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It’s as a Vow, and It’s as a Rule

A little child’s first cry,

It’s little voice piercing the sky.

It’s as a vow and it’s as a rule,

That life should spring forth fresh and new.

A little toddler with feet so small,

Pads down the grass that is so tall.

It’s as a vow, and it’s as a rule,

That life should be given to you.

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@jonas

“A hero is the one who bleeds, red drops that fall like planter’s seeds.”

@rae

Yeah, I was a little worried about that…do you think it would help if I gave Brenna’s master a name? The young soldier must remain unnamed, for my own reasons, but I could give the master a name. I’ll rearrange the paragraphs so it’s easier to understand what’s going on.

Yeah, I think that would help a lot.

For the title, maybe “Murderer”?

@jonas

you’re fine!! no worries! 🙂

@whalekeeper

Yeah same for me right now.

And you don’t sound weird.

Also, Felicity is giving me problems right now but I am working on an rp

@highscribeofaetherium

Koshtin

Koshtin’s crooked smile faided on his lips. His eyes went pale as death, his hands had a black vapor. The black vapor became like a ring around her neck. She felt something choking her, but it couldn’t be pulled away, for her fingers passed through it, yet it still held her. Her feet floated six inches above the…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @savannah_grace2009

The biggest thing I noticed for critiquing was that it was kinda confusing with all the characters who was doing what. I got lost on who the soldiers were and who the slaves were in the first few paragraphs and kinda got lost on what everyone was doing whilst reading.

Yeah, I was a little worried about…[Read more]

@rae

Yeah, I noticed the same thing as Freedom. It did get a little confusing. But overall it’s really good!

@thearcaneaxiom

Um….I just listened to it and….how?????

How is that physically possible! that’s kinda disturbing, XD

It’s so good though!

@rae

Oooh I like it!

@esther-c

Livia

“Do you know what dorm you’re staying in?” Callista asked her.

Liv shook her head. “No, I just got here. Is there a place to go check in or something? I thought there would be more people around…where is everyone?”

@whalekeeper

I honestly do not want to jump into this extra mall yet 😅

Fair enough XD

Also, I love Pigeon already he sounds adorable

Glace

The eyes look weird cuz I had to paste the irises in and I’ve never done that before…Any tips on how to do that better?

@esther-c

Chase Duke

Chase hung back as Fynn greeted a blue girl, her horse ad what guessed to be his really really close friend. I don’t belong here. He quickly pulled his hood over his face again, hoping the two girls and odd horse wouldn’t notice him. He slouched against the wall, watching as the four talked.

The horse interested him the mo…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxion

Thanks for the reply

@freedomwriter76

I like your forum signature.

@everyone

Robert Robinson

6’2″. Brown hair with blond highlights, tanned skin, blue eyes.

Used to be MC of the Solomon Team but I got rid of that book, it actually was a historical fiction, not a sci-fi or fantasy.

Robert was born July 28th, 1975 to Richard and Rachel Robinson. When he was six, h…[Read more]

@hybridlore

OH MY GOSH I LOVE THAT SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thank you!!!!!