird, but I’ll post it in a poem thread

@the_lost-journal

Ah, she is vengeful and sad. You could give her a little peace at the end; maybe she finds out what truly happened to her husband.

*Okay, now I am closing this topic of further plank submissions*

*That was the last one, guys*

*Creaks open the door to this topic* *Blows away the dust*

I have a potential idea for a character, someone who falls into a gray antagonistic role. But all that to say, three things need to come across in his character:

1. He needs to be a real threat.

2. He also needs to be likable and fun to watch, preferably one of the most fun.

3. It…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Great!! It took maybe fifteen minutes so I should clean it up a little. My pencil battery died and I used my finger for all the shade blocking 😂

@the_lost-journal

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…You are heartless.

@raxforge

In fights, it might help to give some hints at Rax’s weaknesses? I think of a fight like a dialogue, and the characters take turns knocking stamina off each other until something tips the scales.

@ellette-giselle

Oh I don’t think Marcel is invincible. He was actually quiet fun to RP with because he isn’t.

Phew, okay good! The idea when attacking Marcel is to tire him physically/emotionally. After a certain point his reflexes stop working and he just swings blindly at stuff XD

 She seems quite stiff and….. maybe harsh, in a weird kind o…

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@ellette-giselle

Barnes isn’t overpowered… She literally doesn’t have any powers and she gets hurt all the time in fights.

Apparently Marcel is tired of fighting and would rather go to the school prom?

He’s not tired of fighting, he was just badly hurt and needs a minute. I must admit I wasn’t expecting him to be healed right away, that was…[Read more]

@rae

It’s good! It gives a very clear picture of what’s happening, and how guilty Nahim is, while also confirming that the author knows it isn’t Nahim’s fault. Gives a clear picture of how his mindset needs to change.

Also Barnes doesn’t have to be there all the time, and she can’t be in two places at once so she won’t eliminate all the fighting opportunities in the story. I just felt like there could be some adult character to balance out all the chaos whenever we need her.

@ellette-giselle

I figured if any other agents pop up, it’s Barnes’ responsibility as a new authority, so she’s going to attempt wiping them out as soon as possible. But if they don’t appear then she will just do a sweep of the school and everything will be fine. It’s your call.

@rae @raxforge

Marcel

Alpha and Rax whispered a little, and didn’t notice Barnes heading for the door. “Since you are so eager to catch the bad guys,” she threw over her shoulder, “why don’t you lead me to the rest of them?”

@ellette-giselle

I think he wants some indication of where any remaining agents are.

@raxforge @rae

Marcel

“There’s a difference between fighting for something important and looking for a fight. As for the pain part, you shouldn’t want to hurt anybody. That’s the difference between a hero and a sadist who coincidentally saves somebody.” She didn’t move, gauging their expressions.

My interest is also piqued so… XD

@raxforge @rae @koshka @ellette-giselle

Marcel

“One, don’t go looking for fights; two, someone who is innocent might get hurt,” Barnes said. “You may leave now, but I want to see the kids who were being attacked as soon as possible.”