WalkByFaith

@esther-c

In the first chapter, the biggest thing I noticed was a lot of telling/info-dumping. It’s not wrong to give some background in the first chapter, but the key word is “some.” I felt like there was a lot of information about her father and how he had disappeared a while ago. I absolutely love how you described Sef missing him, but I do th…

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@esther-c

Livia

“It depends…” Liv pursed her lips. “Like, it depends on what mood we’re in to begin with, and it also depends on what exactly the person says. Like, do you have an example?” She laughed a little at the strangeness of their conversation.

Gosh, I forgot about this 🤣 I may join, we will see

@loopylin

Lol XD

@keilah-h @esther-c @loopylin @freedomwriter76 @acancello @whalekeeper

GUYS WE SHOULD TOTALLY BRING THIS BACK!!!

@acancello

Oh my goodness! I can’t believe I forgot your tag, haha! This is funny XD

@acancello

Oh my goodness! I can’t believe I forgot your tag, haha! This is funny XD

@allison @grcr @thearcaneaxiom

Thanks guys!!! (:

@thearcaneaxiom

I feel like they would need to do a little more convincing to make the populace complacent. There will always be resistance, and that can’t be avoided, but to get a general backing, you need to convince them that it’s safe & beneficial, not just convince them that a new moon is ok because it natural. Looking natural could be par…

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@savannah_grace2009

Woohoo!!!! Great job getting it publsihed!! I just read it 😭 😍 (and commented) Its so good, but so sad.

@thearcaneaxiom

Yes! I’m so happy! It FINALLY got published!!

@whalekeeper

Look, I never wanted to make you feel like you were less capable of handling criticism than the rest of us. My points about God and self-publishing were more directed towards everyone on the thread, but even so, I got hung up on the details and misunderstood you. That was my fault, not yours, and I apologize ❤️

I’m sorry I made you f…

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@lightoverdarkness @whalekeeper

Howdy, Natalie and Hannah!

Awh, man, I miss being on KP; I should be on more this year. I love having fellow writers for Christ! See ya on CWW! (And I found ye olde Gwyneth Wise there, in case anyone wants me to pass on any messages to her.) 😁

@thearcaneaxiom

Do you have much of an idea of why they designed it the way the did? Also, am I misinterpreting any of the design?

Well, my main idea was to have it look as ‘natural’ as possible so that the citizens would be more open to the idea and allow it to happen while not realize the dangers that it has the potential of causing.

The issue…

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@keilah-h

Thanks! Those are great, I’ll add them to my list 🙂

@savannah_grace2009

Ummmmm……that’s like one of my nightmares…like my biggest fear is evil scientists experimenting on me!!!! (I know, I read too much lol)

I both read and play to many video games…. One of my biggest fear (From video games and reading is…. Puppets XD *shudders*

Thanks for the suggestion, Ill add that idea to the list!