Raegan Aubrey

@rae

Yeah, I was a little worried about that…do you think it would help if I gave Brenna’s master a name? The young soldier must remain unnamed, for my own reasons, but I could give the master a name. I’ll rearrange the paragraphs so it’s easier to understand what’s going on.

Yeah, I think that would help a lot.

For the title, maybe “Murderer”?

@jonas

you’re fine!! no worries! 🙂

@highscribeofaetherium

Koshtin

Koshtin’s crooked smile faided on his lips. His eyes went pale as death, his hands had a black vapor. The black vapor became like a ring around her neck. She felt something choking her, but it couldn’t be pulled away, for her fingers passed through it, yet it still held her. Her feet floated six inches above the…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @savannah_grace2009

The biggest thing I noticed for critiquing was that it was kinda confusing with all the characters who was doing what. I got lost on who the soldiers were and who the slaves were in the first few paragraphs and kinda got lost on what everyone was doing whilst reading.

Yeah, I was a little worried about…[Read more]

@rae

Yeah, I noticed the same thing as Freedom. It did get a little confusing. But overall it’s really good!

@thearcaneaxiom

Um….I just listened to it and….how?????

How is that physically possible! that’s kinda disturbing, XD

It’s so good though!

@rae

Oooh I like it!

@esther-c

Livia

“Do you know what dorm you’re staying in?” Callista asked her.

Liv shook her head. “No, I just got here. Is there a place to go check in or something? I thought there would be more people around…where is everyone?”

Glace

The eyes look weird cuz I had to paste the irises in and I’ve never done that before…Any tips on how to do that better?

@esther-c

Chase Duke

Chase hung back as Fynn greeted a blue girl, her horse ad what guessed to be his really really close friend. I don’t belong here. He quickly pulled his hood over his face again, hoping the two girls and odd horse wouldn’t notice him. He slouched against the wall, watching as the four talked.

The horse interested him the mo…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxion

Thanks for the reply

@freedomwriter76

I like your forum signature.

@everyone

Robert Robinson

6’2″. Brown hair with blond highlights, tanned skin, blue eyes.

Used to be MC of the Solomon Team but I got rid of that book, it actually was a historical fiction, not a sci-fi or fantasy.

Robert was born July 28th, 1975 to Richard and Rachel Robinson. When he was six, h…[Read more]

@hybridlore

OH MY GOSH I LOVE THAT SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thank you!!!!!

@highscribeofaetherium

Koshtin

“How can I trust you? You have given me no reason to believe that you would be telling the truth. Aside from the fact that you want us to murder these Lillenings, which honestly gives me even less reason to trust you.”

Koshtin smiled at her his twisted smile.

“My rebel lady, which of the twelve planets are you…[Read more]

@esther-c

btw, Fynn and Lukas are friends, not brothers.

Oops.

(I think after a couple more RPs, I’m gonna have Fynn find Callista who’s with Sara’s Livia. If you’re good with that.)

Yeah, that’s fine.

Chase Duke

Aletheia? Where on Adalland (this name will most likely change later) is there a city called Aletheia? Chase was never good at geogr…[Read more]

Is it my understanding of earlier debate that you are bouncing back and forth the idea of Is laying the hands on the head necessary for supernatural healing?

@freedomwriter76

Yeah, I have a charrie who’s like Nathan as far as the place he holds in my heart, his name is Robert Robinson, and I rarely talk about him, but he’s very special to me.

@grcr

335!!!!! How long have you been creating charries? I don’t think I have that many…Unless you count the purple dragons and dust bees, I don’t think they count.

Wow, girl, that’s insane.

@thearcaneaxiom @jonas

I like this chapter as well!

Thanks!

Yeah, I just wanted the chapter to end on an emotional climax. I kind of wanted short chapter breaks, because I don’t like it how in books some authors make like 40 page long chapters. I kind of like it in two different chapters for some reason.