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It looks good! I don’t have any major critiques. It is a very short chapter, but it does a good job of building on the tension. Also, I like the way you described the trees.

It seems a little weird that Olivia and Adeline and Dylan don’t seem to care about their families… well, maybe Dylan a little bit.

@theshadow

Oooo!! I like this!! This is getting good!

And, what if, what if we don’t make it?

This is a little cluncky because of the punctuation. If you did: “And what if–– what if we don’t make it?” or “And what if. . . what if we don’t make it?” either of those would work well. Use the dash if you want it to read as a sudden horrif…[Read more]

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AHAHAHAHAHA

(or whatever Snipes’ laugh is like)

even the posts about me being a simp??? Lol

@savannah_grace2009 @theducktator @grcr @smiley @keilah-h @theshadow @trailblazer

A lot of this is actually first draft material since I was adding in stuff, so bear with me 🫣 But I didn’t want to keep y’all waiting. 😉

Chapter 10

“We’re not picking them up, right?” Easton watched Hallie through the rear view mirror.

“No, they’ll mee…[Read more]

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Ooh, okay that’s a good idea. I’ll try that, do you have any book suggestions?

Yes! Let’s see…

• Anything by Robin Jones Gunn — she’s literally my favorite author ever and I absolutely love her writing. I’ve heard mixed opinions on her books (some saying they’re cheesy or unrealistic) but it think they’re really good. If you don’t like…

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@savannah_grace2009

Thanks!! <33

one thing I’ll suggest, is that I feel like you don’t really introduce the family to us in the first few chapters. At first I wasn’t even sure if Blake was their sibling or not XDXD

They do have a HUGE family, so setting a solid foundation and making all the siblings and the parents unique and established in ou…

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@linus-smallprint @ellette-giselle @hybridlore @raxforge @keilah-h @rae @whalekeeper@loopylin @theshadow @arcticanimals @theducktator and @liberty @esther-c @highscribeofaetherium @jonas @grcr

Everyone I can think of! I just got a random person I met on YouTube to join Kingdom pen!!!!! She is a Christian writer! Just like us!!!!! We met in the…[Read more]

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Thank you all for praying! It means everything to me! But I do have some good news and bad news! I feel really bad, because I feel like I lied to you all and made you all stress over nothing, but it was a misunderstanding… Her friend said a word similar to *that word*… but it wasn’t…[Read more]

@theshadow

Awesome, thanks!

@linus-smallprint

Great, thank you!! What made you guess that? You’re right xD

@theshadow

What exactly is contemporary writing? Books that come to mind when I hear this and the projects you are describing are Swallows and Amazons, The Moffats, and one more book I can’t remember the name of where two children discover a hidden town by a lake during summer holidays. (All I remember is that the boy has braces, which remind…[Read more]

@theshadow

Okay, I’m back now. Your latest chapter looks good! And so, the adventure begins…

Looking forward to the next part and seeing what these woods are like!

@theshadow

Nothing immediately comes to mind for the first idea you mentioned, but for the second one, maybe a point of conflict could be something that both brothers are trying to achieve and it turns into a competition… you could go as deep into this as you want, whether it’s just petty sibling arguments or if it goes farther into one of them…[Read more]

@theshadow no worries mate! (Read that in Sniper’s voice XD)

I enjoy being tagged anyway. (Whether you read that in his voice or however you imagine my voice to sound is up to you.)

@theshadow

Really know your characters and try to build conflict between them naturally. (There’s probably lots of articles about that, maybe some even on here.) The better you know and understand your characters, the easier writing will feel, especially if you don’t have a super clear plot and are more just following the events of a certain time…[Read more]

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New chapter is out!

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*bursts in through the door and tumbles onto the ground* *hops up and dusts self off* Did I hear someone mention ConTEmPoRarY fiCtIOn??? 👀 I’m here for it 😎

First of all, make sure you’re reading contemporary!!! Especially within the little genres that you want to focus on. I can’t stress how helpful this is. I know some authors are l…[Read more]

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I read your latest chapter, but don’t have time to comment on it today. That may be the case until Thursday. Don’t worry about waiting for me, you can keep posting more stuff if you have any.

@theshadow I’ve never written contemporary before, actually. All of my stuff has been sci-fi or fantasy.

@theshadow

*subscribes* I’m plotting a contemporary romance series, but I haven’t actually written any yet. Will your books be middle grade or YA? I would say have at least one continuing conflict through the series like how in The Penderwicks on Gardam Street, (my favorite), they have the Save Daddy Plan, or in the 1st  Vanderbeekers book…[Read more]