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Esther posted an update 1 year, 3 months ago
Ok, I’m tagging a lot of people for this, but don’t feel obligated to reply.
So, I’ve gotten stuck in my current WIP, but as I work through that slowly, I want to return to an older WIP that I worked on over the summer and really want to refine. It’s only in a first draft, but I’d like to have a critique partner for it.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Yes, I thought of you as a quieter girl. Lover of books. Long light/medium brown hair. Writer, friendly, softer spoke.
*shrug*
Not sure if any of that is true. (except I know the hair isn’t.)
I mean yeah, that sounds pretty accurate. I may be more talkative than you pictured, but everything else sounds right.
Wait a s…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Wait a minute… so, what?? You’re introducing like a middle-East themed culture??
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Woohooooo!!!!!!! *victory dance*
So…you’re introducing a new people culture?
Oh, the romans/germans are called the Empire? Empirians? *cackling*
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
It has to be that. Everything else looks Roman!
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Okay…are you talking about those guys with turbans? They’re not Ardentin…right? Or Roman? (I forgot what those Romans were called…)
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
*gasp* I have to find that hidden odd thing!
Oh…for some reason I thought they were brothers…oh…that makes sense.
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 3 months ago
@theduckator
Sorry…again…
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 3 months ago
@power @jonas @whalekeeper @theduckator @elishavet-pidyon @freed_and_redeemed
Sorry, the tags didn’t tag you.
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 3 months ago
Participants/potential participants:
@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah-h
The others:@power @calyhuge @whalekeeper @theducktator @elishavet-pidyon @the_lost-journal @trailblazer @jonas @beth-torres @euodia-vision @thearcaneaxiom @smiley @freed_and_redeemed @loopylin @felicity @liberty
You know who Lindsey Stirling is? Lol, yeah, I did have a picture of someone with a violin and like a library at some point, so that checks out.
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
You also gave me the feeling of a girl who loves old books and antiques…sort of like an 18’s librarian.
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
I always imagined you with a violin and kind of looking like Lindsey Stirling since that was the first profile image I saw of you…
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Is there supposed to be something special about Julian’s eyes? He gets 2 close-ups of his blue irises…they’re blue, right?
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Feels like a battle vibe, but oh well. The Empire does do a lot of fighting, right? But Leon and Julian themselves wouldn’t really be a part of it probably.
I decide lots of things about people I don’t know because me mind likes to have a face to go with a name, and when I don’t have one, I view what I know as the building block…
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
There’s also a lot of archery.
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Oh oh. Who is that shadowy masked fellow? The villain of the story?
Oh yes…I didn’t read your other two books…so I don’t have anything to say except…you killed a character. So sad. And yet, glad.
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
I was just planning to get to that! So…you have ship in it??!!! Cool! Maybe a Paul scene? (These are my random thoughts…)
Uh oh…I see an arena…don’t tell me they get thrown into that…and wolves…*gulp* hopefully, they’re nice wolves?? I always love nice wolf characters…I see a lot of young children…oh, someone…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Hah, you always say that whenever I guess at what’s going to happen. But you do try to throw me off a lot, so I’m just not going to listen. 😅
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Actually, I’mma remake the moodboards, hehehe. So they shall be revealed later this week. :PP
@esther-c
I replied but didn’t tag you. Not sure if you got it.
I would be willing to try and help with this. You know my views on Romance are rather different than norm, and I believe highschool romantic relationships aren’t healthy. But I’m willing to give it a shot.
I also do edit. I’m not a line-by-line editor, but I have worked as a plot/character/story editor before.
We do have different beliefs on…[Read more]
I appreciate the offer!! Truly!
But like you said, we might not work super well together because of our different viewpoints. So yeah, right now I’d say no, but I will keep you in mind! :))
No problem! I can be your last resort if no one else offers. 😉
Sounds good. 😉 Let me know if you want to be tagged when I post the chapters on here some time! :))
Mm. Sounds interesting, but I’m totally unqualified. I don’t think I’d be able to help much… Sorry… 😅😑
Hey no worries! 🤗
I’m sorry, I don’t think I can help you 🙁
That’s totally fine, girl! ☺️
I’m definitely interested in reading your novel, but I’ve read almost no YA, so I wouldn’t be much help.
No worries! I’ll be sure to tag you tho when I start sharing it on here!!
Awesome! 🙂
@esther-c I would love to help! This went into my spam for some reason, so I’m sorry I didn’t get back to you. Are you still looking for someone?
Actually…I think you might be perfect. You gave some great feedback on my short story, so I’m sure you could do the same for my novel! :))
I’ll PM you later this week with more details and the link to the doc. Thank you so much!!! 🤗
Awesome! I love family and sibling dynamics, and I also read a good amount of YA, so this seems right up my alley! (Although I won’t be able to help much with the 90s references, haha.)
Do you still have my email from the short story critique?
Yay yay!! (Oh I know, right?? I’ve asked my parents and some other older writers I’ve met through KDWC, and even though they gave me a lot to use [plus Google, lol], there’s still something difficult about getting it right since I didn’t live then 🤪)
Yes I believe so!
@esther-c Yeah, that totally makes sense! I was gonna say, ask your parents xD. But I’m sure it’s still difficult.
Great!! 😄
I may have to get some YA recs from you sometime, because I struggle to find clean fiction that I would actually enjoy 😭
Oh definitely! I’m sure I can come up with a list. Middle grade stuff can be great if it’s well done, because content is so much better. 😉
@hybridlore
Please tag me if you post recommendations! I want to read YA, but it’s usually filthy and cringe.
For sure!! Until you come across that one middle school relationship that somehow works out perfectly. 😂
Ok for some reason even though I still see your comments on the short story doc, it won’t let me view your email. 😅 Could you share that again with me so I can share the other doc?? I’ll tell you as soon as I see it if you don’t want to leave your email up.
Awesome! Tysm!! I’ll probably send you the doc tomorrow since I need to make a few notes on it first. :))
Ok I added you to the document! You should get an email about it I believe. (:
Hoo boy. I’d love to, but uhhhh…I wouldn’t be any help. I’m a terrible critiquer and my romance experience is practically nil. You would probably help me more than I help you….sorry!
Funny enough though, my own romance work (a fanfic) took place in 1970 in New Mexico. What are the odds?
Ahh, no problem! :))
No way! That’s so cool! XD
Yeah it was just a consequence of how the original story was set up, but it’s funny to think about.
I doubt your characters will experience anything even close to mine though lol
Oh dear, was it a Star Wars fanfic?? In that case, I hope my charries aren’t handling the types of weapons they use. 🤣
No, it was something else, but yeah there were a lot of weapons involved XD
My Star Wars fanfics don’t really cross over into our world. Yet.
Though I suppose in a fanfic, you could do whatever 🤷🏻♀️
Oh duhhhh 🤦🏻♀️ I’ve watched like all the Star Wars movies, I should know they don’t take place on earth 🤣
lolllll no biggie.