TheShadow

@theshadow yeah I love the way I did Scout’s and Medic’s faces haha

and the way Medic’s just looking at the bread lol

I imagine his tail is kinda swishing suspiciously underneath his coat

@keilah-h @theshadow @rae

I’m still in! School’s just been busy recently.😅

@keilah-h @theshadow

I’m game!

@theshadow great!

@rae @princesachronicle22 @theducktator @kyronthearcanin what about the rest of you?

@theshadow lol I think you copied my text twice

and thanks!! Here’s the first one:

@theshadow Yeah! Wonder what it is.

@linus-smallprint @highscribeofaetherium @ellette-giselle @grcr @rae @loopylin @keilah-h @theshadow @mineralizedwritings @whomever-I-forgot

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@theducktator @loopylin @stephie @theshadow @ellette-giselle @keilah-h

I changed my mind. There is one more scene I want to write before The Rebel. Chapter the 17th is now The Role Model.

With this chapter, I have now reached 50,000 words! Whew!

Question for you all. While this series is primarily directed towards believers, I want un…[Read more]

@theshadow you’re welcome! I didn’t see your post until now because KP is apparently wigging out and won’t send me emails to any of your latest posts for some reason.

@theshadow

Thank you!!

here’s another

@theshadow cool! So you’re not at like the end of what I’ve written yet.

oh and thanks, I had fun translating the various comics and video transcripts into written form. In fact, I don’t know when I’ll be finished with the story because I still have to wait for the very last comic installment to be released, then I can read it over and decide…[Read more]

@theshadow so….we have traded places…..

now you’re telling me to read your story that you’re afraid is a dumpster fire! (Don’t worry, I think yours is great.)

I would go with what @linus-smallprint says about the new paragraphs whenever a character is talking. Look at my fanfic–the google doc separates the paragraphs out a lot, so I’ll…[Read more]

@theshadow lol yep

oh and thanks. Which loaf scene exactly? Cause there are a couple haha. What point are you at?

I tried to make it as entertaining as I could. Some of it’s derived from official media the developers of the actual game have put out over the years. The plot of the latter two-thirds or so are from a comic series they made (I don’t…[Read more]

@theshadow @whalekeeper

What are they wearing?

XD

Tenz and Reid

Reid pushed the door open, seeing three people on the other side, two men and one woman. The men seemed to be preparing to fight with primitive weapons until Reid had opened the door. Looking at them, his mind immediately jumped to a picture of Ancient Wond that his father had lying…[Read more]

@theshadow

Just read your chapter. I have a couple of things for you.

Firstly, some things about your introduction. I think your intro paragraph to the chapter may be unnecessary. Why? Because soon after, you show us many of these problems in the hushed whispers of the peasants.

Blossom Town’s suffering had only grown worse. The farmers b…

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@theshadow

okay, I really like this, but I have one big thing.

the training fight.

so first off, they would use training swords. Wooden ones or maybe blunt mettle. Mistakes happen in training and the less chance for a knight to get killed the better.
second, training is hard on the weapons so their real swords would be set aside for…[Read more]

@theshadow

I’m not great at critiquing, but I did notice one thing.

Eldred Favri, a knight under Lord Damien, was about 21.

Five today… that would make Ninety. Ninety… ninety of his beloved countrymen, women, and even children, dead.

The boy answered, grinning, then, with an air of pride, added, “I’m 7.” “Seven? Well, that certainly is a fine a…

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Oops, sorry @theshadow I forgot to tag you

@theshadow

Yes, plz come join us!

I love your charries already!

@rae

Barnes

With Reid directing, Barnes swept through multiple passages and rooms, and made sure to get an idea of the layout.

It wasn’t worth saying, but she liked the decor. Rich greens and oranges lined the inner rooms, sparkling against the surface of glass trinkets. Delicate paintings, stained with dust, barely portrayed more than…[Read more]